Birthday— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat natural but incomplete and slightly redundant. Try to complete your thoughts and avoid unnecessary repetition. Use linking words like 'then' or 'after that' to connect ideas smoothly. Also, keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

Example: On my birthday, I usually wake up early and go to the temple to worship. After that, I return home and receive birthday wishes from my friends and family. In the evening, we have a small celebration with cake and dinner.

Suggestion: Your answer has some repetition and grammatical errors. Use past tense consistently and avoid repeating words. Also, try to add linking words like 'then' or 'after that' to make your answer coherent. Provide a complete answer within 5 sentences.

Example: When I was young, I woke up early and received blessings from my family, especially my grandparents. Then, I distributed chocolates to them before going to school. After school, I gave chocolates to my classmates as well.

Suggestion: Your answer conveys your opinion but is a bit unclear and lengthy. Try to organize your ideas with clear topic sentences and supporting details. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly. Also, avoid run-on sentences and keep your answer concise.

Example: I don't think celebrating my birthday is very important. What matters most to me are the blessings and wishes from my family and friends, especially my grandparents. Their support makes my day happy and meaningful.

Suggestion: Your answer is very brief and does not address the question properly. Even if you are unfamiliar with the culture, try to give a general opinion or say what you think politely. Use complete sentences and avoid short answers.

Example: I am not very familiar with Chinese customs, but I think people usually celebrate the birthdays of their close family members, like parents or grandparents, as the most important.

× Well, I usually wake up early in the morning and go to temple to worship after then I return back home and receive all birthday wishes from my friends, family and relatives.

✓ Well, I usually wake up early in the morning and go to the temple to worship. After that, I return home and receive all birthday wishes from my friends, family, and relatives.

The phrase 'after then' is incorrect; it should be 'after that' to indicate sequence. Also, 'go to temple' needs the definite article 'the' before 'temple'. 'Return back' is redundant; 'return' alone is sufficient. Adding commas improves clarity.

× When I was young, I woke up early in the morning and receive receive blessings from my relatives and family, especially grandparents, and then I distributed chocolate to them and went to school and again distributed.

✓ When I was young, I woke up early in the morning and received blessings from my relatives and family, especially my grandparents. Then I distributed chocolates to them and went to school where I distributed again.

The verb 'receive' should be in past tense 'received' to match the past context. Repetition of 'receive' is an error. 'Chocolate' should be plural 'chocolates' when distributed to multiple people. Sentence structure is improved by splitting into two sentences for clarity.

× I think it is not important for me to celebrate my birthday because the only thing that I want my birthday is blessing and wishes from my friend family especially my grandparents because their support means a lot for me so even simple which is makes my day happy and blissful.

✓ I think it is not important for me to celebrate my birthday because the only thing I want on my birthday is blessings and wishes from my friends and family, especially my grandparents, because their support means a lot to me. Even something simple like that makes my day happy and blissful.

The sentence has missing prepositions and incorrect quantifiers: 'blessing' should be plural 'blessings'; 'friend family' should be 'friends and family'. The sentence is long and confusing; breaking it into two sentences improves clarity. 'Means a lot for me' should be 'means a lot to me'. 'Even simple which is makes' is incorrect; corrected to 'Even something simple like that makes'.

× Well I'm in Nipolis so I don't know about China rules and regulation.

✓ Well, I'm in Naples, so I don't know about China's rules and regulations.

The city name 'Nipolis' seems incorrect; likely 'Naples' is intended. 'China rules and regulation' should be 'China's rules and regulations' to show possession and plural form. Adding commas improves sentence flow.