Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer has a good start by stating when you began using the internet, but it lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise, and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically. For example, explain why you found YouTube and Facebook useful with clear reasons.

Example: I started using the internet when I was 11 years old. At first, I mainly used YouTube and Facebook because they provided entertainment and helped me connect with friends. I believe these platforms are very useful and convenient for everyone.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases like 'it also is bad my knowledge.' Try to use correct grammar and clearer expressions. Use linking words to organize your answer and provide specific reasons why you go online daily.

Example: I go online every day, mainly using YouTube, Facebook, and Instagram. This helps me stay connected with my family and friends. Additionally, I learn new things from videos on YouTube, which makes the internet very convenient for me.

Suggestion: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as 'I weren't allowed' and 'for a kiss.' Try to use correct verb forms and clarify your ideas. Also, connect your sentences smoothly with linking words and provide specific reasons for the restriction.

Example: I remember that I wasn't allowed to use the internet when I was in primary school because my parents wanted me to focus on physical activities and develop social skills. I believe this helped me build a strong sense of community with my classmates.

Suggestion: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear phrases and grammar mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly and use complete sentences. Explain why you spend too much time online and how it affects you, using linking words to organize your thoughts.

Example: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I am easily attracted by interesting content on YouTube and TikTok. As a result, I often lose focus on my studies, which is harmful to my performance.

Suggestion: Your answer has several grammar errors and unclear expressions like 'classic poster child' and 'not good have.' Try to use correct verb tenses and clearer vocabulary. Provide specific details about what you would do without the internet and organize your answer logically.

Example: Without the internet, I would spend more time reading books. Recently, I have been practicing this habit by visiting bookstores to find classic novels. Reading helps me stay focused and improves my creativity.

× I use YouTube and Facebook first because itself my entertainment an connect me to other people and I believe that these platform is really useful, inconvenient for everyone.

✓ I used YouTube and Facebook first because they are my entertainment and connect me to other people, and I believe that these platforms are really useful and convenient for everyone.

The original sentence has incorrect verb forms and subject-verb agreement. 'Use' should be past tense 'used' to match 'started using'. 'Itself' is incorrect; 'they are' refers to platforms. 'An connect' should be 'and connect'. 'Platform is' should be plural 'platforms are'. 'Inconvenient' is the opposite of intended meaning; 'convenient' is correct.

× Actually I use the Internet every day via YouTube, Facebook or Instagram because it helped me stay connected with my families and friends and it also is bad my knowledge through the information from YouTube and I think it is really convenient for everyone.

✓ Actually, I use the Internet every day via YouTube, Facebook, or Instagram because it helps me stay connected with my family and friends, and it also improves my knowledge through information from YouTube. I think it is really convenient for everyone.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'Helped' should be present tense 'helps' to match 'use every day'. 'Families' should be singular 'family' as a collective noun. 'Is bad my knowledge' is incorrect; 'improves my knowledge' is appropriate.

× As far as I can remember, I weren't allowed to use the Internet when I was in primary school because my parents want me to focus on. Physical activities at school an other social skills and I believe that. It is a great way to foster a sense of community for a kiss.

✓ As far as I can remember, I wasn't allowed to use the Internet when I was in primary school because my parents wanted me to focus on physical activities at school and other social skills. I believe that it is a great way to foster a sense of community for kids.

'Weren't' is incorrect for singular subject 'I'; correct form is 'wasn't'. 'Want' should be past tense 'wanted' to match past context. Sentence fragments and punctuation errors corrected. 'An other' should be 'and other'. 'For a kiss' is likely a mishearing or typo; corrected to 'for kids'.

× Definitely I Goa like doing a day because I'm easy to be attracted by interesting content from YouTube or TikTok. That's the reason why I'm really always less focused on my test and. And I think. Although it is really harmful, I still be destroy.

✓ Definitely, I go online every day because I'm easily attracted by interesting content from YouTube or TikTok. That's the reason why I'm often less focused on my tests. Although it is really harmful, I still can't stop.

The original sentence has many errors: 'Goa like doing a day' is unclear, corrected to 'go online every day'. 'I'm easy to be attracted' should be 'I'm easily attracted'. 'Really always less focused' is awkward; corrected to 'often less focused'. Fragmented sentences combined for clarity. 'I still be destroy' is incorrect; corrected to 'I still can't stop' to convey intended meaning.

× Well, without Internet I often reading books. Recently I have practiced this skill. So I often go to the bookstore and find some classic poster child. I choose written because it helps me stay focused an. Create. Uh, not good have.

✓ Well, without the Internet, I often read books. Recently, I have practiced this skill. So I often go to the bookstore and find some classic novels. I choose written works because they help me stay focused and creative.

'I often reading' should be 'I often read' for correct present tense. 'Without Internet' needs the definite article 'the Internet'. 'Classic poster child' is incorrect; likely meant 'classic novels'. 'I choose written' is incomplete; corrected to 'I choose written works'. Sentence fragments corrected and clarified.