Breakfast— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details. Correct tense and word choice (e.g., “plain prata,” “sometimes bread,” “buy snacks at work”); avoid unclear phrases like “the year.” Use linking words such as “sometimes” and “if.”

Example: I usually have plain prata for breakfast, and sometimes I eat bread. If I’m short on time, I buy snacks at work because I work in a grocery store and food is convenient there.

Suggestion: Provide a clear opinion sentence and support it with one specific reason and an example. Fix grammar (e.g., “especially,” “I work 12 hours,” “I eat breakfast every day”). Avoid redundancy like repeating ‘important.’

Example: Yes, I think breakfast is very important, especially for people who work long hours. For example, when I work a 12‑hour shift I eat a hearty breakfast because it boosts my energy and helps me stay positive throughout the day.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence contrasting past and present, then add one concrete detail about each period. Correct grammar (“when I was a kid,” “when I was younger,” “my mom used to prepare meals”). Use a linking word like “whereas” or “however.”

Example: Yes, my mornings are very different now. When I was a kid my mother prepared all my meals and I didn’t worry about anything, whereas now I am an adult and I have to get up early to cook and pack food for the day.

Suggestion: Answer directly then support with specific routine details and a brief exception. Correct phrasing (“I don’t think I need to change my routine,” “on weekends”). Keep it concise and use linking words like “because” and “except.”

Example: I don’t think I need to change my morning routine because it works for my job. I wake at 4:30, take a shower, and prepare breakfast and lunch for my husband and myself. Only on weekends do we sleep until about 8:00 and relax.

× There are several items every day in my breakfast.

✓ There are several items in my breakfast every day.

Word order is incorrect for natural English. 'Every day' is an adverbial of frequency and is placed after the object or at the end of the sentence. Move 'every day' after the object to make the sentence natural and grammatically correct.

× I usually eat plain prata, sometimes bread, and if I don't have time to cook, I only buy some snacks at work because I work in grocery store so it's easy for me to get snacks the year.

✓ I usually eat plain prata or sometimes bread, and if I don't have time to cook, I buy some snacks at work because I work in a grocery store so it's easy for me to get snacks there.

Multiple issues: 'grocery store' needs the indefinite article 'a' (article errors) and 'the year' is incorrect; context requires the adverb 'there'. Also 'only buy some snacks' is fine but 'only' can be omitted for clarity. Correct the article and replace 'the year' with 'there' to refer to the workplace location.

× Definitely it is an important specially if you work.

✓ Definitely, it is important, especially if you work.

'An important' needs a noun to modify or drop the article; here 'important' functions as an adjective describing 'it', so the article 'an' is incorrect. 'Specially' is wrong in this context; 'especially' is the correct adverb. Add commas for clarity.

× For instance, I worked 12 hour and I believe that I must have a heavy breakfast because it would boost my energy and positivity towards my work.

✓ For instance, I worked 12 hours and I believe that I must have a heavy breakfast because it boosts my energy and positive attitude toward my work.

'12 hour' should be plural '12 hours'. Using 'would boost' makes the statement conditional and mismatches tense and certainty; use present 'boosts' to state a general truth. 'Positivity towards my work' is awkward — 'positive attitude toward my work' is more natural.

× I eat everyday breakfast.

✓ I eat breakfast every day.

Word order and spacing: 'everyday' (one word) is an adjective meaning 'ordinary', but the adverbial phrase 'every day' (two words) is needed to mean 'each day'. Place 'every day' after the object 'breakfast' for natural word order.

× Yes, there is a vast difference between the mornings of when I was kid and compared to today.

✓ Yes, there is a vast difference between the mornings when I was a kid and those of today.

The original mixes structures 'between...and compared to' incorrectly. Use parallel structure: 'between X and Y' or 'when I was a kid' needs the article 'a'. Clarify by saying 'those of today' to refer back to 'mornings'.

× When I was taking, my mom used to prepare the breakfast, lunch and dinner for me.

✓ When I was little, my mom used to prepare breakfast, lunch and dinner for me.

'When I was taking' is incorrect; likely meant 'little' or 'a child'. Also omit the definite article 'the' before meals; in general statements about routine meals, we say 'prepare breakfast, lunch and dinner' without 'the'.

× However, these days I am an adult and I take the responsibility of making meals.

✓ However, these days I am an adult and I take responsibility for making meals.

'Take the responsibility of' is awkward; the common collocation is 'take responsibility for'. Use 'take responsibility for making meals'.

× I don't think so that I should make updates to my morning routines.

✓ I don't think that I should make changes to my morning routine.

'I don't think so that' is ungrammatical; use 'I don't think that'. 'Make updates to' is acceptable but 'make changes to' is more natural. 'Routines' should be singular 'routine' when referring to a general habitual schedule.

× I work at 6:00 AM.

✓ I start work at 6:00 AM.

'I work at 6:00 AM' can be understood but 'start work at 6:00 AM' is clearer to express the beginning time of the work shift.

× I get up at 4:30.

✓ I get up at 4:30 AM.

Add 'AM' for clarity since 4:30 could be ambiguous; otherwise the sentence is grammatically correct.

× I take my bath and prepare breakfast and lunch for myself and for my husband.

✓ I take a bath and prepare breakfast and lunch for my husband and myself.

Use 'a bath' rather than 'my bath' in this context. The more natural order of objects is to mention the other person before oneself: 'for my husband and myself'.

× I don't think I should change anything between these unless it's weekend.

✓ I don't think I should change anything about these routines unless it's the weekend.

'Between these' is incorrect; use 'about these routines' or 'in these routines'. Add the definite article 'the' before 'weekend' when speaking generally about weekends.

× On weekend, we get up around 8:00 AM and enjoy our day.

✓ On the weekend, we get up around 8:00 AM and enjoy our day.

When referring to weekends generally, use 'the weekend' or say 'on weekends'. 'On weekend' without an article is incorrect in this context.