Birthday— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be careful with grammar and redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct small grammar errors (e.g., say "which are very practical"), and avoid repeating similar ideas. Add one brief specific detail about a favourite restaurant or a typical gift to enrich your answer while keeping it concise.

Example: I usually celebrate my birthday by going to a favourite nearby restaurant. For example, we often go to a small Italian place that serves excellent steak and tiramisu. My wife also gives me practical presents, such as a high-quality pen or a non-stick frying pan, which I use every day.

Suggestion: Good content and relevant detail. Improve coherence by using linking words and shortening the long sentence. Correct small phrasing issues (e.g., 'it was usual for Japanese students to prepare' -> 'Japanese students usually prepared'). Provide one concrete memory to make the answer more vivid.

Example: When I was younger I usually studied a lot around my birthday because it falls on November 26 and Japanese students usually prepared for entrance exams in winter. For example, I remember studying past exam papers instead of having a big party that year.

Suggestion: Clear opinion but watch small grammar and article use ("for the year ahead") and slight repetition of earlier content. Use a linking word to connect reason and example. Add one brief personal insight about how celebrating helps you feel refreshed.

Example: Yes, I definitely think it is important to celebrate birthdays because they help us reflect and refresh for the year ahead. For instance, I usually go to a nice restaurant with my wife and enjoy steak and cake, which helps me relax and set new goals.

Suggestion: Strong answer and clear reason. Improve natural phrasing ("our parents' birthdays" with apostrophe and plural), and be more specific about how you express gratitude—mention timing or types of gifts. Use a linking word to connect statement and example.

Example: I think parents' birthdays are the most important in China because they are key opportunities to show gratitude. For example, I always call them on their birthdays and sometimes send a personalized gift, such as a photo album or a care package, to show appreciation.

× ...which very practical and easy to use.

✓ ...which are very practical and easy to use.

The sentence is missing the linking verb 'are' to connect the relative clause 'which' to the adjective phrase. Use 'are' because the clause describes plural 'presents'. Suggestion: include the appropriate form of the verb 'to be' ('are') after 'which' when describing plural nouns.

× ...because it fell on 26th of November and it was usual for Japanese students to prepare for school and entrance exams for high school and university since they were usually scheduled in winter seasons.

✓ ...because it fell on the 26th of November and it was usual for Japanese students to prepare for school and entrance exams for high school and university since they were usually scheduled in the winter.

The original lacks the definite article 'the' before '26th of November' and uses the plural 'winter seasons' unnecessarily. Use 'the 26th of November' for specific dates and 'the winter' to refer to the season in which exams are scheduled. Also remove the plural 'seasons' because 'winter' as a time reference is uncountable here.

× ...because we need to refresh our minds for year ahead.

✓ ...because we need to refresh our minds for the year ahead.

The phrase is missing the definite article 'the' before 'year ahead'. Use 'the year ahead' to refer to the coming year. Also ensure present-tense phrasing 'we need' is appropriate for general statements.

× I think our parents birthdays are by far the most important days because we don't have many special occasions to express our gratitude.

✓ I think our parents' birthdays are by far the most important days because we don't have many special occasions to express our gratitude.

Possessive apostrophe is missing: 'parents birthdays' should be 'parents\' birthdays' to show that the birthdays belong to the parents. This is a punctuation/possession issue tied to plurality; add the apostrophe after 'parents'.

× Therefore, I usually send messages to them at least once a year and sometimes send special gifts.

✓ Therefore, I usually send messages to them at least once a year and sometimes send them special gifts.

The original sentence omits the indirect object 'them' before 'special gifts', which makes the sentence slightly awkward. Add 'them' to clarify the recipient. The verbs 'send' are correctly conjugated for first person, so no tense change is needed; this is an object-completion correction.