Birthday— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, dùng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, ngắt câu hợp lý và tránh lặp từ/tiếng ồn (uh). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn (ví dụ: hoạt động, địa điểm, thời lượng) và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Giữ tối đa 4–5 câu tự nhiên.

Example: I usually celebrate my birthday with a small party at my parents' house. We usually have a homemade meal and eat a chocolate cake together. After dinner, we take group photos and play board games for about two hours. I enjoy these moments because I can relax and express my gratitude to the people I care about.

Suggestion: Cần cấu trúc câu rõ ràng: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rồi bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về thói quen khi nhỏ (ai, nơi, hoạt động). Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (tense, countable nouns) và loại bỏ tiếng “uh”. Nên liên hệ lý do và kết luận rõ ràng trong 2–3 câu.

Example: When I was a child, I used to buy lots of sweets and a birthday cake because I loved sugary treats. I often shared candies with my classmates at school and had a small party at home. Although I sometimes got cavities because of sweets, those birthdays were very fun and memorable.

Suggestion: Ý chưa rõ và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp; cần trả lời trực tiếp (yes/no/it depends) rồi giải thích với lí do cụ thể. Dùng liên từ như 'however' hoặc 'on the other hand' để so sánh trẻ em và người lớn. Tránh dịch word-for-word và sửa cấu trúc: 'When people are children... when they are adults...'.

Example: I think it depends on age and personal preference. For children, birthdays are important because they enjoy parties, sweets and seeing friends. However, many adults prefer quieter celebrations or no celebration at all because they are busy or have different priorities.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời nên trực tiếp nêu quan điểm và giải thích lý do hợp lý. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (if I have money / abroad), tránh nói quá chung chung và số liệu không thực tế. Nên cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể (địa điểm, hoạt động, khách mời) và giữ 2–3 câu liên kết bằng từ nối.

Example: I would say people's own birthdays are often the most important because they can choose how to celebrate. For example, some people prefer a big party at a restaurant with many friends, while others might travel abroad for a special dinner with family. Ultimately, it depends on personal taste and budget.

× On my birthday, I usually have a small party with my friends and my family because it's happy, feel comfortable and appreciate.

✓ On my birthday, I usually have a small party with my friends and family because it makes me happy, feel comfortable, and appreciated.

The original uses 'it's happy' and 'appreciate' incorrectly. 'Happy' should describe 'me' so use 'it makes me happy'. 'Appreciate' should be passive/adjective 'appreciated' to show how the speaker feels. Use parallel structure with verbs: 'makes me happy, feel comfortable, and feel appreciated.'

× We eat, we often eat cake, uh, take the photo together and uh, express.

✓ We eat, we often eat cake, take photos together, and express ourselves.

List items should be parallel verbs. 'Take the photo' should be plural 'take photos' for idiomatic English. 'Express' requires an object here: 'express ourselves'. Use base verb forms after conjunctions for parallelism.

× I can and I can express myself in front of them, uh, who I care about.

✓ I can express myself in front of the people I care about.

Repeating 'I can' is redundant. 'Who I care about' should modify 'people', so replace 'them' with 'the people' and combine the clauses for clarity and correct pronoun reference.

× When I was young, I often bought a lot of candies and a cake, birthday cake because I really love it.

✓ When I was young, I often bought a lot of candy and a birthday cake because I really loved it.

Use past tense 'loved' to match 'When I was young'. 'Candy' is uncountable in this sense so use singular 'candy' rather than 'candies'. Place 'birthday' before 'cake' as a compound noun: 'birthday cake.'

× I really love to eat some sweet things and that's why I uh, uh, was tooth decay.

✓ I really loved to eat sweet things, and that's why I had tooth decay.

Match past time frame: 'really loved' and 'had tooth decay' (past) instead of 'was tooth decay' which is ungrammatical. 'Tooth decay' is a noun and requires 'have/ had' rather than 'be.'

× But I really love it because you know, every children will love.

✓ But I really loved it because, you know, every child would love it.

Use singular 'child' with 'every'. Use past 'loved' to match context and conditional/modal 'would' to generalize preferences. Add object 'it' after 'love' for completeness.

× If it's depends on the age, if we choose a children, we really want to celebrate that because we can have a lot of candy and invite friends or family members.

✓ It depends on age: if we are children, we really want to celebrate because we can have a lot of candy and invite friends or family members.

Remove incorrect 'it's depends' and use 'it depends'. 'If we choose a children' is incorrect: use 'if we are children'. Maintain present simple for general truth 'it depends' and plural/uncountable 'age' without article.

× But if you older and we just want to advertise everything, stop because celebrate.

✓ But if you are older, you might just want to stop celebrating everything.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'if you are older' with 'are'. Use modal 'might' to indicate possibility and 'stop celebrating' as correct verb phrase. Remove 'advertise' which is wrong in context.

× Maybe myself, if I have a money, I will celebrate my birthday in abroad and in the luxury restaurant with a lot of waiter and umm, I can invite more than hundreds people to enjoy to take part in that.

✓ Maybe myself: if I have the money, I will celebrate my birthday abroad in a luxury restaurant with many waiters, and I could invite more than a hundred people to take part in it.

Use 'the money' not 'a money'. 'Celebrate abroad' does not need 'in'. Use 'a luxury restaurant' (no 'the' required), plural 'waiters' and 'many' instead of 'a lot of'. 'More than hundreds people' should be 'more than a hundred people' or 'hundreds of people'. Use 'take part in it' to refer back clearly and match modality with 'could' for possibility.