Birthday— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer has some grammatical errors and lacks coherence. Use the present tense consistently when talking about usual activities. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure by linking ideas logically. Try to be more specific about the religious place and the kind of party you arrange.

Example: On my birthday, I usually visit a local shrine in the morning. Then, I go shopping at the mall with my partner because I enjoy buying new clothes. In the evening, I organise a small birthday party with close friends and family to celebrate.

Suggestion: There are tense inconsistencies and some awkward phrasing. Use past tense consistently when talking about past events. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'fashion freak' and try to provide clearer reasons or descriptions. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: When I was young, I celebrated my birthday by hosting a party for my close family and friends. Additionally, I often went to the water park with my friends. Since I enjoyed fashion, I also liked shopping for new clothes on my birthday.

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct prepositions and articles, and improve sentence flow by linking ideas properly. Be more specific about why you enjoy celebrating your birthday.

Example: In my opinion, celebrating birthdays is a personal choice and not important for everyone. However, I enjoy celebrating mine because it gives me a chance to have a get-together with my close friends and family, which strengthens our relationships.

Suggestion: It's good to be honest when you don't know an answer, but try to expand your response slightly to show your language ability. You can mention general cultural practices or express your willingness to learn more.

Example: I am not very familiar with birthday celebrations in China. However, I believe that like in many cultures, birthdays of close family members such as parents or children might be important. I would like to learn more about Chinese traditions in the future.

× On my birthday, I usually went to the religious place in the morning, unlike temple.

✓ On my birthday, I usually go to a religious place in the morning, like a temple.

The sentence uses 'usually went' which is past tense, but 'usually' indicates a habitual action, so present tense 'go' is appropriate. Also, 'unlike temple' is incorrect; it should be 'like a temple' to indicate an example of a religious place.

× After that I go.

✓ After that, I go.

A comma is needed after 'After that' to separate the introductory phrase from the main clause for correct sentence structure.

× I like to go to the shopping malls on my birthday with my partner because I am fond of shopping.

✓ I like to go to shopping malls on my birthday with my partner because I am fond of shopping.

The plural form 'shopping malls' is correct here without the definite article 'the' because it refers to shopping malls in general, not specific ones.

× After that, in the evening, I usually arrange a birthday party.

✓ After that, in the evening, I usually arrange a birthday party.

This sentence is correct in tense and structure; no correction needed.

× When I was a young, I celebrate my birthday by giving party to my near and dear ones.

✓ When I was young, I celebrated my birthday by giving a party to my near and dear ones.

The article 'a' is not used before 'young' when describing age; 'young' is an adjective here. Also, 'celebrate' should be in past tense 'celebrated' to match 'When I was young'. 'Giving party' needs the article 'a' before 'party'.

× Moreover, I went to the water park on my birthday with my friends and also as I am a fashion freak, I like to do shopping.

✓ Moreover, I went to the water park on my birthday with my friends, and also, as I am a fashion freak, I like to go shopping.

The sentence mixes past and present tense; 'went' is past, so 'like to do shopping' should be 'like to go shopping' to express a habitual present action. Also, adding commas improves clarity.

× According to me, it is not important for everyone to celebrate their birthday because it depends upon our personal choice.

✓ In my opinion, it is not important for everyone to celebrate their birthday because it depends on personal choice.

'According to me' is not idiomatic; 'In my opinion' is preferred. 'Depends upon' can be simplified to 'depends on'. 'Our' is changed to 'personal' to generalize the statement.

× Moreover, I like to celebrate birth my birthday because I like get together of my close friends and family members.

✓ Moreover, I like to celebrate my birthday because I enjoy get-togethers with my close friends and family members.

'Birth my birthday' is incorrect; it should be 'my birthday'. 'Like get together' should be 'enjoy get-togethers' for correct noun form and verb usage. Hyphen added in 'get-togethers'.

× I don't have much knowledge about China, so I don't know the answer of this question because I don't have much knowledge about China.

✓ I don't have much knowledge about China, so I don't know the answer to this question.

The sentence is repetitive; the phrase 'because I don't have much knowledge about China' is redundant and removed. Also, 'answer of this question' should be 'answer to this question' for correct preposition usage.