Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は自然ですが、"Internet"は単数形なので"them"ではなく"it"を使うべきです。また、"And I enjoyed using them throughout the day."は冗長なので削除か簡潔にすると良いでしょう。

Example: I began using the Internet when I was in high school. Back then, I mainly used it for social media platforms, which was a new and exciting way to stay connected with my friends.

Suggestion: "my private"は不自然で、"my personal use"や"my private life"などに直すべきです。また、"at work"の繰り返しを避け、"tools"は単数形の"tool"に修正してください。

Example: I go online almost throughout the day because I use it not only for my personal life, such as Instagram and Facebook, but also for work. It's an efficient and essential tool that helps me complete tasks quickly.

Suggestion: "exam at school"は"an exam at school"と冠詞を付ける必要があります。"touching the answer online"は不自然で、"looking up answers online"などに直しましょう。また、"schools prohibits for students"は文法的に誤りで、"schools prohibit students"が正しいです。

Example: Yes, I can remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet. For example, during an exam at school, because using the Internet would make it easy for students to look up answers online. For this reason, many schools prohibit students from using the Internet during exams.

Suggestion: "which which"の繰り返しを避け、"scrolling the screen"は"scrolling through social media"など具体的にすると良いです。

Example: Yes, absolutely. I think I spend too much time on the Internet, especially on social media platforms. Sometimes I find myself scrolling through social media for hours without noticing, which negatively affects my productivity.

Suggestion: "I had re imagine"は文法的に誤りで、"I can imagine"や"I have to imagine"に直すべきです。"the alternatives"は"alternative ways"の方が自然です。また、"tough situation to everyone"は"a tough situation for everyone"が正しいです。

Example: I can imagine the world without the Internet, but if I couldn't use it, I would have to find alternative ways to stay connected with my friends and family. I imagine it would be a tough situation for everyone.

× Back then, I mainly used them for social media platforms, which was a new and exciting way to stay connected with my friends.

✓ Back then, I mainly used it for social media platforms, which was a new and exciting way to stay connected with my friends.

The pronoun 'them' is plural but refers to 'Internet' which is singular. The correct singular pronoun 'it' should be used to match the singular noun 'Internet'.

× And I enjoyed using them throughout the day.

✓ And I enjoyed using it throughout the day.

The pronoun 'them' is plural but refers to 'Internet' which is singular. The correct singular pronoun 'it' should be used to match the singular noun 'Internet'.

× I use it not only for my private such as Instagram and Facebook, but also for work at work.

✓ I use it not only for my private use such as Instagram and Facebook, but also for work.

The phrase 'my private' is incomplete and should be 'my private use' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'at work' is redundant after 'for work'.

× It's an efficient and essential tools that help me to complete the task quickly.

✓ They're efficient and essential tools that help me to complete tasks quickly.

The subject 'tools' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' (They're) and the adjective 'an' should be removed. Also, 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to match the plural 'tools'.

× One example is exam at school.

✓ One example is exams at school.

The noun 'exam' should be plural 'exams' to refer generally to multiple exams at school, which is more natural in this context.

× For this reason, many schools prohibits for students to use the Internet during the exam.

✓ For this reason, many schools prohibit students from using the Internet during exams.

The verb 'prohibits' should be 'prohibit' to agree with the plural subject 'schools'. Also, 'prohibits for students to use' is incorrect; the correct structure is 'prohibit students from using'. 'Exam' should be plural 'exams' to generalize.

× I go online almost throughout the day because I use it not only for my private such as Instagram and Facebook, but also for work at work.

✓ I go online almost throughout the day because I use it not only for my private use such as Instagram and Facebook, but also for work.

The phrase 'for my private' is incomplete; it should be 'for my private use'. The phrase 'at work' is redundant after 'for work' and should be removed.

× Sometimes I find myself scrolling the screen for hours without notice, which which affects my productivity negatively.

✓ Sometimes I find myself scrolling the screen for hours without noticing, which affects my productivity negatively.

The phrase 'without notice' is incorrect here; it should be 'without noticing' to indicate the action of not realizing the time passing. Also, the repeated word 'which' is a typo and should be corrected to a single 'which'.

× I had re imagine the world without the Internet, but if I couldn't use the Internet I would have to find the alternatives to stay connected with my friends and family.

✓ I had to reimagine the world without the Internet, but if I couldn't use the Internet I would have to find alternatives to stay connected with my friends and family.

The phrase 'had re imagine' is incorrect; it should be 'had to reimagine' to express necessity in the past. Also, 'the alternatives' should be 'alternatives' without 'the' because it refers to alternatives in general.

× I imagine it would be tough situation to everyone.

✓ I imagine it would be a tough situation for everyone.

The phrase 'tough situation' needs the article 'a' before it. Also, 'to everyone' should be 'for everyone' to correctly express the idea of affecting all people.