Birthday— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it contains some redundancy and filler words like 'uh'. Also, 'families' should be singular as 'family'. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating similar ideas. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Example: I usually celebrate my birthday in February with my family and close friends. They make an effort to come to my place, where we hang out, play games, and enjoy a cozy evening together.

Suggestion: Your answer is heartfelt but has many filler words like 'uh' which affect fluency. Also, some sentences are fragmented and could be linked better. Try to use linking words and avoid fillers to make your answer more natural and effective.

Example: When I was young, I used to visit the zoo with my grandfather on my birthday. He taught me about various birds and animals, and we spent a lot of time there. It was an amazing experience because I really enjoyed bonding with him.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and some redundancy, such as 'us us' and 'what we have did'. Also, the sentence is quite long and could be divided for clarity. Use correct verb forms and linking words to improve coherence.

Example: Yes, I believe celebrating birthdays is important because they allow us to reflect on what we have achieved in the past year and how we can grow. Moreover, these occasions provide valuable time to bond with family members.

Suggestion: Your answer conveys a good idea but contains repetition like 'us us' and some awkward phrasing such as 'the amount of efforts'. Try to use more natural expressions and linking words to improve fluency and clarity.

Example: In my opinion, the most important birthdays to celebrate in China are those of our parents because we love and honor the sacrifices they have made for us. They have put in great effort over the years to support and help us grow.

× I celebrate my birthday with my families and my loved ones.

✓ I celebrate my birthday with my family and my loved ones.

The word 'families' is plural, but here it should be singular 'family' because it refers to the person's own family as a single unit.

× each of my friends make efforts

✓ each of my friends makes efforts

The subject 'each' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' instead of 'make' to agree in number.

× This is how I celebrate my birthdays.

✓ This is how I celebrate my birthday.

Since the speaker refers to their own birthday, it should be singular 'birthday' instead of plural 'birthdays'.

× When I was young, I used to visit zoos with my grandfather during my birthdays.

✓ When I was young, I used to visit the zoo with my grandfather on my birthday.

The phrase 'during my birthdays' is awkward; 'on my birthday' is more appropriate. Also, 'zoos' plural is less common here; usually one zoo is visited on a birthday.

× Uh, he, that was amazing time, uh, because I really loved bonding with my grandfather.

✓ Uh, that was an amazing time, uh, because I really loved bonding with my grandfather.

The phrase 'he, that was amazing time' is incorrect. It should be 'that was an amazing time' with the article 'an' before 'amazing time'.

× Yes, I think it is important to celebrate birthdays because they help us us to know what we have did in our previous year, how can we grow and what are the important facts we have learned in the past year and these are the time we can really bond with our family members.

✓ Yes, I think it is important to celebrate birthdays because they help us to know what we have done in the previous year, how we can grow, and what important lessons we have learned in the past year. These are the times we can really bond with our family members.

The phrase 'what we have did' is incorrect; the correct past participle is 'have done'. Also, 'how can we grow' should be 'how we can grow' to fit the sentence structure. 'Important facts' is better expressed as 'important lessons'. 'These are the time' should be plural 'times'.

× According to me, the most important birthday to celebrate is of parents because we love and honor the sacrifices they have made for us us or the amount of efforts they have put throughout the years to feed us and to help us grow.

✓ According to me, the most important birthday to celebrate is that of parents because we love and honor the sacrifices they have made for us and the amount of effort they have put throughout the years to feed us and help us grow.

The phrase 'the amount of efforts' is incorrect; 'effort' is uncountable and should be singular. Also, 'is of parents' is better expressed as 'is that of parents'. The repeated 'us us' is a mistake and should be corrected to a single 'us'.