Birthday— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 你的回答表达了主要意思，但存在语法错误和用词不当，如“preferred”应为“prefer”，“arrangement”应为复数形式“arrangements”，以及“cooking”前应加“and”。建议注意时态一致性和句子结构的完整性。

Example: As I get older, I now prefer a very simple birthday without many complicated arrangements. I usually stay in with my family and cook a simple meal.

Suggestion: 回答中时态混用且有语法错误，如“invited”应为“invite”，“like”应为过去式“liked”，句子结构不够连贯。建议注意时态一致，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

Example: When I was in primary school, I liked to organize my birthday party at KFC. I would invite many of my classmates and friends to join the party, where we played games and sang our favorite songs.

Suggestion: 回答表达了观点，但逻辑连接词使用不够自然，且“pioneering”用词不太贴切。建议使用更自然的连接词和更合适的词汇表达思想。

Example: Yes, celebrating my birthday is very important because it marks getting older. Moreover, as we grow older, we need to be more courageous and adventurous.

Suggestion: 回答表达了观点，但句子结构略显简单，且“mother gives everyone's life”表达不够准确。建议使用更准确的表达和丰富细节。

Example: In China, I think a mother's birthday is the most important to celebrate because she gives life to everyone, so we should be very grateful and show our appreciation on her special day.

× As I get older, I now preferred a very simple birthday without many complicated arrangement, just stay in with my family and cooking a simple meal.

✓ As I get older, I now prefer a very simple birthday without many complicated arrangements, just stay in with my family and cook a simple meal.

这里的时间是现在时态，表示现在的习惯，所以动词应该用一般现在时prefer，而不是过去时preferred。

× As I get older, I now preferred a very simple birthday without many complicated arrangement, just stay in with my family and cooking a simple meal.

✓ As I get older, I now prefer a very simple birthday without many complicated arrangements, just stay in with my family and cook a simple meal.

名词arrangement应使用复数形式arrangements，因为前面有many修饰，表示多个安排。

× As I get older, I now preferred a very simple birthday without many complicated arrangement, just stay in with my family and cooking a simple meal.

✓ As I get older, I now prefer a very simple birthday without many complicated arrangements, just stay in with my family and cook a simple meal.

动词短语中，stay和cook应保持一致的动词形式，不能用cooking，应改为cook。

× Let me think what I was about in primary school.

✓ Let me think about when I was in primary school.

表达过去时间时，应该用过去时态was，并且短语结构应为think about when I was in primary school。

× I really like to organize my birthday party at KFC.

✓ I really liked to organize my birthday party at KFC.

这里描述过去的习惯，应该用过去时liked，而不是现在时like。

× I would like to invited many my classmates and friends to take part in my party and we play many games and sing our favorite songs.

✓ I would like to invite many of my classmates and friends to take part in my party, and we played many games and sang our favorite songs.

would like后面接动词原形invite，不能用过去式invited；描述过去活动时，play和sing应使用过去式played和sang。

× I would like to invited many my classmates and friends to take part in my party and we play many games and sing our favorite songs.

✓ I would like to invite many of my classmates and friends to take part in my party, and we played many games and sang our favorite songs.

many后面应加of my classmates，表示“我的许多同学”，缺少介词of。

× Yes, it is very important for me to celebrate the birthday because firstly it means you become older.

✓ Yes, it is very important for me to celebrate my birthday because firstly it means you become older.

这里应使用my birthday，表示“我的生日”，而不是the birthday。

× Then as you get older you need to be more courageous and pioneering.

✓ Then as I get older, I need to be more courageous and pioneering.

前文主语是第一人称，后文应保持一致，不能突然用you。

× In China, I think mother's birthday is most important because mother gives everyone's life, so we should be very grateful to her.

✓ In China, I think mother's birthday is the most important because mother gives everyone life, so we should be very grateful to her.

everyone是单数，不需要所有格everyone's，应该用everyone life。