Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response with clear sentence structure and avoid redundancy. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add supporting details logically.

Example: I started using the internet when I was 14 years old, during the 8th grade. This was because schools closed due to COVID-19, and I needed the internet to attend online classes.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains errors. Provide a clear, concise response with linking words to connect ideas. Avoid unnecessary or confusing words.

Example: I usually go online for about 3 to 4 hours each day. I use the internet mainly for studying and also for entertainment to relax during my free time.

Suggestion: Your answer is confusing and has grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly and use linking words to explain the reason clearly.

Example: Yes, I remember a time when my parents restricted my internet use because they thought I was spending too much time online.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Provide a clear opinion and support it with reasons using proper linking words.

Example: No, I don't think I spend too much time online because I mainly use it for studying and keeping in touch with my old school friends and relatives.

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words to make it smoother.

Example: If there was no internet available, I would spend my time reading books or exercising to gain knowledge and stay healthy.

× And then I am you die at the age of 14 in 8th grade when COVID become suggest concern.

✓ And then I was 14 years old in 8th grade when COVID became a serious concern.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'am you die' which is nonsensical and mixes tenses. The correct past tense of 'be' is 'was' for singular first person, and 'become' should be in past tense 'became'. Also, 'suggest concern' is incorrect; it should be 'a serious concern' to convey the intended meaning.

× So government required to close schools.

✓ So the government required closing schools.

The sentence lacks the definite article 'the' before 'government' and the verb phrase 'required to close' is awkward. The correct form is 'required closing' or 'required schools to close'. The past tense 'required' is correct.

× Then I need to write, then I need Internet 'cause.

✓ Then I needed to write, so I needed the Internet because

The sentence is about a past event, so the verbs should be in past tense 'needed' instead of present 'need'. Also, 'cause' is informal and should be 'because'.

× I need to attend online classes.

✓ I needed to attend online classes.

Since the context is past events, the verb 'need' should be in past tense 'needed'.

× I go online majorly 3-4 hours per day.

✓ I go online mostly 3-4 hours per day.

The word 'majorly' is incorrectly used; the correct adverb is 'mostly' to indicate frequency or extent.

× My name is too.

✓ Me too.

'My name is too' is incorrect and does not make sense in context. The correct phrase to express agreement is 'Me too'.

× Study and gach entertainment to get relax.

✓ I study and watch entertainment to relax.

'Gach' is likely a typo for 'watch'. Also, 'to get relax' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'to relax'. The verb 'study' needs a subject 'I'.

× On my indesit restful days.

✓ On my days off and restful days.

'Indesit' is a typo or incorrect word. The phrase likely means 'days off' or 'restful days'. The preposition 'on' is correct here.

× He asked many times.

✓ I was asked many times.

The sentence lacks clarity about who was asked. Assuming the student was asked, the passive voice 'I was asked many times' is appropriate. Also, 'He asked many times' is ambiguous.

× I remembered that I don't allowed to use Internet when Midori.

✓ I remember that I wasn't allowed to use the Internet when I was younger.

'Remembered' should be present tense 'remember' to indicate recalling a past event. 'Don't allowed' is incorrect; it should be 'wasn't allowed' in past tense. 'Midori' is unclear; likely meant 'younger' or a time reference.

× Turn by my parents.

✓ Punished by my parents.

'Turn by my parents' is incorrect and unclear. Possibly meant 'punished by my parents' or 'restricted by my parents'.

× My parents think that I over used the Internet so his restricted my Internet usage.

✓ My parents think that I overused the Internet, so they restricted my Internet usage.

'His' is incorrect pronoun; should be 'they' referring to 'my parents'. 'Over used' should be one word 'overused'.

× No, I think that I don't spend too much time online.

✓ No, I think that I don't spend too much time online.

This sentence is correct in present tense and needs no correction.

× I spent intermediate.

✓ I spend an intermediate amount of time online.

'Spent' is past tense but the context suggests present habitual action, so 'spend' is correct. 'Intermediate' needs to be used as an adjective with a noun, e.g., 'an intermediate amount'.

× I'm online online.

✓ I'm online online.

This appears to be a repetition error; possibly meant 'I'm online often' or 'I'm online mainly'.

× I ain't go online majorly becaused studying and stay connected with my old school friends and relatives.

✓ I don't go online much because I study and stay connected with my old school friends and relatives.

'Ain't go' is incorrect; should be 'don't go'. 'Majorly' is incorrect; 'much' or 'often' is better. 'Becaused' is incorrect; should be 'because'. Verb forms 'studying' and 'stay' need to be parallel: 'I study and stay'.

× When there is no availability of Internet, I majorly do reading or exercising for getting knowledge.

✓ When there is no Internet available, I mostly read or exercise to gain knowledge.

'No availability of Internet' is awkward; better to say 'no Internet available'. 'Majorly' is incorrect; 'mostly' is correct. 'Do reading or exercising' should be 'read or exercise'. 'For getting knowledge' should be 'to gain knowledge'.