Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答不够清晰，语法和表达存在较多错误，建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并补充具体时间或年龄。

Example: I started using the internet when I was about eight years old because my primary school had computer classes.

Suggestion: 表达不连贯且语法错误较多，建议使用简单句子直接回答频率，并说明原因，避免重复和不相关内容。

Example: I go online every day now because I need the internet for work and entertainment.

Suggestion: 回答较为完整，但语法和用词有误，建议注意时态一致性和词汇准确性，表达更自然。

Example: Yes, when I was a child, my mother didn't allow me to use the internet for a long time to protect my eyesight, which made me feel sad because I needed it to search for information.

Suggestion: 回答不够明确，表达含糊，建议直接回答问题并用具体理由支持观点，避免语法错误。

Example: I don't think I spend too much time online because the internet is an important part of modern life and helps me stay connected and informed.

Suggestion: 回答内容丰富，但表达不够自然，建议使用更地道的表达方式，注意词汇搭配和句子流畅。

Example: Without the internet, I would spend more time doing physical exercise, reading paper books, making handicrafts, and enjoying a few cocktails in the evening.

× Well, as opposed to thousands generation.

✓ Well, as opposed to thousands of generations.

这里缺少复数名词的复数形式，'generation' 应该用复数形式 'generations'，并且需要加介词 'of' 来连接数量词和名词。

× I studied using the Internet when I was a kid and I have the computer class in my primary school so I learn age.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was a kid and I had computer classes in my primary school so I learned at that age.

句中时态混乱，'studied using the Internet' 不合适，应该用 'started using the Internet' 表示开始使用。'have' 应该用过去式 'had'，'learn' 应该用过去式 'learned'。

× so I learn age. So many ears.

✓ so I learned at that age. So many years.

'age' 需要加介词 'at'，'ears' 是拼写错误，正确应为 'years'。

× Why was a child my mom didn't allowed me to play computer game for long time to keep my eyes health,

✓ When I was a child, my mom didn't allow me to play computer games for a long time to keep my eyes healthy,

'Why' 应为 'When' 表示时间；'allowed' 应用原形 'allow' 因为前面有助动词 'didn't'；'game' 应用复数 'games'；'long time' 前应加冠词 'a'；'health' 应用形容词 'healthy' 修饰 'eyes'。

× but when I grow up I go online and every day 'cause I have been added and I have afraid and to do that.

✓ but when I grew up I went online every day because I have been addicted and I am afraid to do that.

'grow up' 应用过去式 'grew up'；'go' 应用过去式 'went'；'added' 应为 'addicted'；'have afraid' 应为 'am afraid'。

× Yeah, well, I was a child, my mom didn't allow me to use the Internet for long time to protect my eyesight and I feel so sad and disappointed because I really need to use it to search some some things.

✓ Yeah, well, when I was a child, my mom didn't allow me to use the Internet for a long time to protect my eyesight and I felt so sad and disappointed because I really needed to use it to search for some things.

'long time' 前应加冠词 'a'；'feel' 应用过去式 'felt'；'need' 应用过去式 'needed'；'search some some things' 应为 'search for some things'。

× I really need to use it to search some some things.

✓ I really needed to use it to search for some things.

动词 'search' 后应接介词 'for'，表示搜索某物。

× Actually not. Because in contemporary society our life counts, divided into the virtual world and the true word, because the Internet always accompanied with us.

✓ Actually not, because in contemporary society our lives are divided into the virtual world and the real world, as the Internet always accompanies us.

'life counts' 应为复数 'lives'；'true word' 应为 'real world'；'accompanied with us' 应为 'accompanies us'。

× Actually not. Because in contemporary society our life counts, divided into the virtual world and the true word, because the Internet always accompanied with us.

✓ Actually not, because in contemporary society our lives are divided into the virtual world and the real world, as the Internet always accompanies us.

时态错误，'accompanied' 应用现在时 'accompanies'，因为描述的是普遍事实。

× Well, without the Internet I can have more activities in real world such as doing some exercise thing, watch some paper books and do some handicrafts and even I can enjoy drinking a couple of cocktails in the evening time.

✓ Well, without the Internet I can have more activities in the real world such as doing some exercises, reading some paper books, doing some handicrafts, and even enjoying a couple of cocktails in the evening.

'exercise thing' 不合适，应为复数 'exercises'；'watch some paper books' 应为 'reading some paper books'；动词形式应保持一致，使用动名词形式 'doing' 和 'enjoying'。