Birthday— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is quite long and a bit confusing. Try to make your sentences clearer and more natural by using proper linking words and avoiding repetition. Also, focus on giving specific details in a logical order. For example, start with what you do first, then explain why, and finish with how you celebrate.

Example: On my birthday, I usually wake up early and take a bath. Since my birthday falls on Christmas, I go to church with my friends to pray. After that, I return home and celebrate with my family in the evening.

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit unclear and has some grammar mistakes. Try to organize your ideas better and use linking words to connect your points. Also, be careful with word choice and sentence structure to make your answer more natural and easy to understand.

Example: When I was young, I always went to church on my birthday because it was Christmas. Even though I am not Christian, I enjoyed buying chocolates and sharing them with my friends, teachers, and cheerleaders at school. Then, I celebrated my birthday at home in the evening.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more structured. Avoid unnecessary phrases and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar to sound more natural.

Example: I don't think celebrating my birthday is very important. However, since it is Christmas, I believe it is important to go to church and pray. After that, I like to visit an orphanage and donate some help to those in need.

Suggestion: Try to answer the question directly even if you are not sure. You can give your opinion politely and add some reasons or examples. Avoid saying you don't know without trying to respond. This will make your answer more natural and effective.

Example: I am not very familiar with birthdays celebrated in China, but I think the most important birthday might be that of the Chinese president because he is the country's leader. People may celebrate it to show respect.

× I usually wake up at the early morning and take a bath and walk to the court and at my birthday there is a Christmas so I used to go on a church along with my friends and just to just pray for Jesus and return back to the home and celebrate birthday with my family at night.

✓ I usually wake up early in the morning and take a bath and walk to the court. On my birthday, there is Christmas, so I used to go to church along with my friends to pray for Jesus and then return home to celebrate my birthday with my family at night.

The phrase 'at the early morning' is incorrect; it should be 'early in the morning' because 'morning' is a time of day and does not require 'the' here. Also, 'go on a church' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'go to church'. 'Return back to the home' is redundant; 'return home' suffices. 'Celebrate birthday' needs a possessive pronoun: 'celebrate my birthday'. These corrections improve article and preposition usage and sentence clarity.

× at my birthday there is a Christmas so I used to go on a church along with my friends and just to just pray for Jesus and return back to the home and celebrate birthday with my family at night.

✓ On my birthday, which is Christmas, I used to go to church with my friends to pray for Jesus and then return home to celebrate my birthday with my family at night.

The phrase 'used to go on a church' is incorrect; the correct modal verb phrase is 'used to go to church'. Also, 'just to just pray' is redundant; 'to pray' is sufficient. Modal verb 'used to' indicates past habitual action and should be followed by the base verb with correct preposition.

× When I was young I used to buy as I said that there is a Christmas so I have to go church anyhow since from my childhood though I'm not Christian also and I buy a bunch of chocolates and keep it in my bag and go to the school and distribute along with all the cheerleaders, my friends, teacher and celebrate body at night.

✓ When I was young, I used to buy chocolates because it was Christmas, so I had to go to church. Although I am not Christian, since my childhood, I bought a bunch of chocolates, kept them in my bag, went to school, and distributed them among all the cheerleaders, my friends, and teachers, and celebrated my birthday at night.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'There is a Christmas' should be 'it was Christmas' to match past tense. 'I have to go church' should be 'I had to go to church' for past obligation. 'I buy' should be 'I bought' to maintain past tense consistency. 'Keep it' should be 'kept them' to agree with plural 'chocolates'. 'Go to the school' should be 'went to school' without 'the'. 'Celebrate body' is a typo and should be 'celebrate my birthday'. These corrections ensure proper past tense usage and subject-verb agreement.

× I have to go church anyhow since from my childhood though I'm not Christian also and I buy a bunch of chocolates and keep it in my bag and go to the school and distribute along with all the cheerleaders, my friends, teacher and celebrate body at night.

✓ I had to go to church anyhow since my childhood, though I'm not Christian, and I bought a bunch of chocolates, kept them in my bag, went to school, and distributed them among all the cheerleaders, my friends, and teachers, and celebrated my birthday at night.

The phrase 'go church' is missing the preposition 'to'. 'Distribute along with' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'distribute among' or 'distribute to'. 'Go to the school' is better as 'go to school' unless referring to a specific school. Correct preposition use clarifies meaning and improves sentence flow.

× I buy a bunch of chocolates and keep it in my bag and go to the school and distribute along with all the cheerleaders, my friends, teacher and celebrate body at night.

✓ I bought a bunch of chocolates and kept them in my bag, went to school, and distributed them among all the cheerleaders, my friends, and teachers, and celebrated my birthday at night.

'A bunch of chocolates' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' instead of 'it'. Also, 'teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to match the list. 'Celebrate body' is a typo and should be 'celebrate my birthday'. Correct pronoun agreement is essential for clarity.

× No, I don't think that it's important to celebrate a birthday, but it's important to go to the church and pray to the Jesus because it's a Christmas Day, as I said you, and then just go to the one orphanage home and distribute some help to them if you need it.

✓ No, I don't think it's important to celebrate a birthday, but it's important to go to church and pray to Jesus because it's Christmas Day, as I told you, and then just go to an orphanage home and distribute some help to them if they need it.

'Go to the church' should be 'go to church' when referring to church in general. 'Pray to the Jesus' is incorrect; 'Jesus' does not take 'the'. 'A Christmas Day' should be 'Christmas Day' without an article. 'The one orphanage home' should be 'an orphanage home' as it is indefinite. 'As I said you' should be 'as I told you'. 'If you need it' should be 'if they need it' to refer to the orphanage children. These corrections fix article and pronoun usage.

× No, I don't think that it's important to celebrate a birthday, but it's important to go to the church and pray to the Jesus because it's a Christmas Day, as I said you, and then just go to the one orphanage home and distribute some help to them if you need it.

✓ No, I don't think it's important to celebrate a birthday, but it's important to go to church and pray to Jesus because it's Christmas Day, as I told you, and then just go to an orphanage home and distribute some help to them if they need it.

The pronoun 'you' in 'as I said you' is incorrect; it should be 'as I told you'. Also, 'if you need it' is incorrect because the subject is the orphanage children, so it should be 'if they need it'. Correct pronoun use ensures the sentence refers to the right subjects.

× I really am not really fascinated about China. So I don't think like maybe it's important to celebrate a Chinese president birthday in China.

✓ I am really not fascinated by China, so I don't think it's important to celebrate the Chinese president's birthday in China.

The phrase 'fascinated about' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'fascinated by'. 'Celebrate a Chinese president birthday' should be 'celebrate the Chinese president's birthday' to show possession. These corrections improve preposition and possessive pronoun usage.