Birthday— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but contains some unclear phrases like "cherry small movie" which affects naturalness and clarity. Try to use simpler and more precise expressions, and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer within 5 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: I usually celebrate my birthday with a small gathering at home with close friends. After dinner, we enjoy a birthday cake while sharing stories and laughter. This makes the celebration memorable and comfortable for everyone.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and includes supporting details, but there are some grammatical errors and repetition (e.g., "My My", "a special outgoing"). Try to use correct grammar and more precise vocabulary. Also, use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect your ideas clearly.

Example: When I was a child, my parents always organized special outings for my birthday, such as going to the beach or visiting theme parks. I really enjoyed these activities because they were different from my usual routine and very exciting, so I looked forward to them every year.

Suggestion: Your answer expresses your opinion but has several grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases, which affect naturalness and coherence. Try to form complete sentences, avoid redundancy, and use linking words to explain your reasons clearly.

Example: I don't think celebrating my birthday is very important as I get older because organizing a party feels like a waste of time. Instead, I prefer to spend quality time with my family, which is more meaningful to me.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and includes supporting details, but there are some grammar mistakes and unclear words like "fans" instead of "thanks" or "affection". Use correct vocabulary and grammar, and try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

Example: I think the most important birthdays to celebrate in China are our parents'. On these special days, families reunite to honor their parents and show appreciation for their lifelong contributions. They often give gifts to express love and gratitude.

× I usually celebrate my birthdays in a small gathering at home or starting out with some close friends.

✓ I usually celebrate my birthday in a small gathering at home or start out with some close friends.

The phrase 'starting out' is incorrect here because it should be parallel with 'celebrate' and use the base form 'start'. Also, 'birthdays' should be singular 'birthday' when referring to the usual celebration of one's own birthday.

× I usually celebrate my birthdays in a small gathering at home or starting out with some close friends.

✓ I usually celebrate my birthday in a small gathering at home or start out with some close friends.

When talking about a habitual event like one's birthday, the singular form 'birthday' is used instead of plural 'birthdays'.

× After dinners we enjoy the birthday cake which is also a cherry small movie with sharing stories and laughter.

✓ After dinner, we enjoy the birthday cake, which is also a cherry small movie, sharing stories and laughter.

The phrase 'After dinners' should be 'After dinner' as it refers to the meal in general. Also, the sentence structure is awkward; commas help clarify meaning. 'With sharing' should be 'sharing' to correctly express simultaneous actions.

× After dinners we enjoy the birthday cake which is also a cherry small movie with sharing stories and laughter.

✓ After dinner, we enjoy the birthday cake, which is also a small cherry dessert, sharing stories and laughter.

The phrase 'cherry small movie' is unclear and likely a mistake. It should be corrected to 'small cherry dessert' or similar. The sentence structure is improved by adding commas and rephrasing for clarity.

× So this makes my celebrations and these days more memorable and comfortable.

✓ So this makes my celebrations and these days more memorable and enjoyable.

The word 'comfortable' is not appropriate to describe celebrations or days. 'Enjoyable' fits better. The sentence structure is acceptable otherwise.

× My My parents always organize a special outgoing for me on my birthdays when I was child, such as going to the beach and visiting the theme parks I loved.

✓ My parents always organized a special outing for me on my birthdays when I was a child, such as going to the beach and visiting the theme parks I loved.

The repeated 'My My' is a typo. 'Outgoing' should be 'outing'. 'When I was child' needs the article 'a' before 'child'. Also, past tense 'organized' fits better with 'when I was a child'.

× My My parents always organize a special outgoing for me on my birthdays when I was child, such as going to the beach and visiting the theme parks I loved.

✓ My parents always organized a special outing for me on my birthdays when I was a child, such as going to the beach and visiting the theme parks I loved.

The action happened in the past, so the verb 'organize' should be in past tense 'organized' to match the time frame.

× I really enjoyed them because they were different from my usual routines and very exciting, so I also look forward to it every year.

✓ I really enjoyed them because they were different from my usual routines and very exciting, so I also looked forward to them every year.

The phrase 'look forward to it every year' is inconsistent with past tense context. It should be 'looked forward to them every year' to agree with past time frame and plural 'them' referring to birthdays.

× I don't really think that's as I get older because when I age I realize that is times wasting to organize a party.

✓ I don't really think so as I get older because when I age I realize that it is a waste of time to organize a party.

The phrase 'that's as' is incorrect; 'so' fits better. 'Is times wasting' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'it is a waste of time'. Modal verb 'don't' is used correctly.

× I don't really think that's as I get older because when I age I realize that is times wasting to organize a party.

✓ I don't really think so as I get older because when I age I realize that it is a waste of time to organize a party.

The pronoun 'that' should be 'so' to refer to the previous idea. Also, 'is times wasting' is incorrect; 'it is a waste of time' is correct.

× It seems to be more troubles than is what than is worth.

✓ It seems to cause more trouble than it is worth.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. The corrected sentence uses proper structure and idiomatic expression.

× So I would like to spend the quality time with family instead and.

✓ So I would like to spend quality time with my family instead.

The phrase 'the quality time' should be 'quality time' without 'the'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'and.' which is incorrect. 'My family' is more natural than just 'family' here.

× I think the most important birthdays to celebrate are those of our parents.

✓ I think the most important birthday to celebrate is that of our parents.

'Birthdays' should be singular 'birthday' when referring collectively to parents' birthday as a concept. The verb should agree in singular form 'is'. Alternatively, if meaning multiple parents, plural can be kept but verb must agree.

× Many families reunion together and give gifts to express love and fans.

✓ Many families reunite together and give gifts to express love and thanks.

'Reunion' is a noun; the verb form is 'reunite'. 'Fans' is incorrect in this context; likely intended word is 'thanks'.