Cakes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., “really, really”).

Example: Yes, I love sweet foods. For example, I often eat chocolate and pudding because I have a sweet tooth, and I usually enjoy them as an after-school treat.

Suggestion: Give a direct, confident response and provide a specific example or admit uncertainty briefly. Avoid unclear words and incorrect vocabulary (e.g., “tanguru” is unclear). Use linking words to clarify your thought.

Example: I'm not sure, but I think there are some traditional Chinese sweets. For instance, mooncakes and rice cakes are common during festivals, and many regions have their own sweet pastries.

Suggestion: Answer directly, then expand with a clear plan and correct grammar. Use linking words (e.g., “however,” “so”) and fix phrasing like “learn about how to make cakes to my mom.”

Example: No, I can't make cakes yet. However, my mother bakes well, so I plan to learn from her next summer and practice baking a simple sponge cake first.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific supporting detail. Correct grammar and vocabulary (confusing ‘pancakes’ and tense). Use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I loved cakes as a child. For example, I always looked forward to birthdays because we would buy a special birthday cake, which made the day exciting.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct answer, then give a specific, coherent example. Correct grammar errors and awkward phrases (e.g., “I it deserves”). Use linking words like “for example” or “for instance.”

Example: Yes, I often have dessert after meals. For example, tonight I had matcha and lemon cookies, which were light and slightly sweet.

× Yes, I really, really like to eat cakes and because I think I have a sweet tooth and I like other sweet foods like chocolate, candy or pudding.

✓ Yes, I really, really like to eat cakes because I have a sweet tooth and I like other sweet foods such as chocolate, candy, and pudding.

The original sentence uses both 'and' and 'because' together redundantly and has awkward coordination. Remove the extra 'and' before 'because' to make a single reason clause. Use 'such as' for examples and include commas for a list. Also use 'I have a sweet tooth' (simple present) to express general preference.

× I'm not Chinese so I don't know about it, but maybe.

✓ I'm not Chinese, so I don't know much about them, but maybe.

'Know about it' is vague and uses a singular pronoun 'it' for a plural idea (traditions/foods). Use 'them' to refer to 'traditional cakes' or 'Chinese traditions' and add 'much' to convey limited knowledge.

× I know, but Chinese food is tanguru and there is a lot of sweet food in China, so I think so.

✓ I know a little, but Chinese food is diverse and there is a lot of sweet food in China, so I think there are traditional sweet cakes.

The word 'tanguru' is not English; likely intended meaning is 'tangy' or 'diverse'. Replace with a clear adjective. Also correct 'there is a lot of sweet food' to remain but add a clear conclusion 'so I think there are traditional sweet cakes.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and clarity.

× No, I can't, but my mom can make cakes, so someday I will learn about how to make cakes to my mom.

✓ No, I can't, but my mom can make cakes, so someday I will learn how to make cakes from my mom.

Use 'learn how to make cakes' (correct verb pattern) and 'from my mom' to indicate the source; 'learn about how' is incorrect and 'to my mom' misuses a preposition.

× Yes, I'm really like to eat cakes.

✓ Yes, I really liked to eat cakes.

The question asks about childhood (past). Use past tense 'liked' instead of present 'like'. Also remove 'I'm' which is ungrammatical here and keep 'I really liked eating cakes' as an alternative.

× I and so I really like someone's birthday because in my house didn't buy pancakes.

✓ I also liked birthdays because my family didn't buy pancakes at home.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and missing subject for the past-tense clause. Use 'I also liked' to connect to previous sentence, and 'my family didn't buy pancakes at home' to clarify subject and location.

× Yes, I really like that I it deserves.

✓ Yes, I really like desserts.

The phrase 'I it deserves' is ungrammatical and appears to be a confused attempt at 'desserts.' Replace with the correct noun 'desserts.'

× After dinner today I ate some cookies.

✓ After dinner today, I ate some cookies.

The original sentence is mostly correct but needs a comma after the introductory phrase 'After dinner today,' to follow punctuation conventions. The past tense 'ate' is appropriate for a completed action today.

× It tastes like matcha and lemon.

✓ They tasted like matcha and lemon.

Referent is 'cookies' (plural) so use plural verb 'tasted.' Use past tense 'tasted' to match 'I ate' earlier. Also plural agreement between subject and verb is required.