Relax— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Tapai ko uttar ma thap spashta ra sanga sambandhit shabda haru prayog garnu parcha. Tapai le 'going to visiting temples' jasto galti haru sudharna parcha ra sentence haru lai sajilo ra prabhavit banau. English ma 'I go to monasteries and temples to relax and meditate, which helps me find inner peace' jasto banau.

Example: I usually go to monasteries and temples to relax and meditate. This helps me reduce anxiety and find inner peace in my daily life.

Suggestion: Tapai ko uttar ma sentence haru adhura ra asangathit chan. Tapai le sentence haru lai purai ra spashta banayera, linking words jastai 'because' ya 'so' prayog garnu parcha. English ma 'I usually relax with my friends because their jokes help me forget work stress' jasto banau.

Example: I usually relax with my friends because their jokes help me forget the stress from work. Spending time with them refreshes my mind and prepares me for the next day.

Suggestion: Tapai ko uttar ma thap coherence ra shabda prayog ma sudhar garnu parcha. 'Relax is my soul' jasto galti haru sudharera, linking words jastai 'because' ya 'and' prayog garnu parcha. English ma 'Listening to music is soothing because it relaxes my mind and body, and it recharges my energy' jasto banau.

Example: Yes, I think listening to music is very soothing because it relaxes my mind and body. It also recharges my energy and refreshes my soul.

Suggestion: Tapai ko uttar ma grammar ra shabda prayog ma sudhar garnu parcha. 'mountains brings a piece with within me' jasto galti haru sudharera, linking words jastai 'because' prayog garnu parcha. English ma 'I usually ride my motorcycle to the mountains because the spectacular views help me relax and forget my problems' jasto banau.

Example: Usually, I ride my motorcycle to the mountains because the spectacular views help me relax and forget about my problems. The mountains bring peace within me.

× I usually go to monasteries and temples to relax myself from the anxiety and the stress is that has been going on in my life.

✓ I usually go to monasteries and temples to relax from the anxiety and the stress that has been going on in my life.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is incorrectly used here. 'Relax' is an intransitive verb and does not take a reflexive object. The phrase should be 'relax from' without 'myself'. Also, 'is that' is incorrect and should be 'that' to connect the clause properly.

× Going to visiting temples makes me relax an I meditate there sometimes which makes me peace within my body.

✓ Visiting temples makes me relax and I meditate there sometimes which gives me peace within my body.

The phrase 'Going to visiting temples' is incorrect; 'visiting temples' alone is sufficient. Also, 'makes me peace' is incorrect; it should be 'gives me peace' or 'makes me feel peace'. The conjunction 'an' is a typo and should be 'and'.

× I usually relax my mind and my body with my friends as they crack some of the jokes which I need after a long working hour in my office.

✓ I usually relax my mind and my body with my friends as they crack some jokes which I need after a long working hour in my office.

The phrase 'some of the jokes' is awkward here; 'some jokes' is more natural. No pronoun error here, but the phrase can be improved for naturalness.

× So meeting with my friend.

✓ So, meeting with my friends helps me relax.

The sentence fragment 'So meeting with my friend.' lacks a verb and is incomplete. It needs to be a complete sentence to convey meaning properly.

× So there is my life and Richards for my next day.

✓ So that is my life and refreshes me for my next day.

The phrase 'Richards' is incorrect; likely intended 'refreshes'. Also, 'there is my life' is awkward; 'that is my life' is better. Pronoun and word choice errors affect clarity.

× Yes, I do think listening to music is very much soothing as it provides some relaxation to my mind and my body.

✓ Yes, I do think listening to music is very soothing as it provides relaxation to my mind and body.

The phrase 'very much soothing' is awkward; 'very soothing' is correct. Also, 'some relaxation' can be simplified to 'relaxation' for clarity.

× And also listening to music makes me energetic and relax is my soul.

✓ Also, listening to music makes me energetic and relaxes my soul.

The phrase 'relax is my soul' is incorrect; it should be 'relaxes my soul' to use the verb correctly with the object 'my soul'.

× So listening to music recharges my body.

✓ So, listening to music recharges my body.

Missing comma after 'So' for correct punctuation; otherwise, sentence is correct.

× Usually I take my motorcycle to the mountains to relax my body as the spectacular view of the mountains makes me relax and forget about the problems that I've been facing.

✓ Usually, I take my motorcycle to the mountains to relax my body as the spectacular views of the mountains make me relax and forget about the problems that I've been facing.

'View' should be plural 'views' because 'mountains' is plural. Also, 'makes' should be 'make' to agree with plural subject 'views'.

× So mountains brings a piece with within me.

✓ So mountains bring peace within me.

'Mountains' is plural, so the verb should be 'bring' not 'brings'. Also, 'a piece with within me' is incorrect; it should be 'peace within me'.