Birthday— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer provides relevant information but lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. To improve, try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar, and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: On my birthday, I usually have a small celebration with my family where we cut a cake together. In the evening, I visit the Gurdwara Sahib to participate in community kitchens, where I help serve free meals to people and receive blessings from the elders.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. To improve, respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, provide specific details, and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Example: When I was young, my school had a special day where students could wear fancy dress instead of uniforms, especially on their birthdays. I also enjoyed distributing sweets to about 30 children to celebrate the occasion.

Suggestion: Your answer expresses your opinion but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. To improve, use clear and natural English, organize your ideas logically, and avoid redundancy.

Example: To be honest, I don't like celebrating my birthday every year because it reminds me that I am getting older. Also, organizing a party is difficult for me since I have to attend to many guests on that day.

Suggestion: Your answer has relevant ideas but lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. To improve, respond directly with a clear topic sentence, use specific details, and connect your ideas with linking words.

Example: In China, people usually consider the birthdays of children and elderly family members the most important to celebrate. This is because they wish for the well-being of their children and respect their elders, which brings happiness to the whole family.

× I never do any special my birthday and I cut the cake with my family members only and in the evening I go to Gurdwara Sahib and participate in community kitchens and serve free meals to number of peoples and get blessing of the gods and other elder peoples.

✓ I never do anything special on my birthday and I cut the cake with my family members only. In the evening, I go to Gurdwara Sahib and participate in community kitchens, serve free meals to a number of people, and receive blessings from the gods and other elder people.

The phrase 'any special my birthday' is incorrect; it should be 'anything special on my birthday' to correctly express the idea. 'Number of peoples' should be 'a number of people' because 'people' is already plural and 'peoples' refers to ethnic groups, which is not intended here. Also, 'get blessing of the gods and other elder peoples' should be 'receive blessings from the gods and other elder people' for correct plural and preposition use.

× When I was young, there is one special day for me, especially about the school or there was the uniform is the compulsory for the student and they get one chance, give one chance to wear a fancy dress, especially on the birthday.

✓ When I was young, there was one special day for me, especially at school, where the uniform was compulsory for students and they were given one chance to wear a fancy dress, especially on their birthday.

The sentence incorrectly mixes present and past tense with 'there is' and 'there was'. Since the context is past, 'there was' is correct. Also, 'the uniform is the compulsory for the student' should be 'the uniform was compulsory for students' to match past tense and plural form. 'They get one chance, give one chance' should be 'they were given one chance' to correctly use passive voice in past tense.

× And I also distribute the sweets to all children 30.

✓ And I also distributed sweets to all 30 children.

The phrase 'all children 30' is incorrect; the number should precede the noun as '30 children'. Also, 'distribute' should be in past tense 'distributed' to match the past context.

× I think so, to be honest, I don't like to celebrate birthday every year because it is reminded me I'm going older and I don't like to organize the party because it creates A difficulty to me to attend all too much guest on the that day.

✓ I think so. To be honest, I don't like to celebrate my birthday every year because it reminds me that I'm getting older, and I don't like to organize parties because it creates difficulty for me to attend to too many guests on that day.

'It is reminded me' is incorrect; it should be 'it reminds me' to use the correct verb form. 'Going older' should be 'getting older' as the correct expression. 'Creates A difficulty to me' should be 'creates difficulty for me' for correct article and preposition use. 'Attend all too much guest' should be 'attend to too many guests' to use the correct verb and quantifier.

× I think in the China most of the peoples like to celebrate birthday of children and elder ones because they want the good citizen and the children also like to celebrate the birthday in every country and they give the all happiness to their kids.

✓ I think in China most people like to celebrate the birthdays of children and elderly people because they want good citizens. Children also like to celebrate their birthdays in every country and they give all happiness to their kids.

'The China' is incorrect; it should be 'China' without 'the'. 'Most of the peoples' should be 'most people' because 'people' is already plural and 'peoples' refers to ethnic groups. 'Birthday of children and elder ones' should be 'birthdays of children and elderly people' for correct plural and adjective use. 'They want the good citizen' should be 'they want good citizens' to match plural and article use. 'Give the all happiness' should be 'give all happiness' as 'all' does not need 'the' here.