Birthday— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more natural and coherent by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep your answer within 5 sentences. Also, be specific about your activities and avoid vague phrases like 'ladies'.

Example: On my birthday, I usually invite my close friends to celebrate at a famous hotel in my hometown called the Legend Hotel. For example, on my 18th birthday, we had a wonderful party where I received many gifts. I also enjoy dancing with my friends during the celebration.

Suggestion: Focus on making your answer clearer and more grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition. Try to provide specific details about how you celebrated your birthday when you were young.

Example: When I was young, I eagerly awaited my birthday because it felt very special, like a kid in a candy store. Usually, I spent the day with my friends, enjoying games and celebrations together, which made the day amazing for me.

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more concise and clear by avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, improve sentence structure and grammar for better clarity.

Example: Yes, I believe celebrating my birthday is important because it marks a special day in my life. Moreover, my parents are very happy on this day as they consider it the luckiest day, and they encourage me to live a long and happy life.

Suggestion: Try to answer the question more directly and clearly. Avoid vague statements and grammatical errors. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific details about birthday celebrations in China if possible.

Example: Although I am not very familiar with China, I know that celebrating birthdays is common worldwide. In China, people especially celebrate children's birthdays with great joy by inviting relatives and loved ones to join the festivities.

× On my every birthday, I invite my friends and ladies.

✓ On every birthday, I invite my friends and ladies.

The phrase 'my every birthday' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'every birthday' without 'my'. 'Every' already implies possession, so 'my' is redundant and ungrammatical.

× As far as I can remember, it was my 18th birthday.

✓ As far as I can remember, it was on my 18th birthday.

The sentence lacks the preposition 'on' before 'my 18th birthday' which is necessary to indicate the time of the event.

× It's a great celebration in my hometown Famous hotel.

✓ It's a great celebration in my hometown's famous hotel.

The phrase 'my hometown Famous hotel' lacks possessive form and proper article usage. It should be 'my hometown's famous hotel' to show possession and correct adjective order.

× I remember that hotel name is the Legend Hotel.

✓ I remember that the hotel's name is the Legend Hotel.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'hotel's name' and the possessive form 'hotel's' is needed to indicate the name belongs to the hotel.

× I received many gifts on my birthday.

✓ I received many gifts on my birthday.

This sentence is correct and does not require correction.

× I I usually do dance with my friends.

✓ I usually dance with my friends.

The phrase 'do dance' is incorrect here; the verb 'dance' should be used directly without 'do'. Also, the repeated 'I' is a typographical error.

× When I was younger I really waited for my birthday and I felt like a kid in a candy store and that movement was very amazing for me and I usually spend my time with my friends on my birthday I I had enjoy with them and celebration with.

✓ When I was younger, I really waited for my birthday and felt like a kid in a candy store. That moment was very amazing for me, and I usually spent my time with my friends on my birthday. I enjoyed celebrating with them.

Multiple errors: 'movement' should be 'moment' (word choice), 'usually spend' should be past tense 'usually spent' to match past context, 'I had enjoy' is incorrect; correct is 'I enjoyed'. Also, sentence structure is poor and needs to be split for clarity.

× I had enjoy with them and celebration with.

✓ I enjoyed celebrating with them.

The phrase 'had enjoy' is incorrect; the past tense 'enjoyed' is needed. Also, 'celebration with' is incomplete; it should be 'celebrating with' to correctly express the activity.

× Yes, I think it is important to celebrate my birthday in my life because it is the most important day in my life and my parents are all so happy on my birthday because they think it was the luckiest day in their life and they also gave me praise to live more.

✓ Yes, I think it is important to celebrate my birthday because it is the most important day in my life, and my parents are very happy on my birthday because they think it is the luckiest day in their lives. They also praise me to live longer.

The sentence has pronoun agreement issues: 'they think it was' should be 'they think it is' to maintain present relevance. 'Their life' should be plural 'their lives' as it refers to multiple parents. 'Gave me praise to live more' is awkward; 'praise me to live longer' is clearer.

× Well, I'm not aware about the China well it is the common thing to celebrate around the globe and if talk about China in China is a modern country where China is also celebrate their children with great happiness and averting their relatives and loved ones to celebrate.

✓ Well, I'm not aware about China. Well, it is common to celebrate birthdays around the globe. If we talk about China, it is a modern country where people also celebrate their children with great happiness and invite their relatives and loved ones to celebrate.

'Aware about the China' should be 'aware about China' or better 'aware of China'. 'Averting' is incorrect; the correct word is 'inviting'. The sentence is run-on and needs to be split for clarity. 'China is also celebrate' should be 'people also celebrate' for subject-verb agreement.