Cakes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Avoid unnecessary hesitations and unclear phrases like "Since I have 3 twos" which is confusing. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words. Also, avoid redundancy and ensure your vocabulary is relevant and precise.

Example: Yes, I like eating cakes, especially in the morning because they improve my mood and give me energy. For example, when I feel down, having a sweet treat helps lift my spirits and makes me feel better.

Suggestion: Try to give a direct answer first and then add specific details. Avoid vague statements like "I don't know about it" and instead mention any traditional cakes you know or describe what you have learned. Use linking words to connect your ideas and improve coherence.

Example: Yes, there are many traditional Chinese cakes, such as mooncakes which are popular during the Mid-Autumn Festival. I have seen documentaries about these cakes, and they often contain sweet fillings like red bean or lotus seed paste.

Suggestion: Your answer should be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response, then explain why you bake cakes, using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like "it helps me to let my hair" and focus on relevant vocabulary related to baking and feelings.

Example: Yes, I can make cakes. When I feel nervous, baking helps me relax and recharge. I often make fruit cakes with strawberries and bananas, and sometimes chocolate cakes, which are both delicious and comforting.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains irrelevant or confusing phrases like "when I was charged" and "important for engineer." Focus on giving a clear, direct answer with specific supporting details about your childhood experiences with cakes. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

Example: Yes, I loved eating cakes as a child. My mother often baked delicious cakes at home, and we enjoyed trying different types when visiting friends and family. Cakes were always a special treat during celebrations.

Suggestion: Your answer should be more precise and natural. Avoid unclear statements like "because it can't digest our meals." Start with a clear opinion, then give specific examples using linking words. Also, complete your sentences fully to avoid confusion.

Example: Yes, I like having desserts after meals. For example, I often eat fruits or yogurt because they help with digestion. In the evening, I enjoy having tea with cake, chocolate, or jelly as a relaxing treat.

× Since I have 3 twos, I prefer to have cake, especially early in morning because it improves my mood and it uh, influence my brain function.

✓ Since I have 3 twos, I prefer to have cake, especially early in the morning because it improves my mood and it uh, influences my brain function.

The word 'influence' should be in the third person singular form 'influences' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'early in morning' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'morning'.

× Uh, when I feel blue, I prefer to have a cake or other sweet food.

✓ Uh, when I feel blue, I prefer to have a cake or other sweet foods.

The phrase 'other sweet food' should be plural 'other sweet foods' to match the plural sense of 'cakes' and to be grammatically consistent.

× They contain lots of uh, substance and uh, it lifts our spirits and they are really delicious and strong.

✓ They contain lots of uh, substances and uh, they lift our spirits and they are really delicious and strong.

'Substance' should be plural 'substances' because 'lots of' refers to multiple items. Also, 'it lifts' should be 'they lift' to agree with the plural subject 'they'.

× There are variety kinds of traditional Chinese cake and I don't know about it.

✓ There are various kinds of traditional Chinese cakes and I don't know about them.

'Variety kinds' is incorrect; it should be 'various kinds'. 'Cake' should be plural 'cakes' to match 'kinds'. Also, 'about it' should be 'about them' to refer to plural 'cakes'.

× I sometimes watch a documentary about different cultures since I live in Iran.

✓ I sometimes watch documentaries about different cultures since I live in Iran.

'A documentary' should be plural 'documentaries' to match the general statement. The preposition 'about' is correct here.

× I don't know about the specific name of this cake, but I realize that they have lots of cakes, especially traditional cakes, and they make delicious.

✓ I don't know the specific name of this cake, but I realise that they have lots of cakes, especially traditional cakes, and they are delicious.

'Make delicious' is incorrect; it should be 'are delicious' to describe the cakes. Also, 'realize' is corrected to British English spelling 'realise'.

× Yes, definitely when I get nervous I prefer to bake cake.

✓ Yes, definitely when I get nervous I prefer to bake cakes.

'Bake cake' should be plural 'bake cakes' to indicate the general action of baking more than one cake.

× I make lots of delicious and scrumptious cake especially they are they contain lots of fruits like strawberry, banana and also they can turn chocolate and it's a lift my sprays and recharges my batteries and it helps me to let my hair.

✓ I make lots of delicious and scrumptious cakes, especially ones that contain lots of fruits like strawberries, bananas, and also can be turned into chocolate. It lifts my spirits, recharges my batteries, and helps me to let my hair down.

'Cake' should be plural 'cakes'. 'Strawberry' and 'banana' should be plural 'strawberries' and 'bananas'. 'They can turn chocolate' is unclear and corrected to 'can be turned into chocolate'. 'Lift my sprays' is a mishearing or typo and corrected to 'lifts my spirits'. 'Helps me to let my hair' is incomplete and corrected to 'helps me to let my hair down'.

× Yes, I recall that when I was charged during that time, my mother made and baked lots of delicious cakes.

✓ Yes, I recall that when I was a child during that time, my mother made and baked lots of delicious cakes.

'Charged' is incorrect; the intended word is 'child'. This is a vocabulary error rather than grammar, but it affects sentence meaning.

× So it tempted us to try them when we went to our friend's place and our family's place and they make lots of cake and they sometimes bought bought them.

✓ So it tempted us to try them when we went to our friends' places and our families' places, and they made lots of cakes and sometimes bought them.

'Friend's place' and 'family's place' should be plural possessive 'friends' places' and 'families' places' to indicate multiple places. 'Make' should be past tense 'made' to match the past context. 'Bought bought' is a repetition error corrected to 'bought'.

× It's a really important for engineer.

✓ It's really important for an engineer.

'A really important' should be 'really important' without 'a' because 'important' is an adjective. Also, 'engineer' needs an article 'an' before it.

× Yes, it's really important for us to have a dessert after meal.

✓ Yes, it's really important for us to have dessert after meals.

'A dessert' is acceptable but 'dessert' without article is more natural here. 'After meal' should be plural 'after meals' to indicate the general habit.

× For instance, we sometimes have fruits and sometimes have yogurt after a meal because it can't digest our meals.

✓ For instance, we sometimes have fruit and sometimes have yogurt after a meal because it can't digest our meals.

'Fruits' is usually uncountable in this context and should be 'fruit'. The pronoun 'it' is unclear; it likely refers to the body or stomach, but this sentence is awkward. However, as per instructions, only grammar issues are corrected.

× And when I get up in the evening, I prefer to have a tea with a cake, chocolate and Jelly and I sometimes prefer to have.

✓ And when I get up in the evening, I prefer to have tea with cake, chocolate, and jelly, and I sometimes prefer to have them.

'A tea' and 'a cake' should be 'tea' and 'cake' without articles when speaking generally. 'Jelly' should be lowercase. The sentence ending 'I sometimes prefer to have' is incomplete and corrected to 'I sometimes prefer to have them' to clarify the meaning.