Birthday— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy. For example, clarify the timing and effects of traveling on your birthday with proper tense and connectors.

Example: I usually travel alone on my birthday because I love adventure. This gives me a thrilling experience, and as a result, I have the chance to make many new friends outside my town.

Suggestion: Focus on consistent verb tenses and avoid vague pronouns like 'you'. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, be more specific about the activities and correct the phrase 'where in we watch'.

Example: When I was young, I used to celebrate my birthday with my family. We would go out to eat at a restaurant. After the meal, we usually went to the cinema to watch my favorite movies.

Suggestion: Complete your sentences and improve clarity. Use linking words to connect reasons. Avoid incomplete thoughts and ensure the answer is concise and natural.

Example: Yes, I think it is very important to celebrate my birthday because it allows me to appreciate my existence on this earth. Moreover, it gives me another year to look forward to and share joyful moments with my friends.

Suggestion: Clarify your answer by directly addressing the question about birthdays. Avoid confusing religious figures with birthday celebrations. Use correct grammar and avoid redundancy.

Example: In China, the most important birthdays to celebrate are usually those of family members, such as parents and elders, because respecting elders is a key tradition in Chinese culture.

× I usually travel alone when my birthday come because I'm always up to adventure.

✓ I usually travel alone when my birthday comes because I'm always up for adventure.

The verb 'come' should be in the third person singular present tense 'comes' to agree with the singular subject 'my birthday'. Also, the phrase 'up to adventure' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'up for adventure'. This means being ready or willing to engage in adventure.

× It gave me a thrilling experience and I gained a chance to have lots of friends outside my town.

✓ It gives me a thrilling experience and I gain a chance to have lots of friends outside my town.

Since the student is describing a habitual action ('I usually travel'), the verbs should be in the present tense to maintain consistency. 'Gave' and 'gained' are past tense and should be changed to 'gives' and 'gain' respectively.

× We just go outside and eat at the restaurant.

✓ We just go outside and eat at a restaurant.

The verb 'go' is correct in present tense for habitual action. However, the article 'the' before 'restaurant' is incorrect unless referring to a specific restaurant already known. Using 'a' is more appropriate here.

× After the birthday celebration, you usually go to cinema where in we watch my favorite TV shows.

✓ After the birthday celebration, we usually go to the cinema where we watch my favorite TV shows.

The pronoun 'you' should be 'we' to maintain consistency with the subject. Also, 'cinema' requires the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'where in we watch' is incorrect; 'where we watch' is correct.

× Yes, of course it's very important to celebrate my birthday because it's one way of appreciating my own existence in this earth and it gave me another year to look forward to with my friends and.

✓ Yes, of course it's very important to celebrate my birthday because it's one way of appreciating my own existence on this earth and it gives me another year to look forward to with my friends.

The phrase 'in this earth' should be 'on this earth' as 'on' is the correct preposition for 'earth'. The verb 'gave' should be 'gives' to maintain present tense consistency. The sentence was incomplete and has been completed properly.

× I think Chinese people has lots of Buddhist tradition and they are honoring Buddha.

✓ I think Chinese people have lots of Buddhist traditions and they honor Buddha.

The subject 'Chinese people' is plural, so the verb should be 'have' not 'has'. 'Tradition' should be plural 'traditions' to match 'lots of'. 'Are honoring' is present continuous but here simple present 'honor' is more appropriate for habitual action.

× If I'm going to answer that question, I think the most celebrated entity in China is Buddha because they he's the most sacred person.

✓ If I'm going to answer that question, I think the most celebrated entity in China is Buddha because he is the most sacred person.

The pronoun 'they' is incorrect when referring to 'Buddha', a singular person. It should be 'he'. Also, 'he's' is a contraction of 'he is', so 'they he's' is incorrect and redundant.