Birthday— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to make your speech more fluent and natural. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas clearly. For example, you can say, 'On my birthdays, I usually celebrate with my family and friends by having a special dinner. Moreover, we share laughs and have meaningful conversations together.'

Example: On my birthdays, I usually celebrate with my family and friends by having a special dinner. Moreover, we share laughs and have meaningful conversations together.

Suggestion: Your answer is incomplete and contains many filler words. Try to complete your thoughts and avoid unnecessary pauses. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details. For example, 'When I was young, I used to celebrate my birthday with all my family members. I received many gifts, which fascinated me a lot. Additionally, we would have a small party with cake and games.'

Example: When I was young, I used to celebrate my birthday with all my family members. I received many gifts, which fascinated me a lot. Additionally, we would have a small party with cake and games.

Suggestion: Avoid filler words and try to express your ideas more clearly and fluently. Use linking words to connect your points logically. For example, 'I think celebrating my birthday is significant because it marks a milestone each year. Furthermore, it helps me build self-esteem and motivates me to set goals for the coming years.'

Example: I think celebrating my birthday is significant because it marks a milestone each year. Furthermore, it helps me build self-esteem and motivates me to set goals for the coming years.

Suggestion: Make sure to answer the question correctly and avoid confusion between countries. Also, reduce filler words and use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, 'In China, I believe children's birthdays are the most important to celebrate because they are very excited and fascinated by the gifts and chocolates they receive.'

Example: In China, I believe children's birthdays are the most important to celebrate because they are very excited and fascinated by the gifts and chocolates they receive.

× On my birthdays, I try to celebrate with my families and friends, especially have a special dinner and uh, share laughs and talks together.

✓ On my birthday, I try to celebrate with my family and friends, especially have a special dinner and share laughs and talks together.

The word 'birthdays' should be singular because the question asks about what you usually do on your birthday, which is a singular event each year. 'Families' is incorrect here because 'family' is used as a collective noun to refer to all members together. Using 'family' is more natural and grammatically correct in this context.

× Uh, on my birthday it's uh, special about gathering of every.

✓ On my birthday, it's special to gather everyone together.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. The phrase 'special about gathering of every' is ungrammatical and lacks a proper object. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning by stating that the birthday is special because of gathering everyone together.

× When I was young, I used to celebrate my birthday, which each and every one of my family members, uh, I used to get lot of gifts from them.

✓ When I was young, I used to celebrate my birthday with each and every one of my family members, and I used to get a lot of gifts from them.

The original sentence is missing the preposition 'with' to connect 'celebrate my birthday' and 'each and every one of my family members.' Also, 'lot of gifts' should be 'a lot of gifts' to be grammatically correct.

× And during this period, I used to, uh.

✓ And during this period, I used to enjoy the celebrations.

The original sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. Adding a complete thought clarifies the intended meaning.

× I think it's really, uh, significant for me to celebrate my birthday as it is shows uh, milestone of every year and it builds self esteem, umm, to move and set your goals for the coming years.

✓ I think it's really significant for me to celebrate my birthday as it shows the milestone of every year and builds self-esteem to move forward and set my goals for the coming years.

The phrase 'it is shows' is incorrect; it should be 'it shows.' Also, 'milestone of every year' needs the definite article 'the' before 'milestone.' 'Self esteem' should be hyphenated as 'self-esteem.' The phrase 'to move and set your goals' is unclear; 'to move forward and set my goals' is more appropriate and consistent with the speaker's perspective.

× I think the children's birthday are the most important, uh, to celebrate in India as they are the ones who are very excited to celebrate their birthday and they are more fascinated about the gifts and uh, uh, chocolates they receive, uh.

✓ I think children's birthdays are the most important to celebrate in India as they are the ones who are very excited to celebrate their birthdays and are more fascinated by the gifts and chocolates they receive.

'Children's birthday' should be pluralized to 'children's birthdays' because it refers to birthdays of multiple children. The verb 'are' correctly agrees with the plural subject. 'Fascinated about' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'fascinated by.' Also, 'birthday' should be plural in 'celebrate their birthdays' to match the plural subject.