Coins— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: ควรตอบคำถามโดยตรงและใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจนมากขึ้น รวมถึงใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้องและเหมาะสม เช่น ใช้คำว่า 'transactions' แทน 'translation' และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำซ้อนหรือผิดไวยากรณ์ เช่น 'because there's cash raise society' ควรปรับเป็นประโยคที่เข้าใจง่ายและถูกต้อง

Example: No, I don't use coins now because most transactions are done through mobile phones. It is uncomfortable to carry cash or coins in my pocket these days.

Suggestion: ควรใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้องและเชื่อมโยงความคิดด้วยคำเชื่อม เช่น 'because' และ 'so' ให้เหมาะสม และใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม เช่น 'confident' ควรเปลี่ยนเป็น 'comfortable' หรือ 'convenient' เพื่อสื่อความหมายที่ถูกต้อง

Example: I don't think coins are convenient because they are heavy to carry in my pocket. So, I prefer using my phone to make payments because it is more comfortable.

Suggestion: ควรใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจนและถูกต้อง เช่น 'I have collected coins' แทน 'I have corrected Coys' และใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'coins' แทน 'Coys' และ 'hosts' แทน 'hoist' รวมถึงจัดเรียงประโยคให้มีความหมายสมบูรณ์

Example: No, I didn't collect coins as a kid, but when I went to the US, I collected different types of coins. It was exciting to see new designs and learn about their history.

Suggestion: ควรใช้คำศัพท์และไวยากรณ์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'coins' แทน 'coys' และ 'carry' แทน 'caring' รวมถึงใช้ประโยคที่สมบูรณ์และเชื่อมโยงความคิดอย่างเหมาะสม

Example: No, I don't carry coins when I go out because they are made of metal and feel heavy, even if I carry just two or three pieces.

× No, I don't use 'cause right now because we can do the translation everything in our phone.

✓ No, I don't use coins right now because we can do all transactions on our phones.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'cause' instead of 'coins' and has awkward phrasing 'do the translation everything'. The modal verb 'can' is correctly used here, but the sentence needs clarity and correct vocabulary. Suggest replacing 'cause' with 'coins' and rephrasing for clarity.

× So is uncomfortable to keep the cash even cause in my pocket anymore because there's cash raise society.

✓ So it is uncomfortable to keep cash or coins in my pocket anymore because society is moving towards cashless transactions.

The sentence has incorrect prepositions and unclear phrases like 'cash raise society'. 'Cause' should be 'coins'. The phrase 'cash raise society' is unclear; it likely means 'cashless society'. The preposition 'in' is correct for 'in my pocket'. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity.

× So is uncomfortable to keep the cash even cause in my pocket anymore because there's cash raise society.

✓ So it is uncomfortable to keep cash or coins in my pocket anymore because there is a cashless society.

The subject 'it' requires the verb 'is' in third person singular form. The original sentence omits 'it' and uses 'is' without subject. Also, 'there's' is a contraction of 'there is' which is correct, but the phrase 'cash raise society' is incorrect and should be 'cashless society'.

× I don't think so because I think is heavy if we keep it in our pocket and keep it to everywhere we go.

✓ I don't think so because I think it is heavy if we keep it in our pocket and carry it everywhere we go.

The sentence misses the subject 'it' before 'is heavy'. Also, 'keep it to everywhere' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'carry it everywhere'. The verb 'is' requires a subject in third person singular.

× So for me is not confident anymore.

✓ So for me, it is not convenient anymore.

The phrase 'not confident' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is likely 'not convenient'. Also, the sentence misses the subject 'it' before 'is'. Adding a comma after 'for me' improves clarity.

× We just keep one phone and do everything on front desk comfortable for me.

✓ We just keep one phone and do everything at the front desk, which is comfortable for me.

The phrase 'on front desk' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at the front desk'. Also, the sentence structure is awkward; adding 'which is' clarifies that doing everything at the front desk is comfortable.

× No I didn't, but when I went to the USI have corrected Coys.

✓ No, I didn't, but when I went to the US, I collected coins.

The phrase 'I have corrected Coys' is incorrect. The correct past tense verb is 'collected' and 'coins' is misspelled as 'Coys'. Also, 'USI' should be 'US'. The sentence needs proper past tense usage and spelling correction.

× Like every type cars they have right at that time an it could be my.

✓ Like every type of car they had at that time, and it could be mine.

The phrase 'every type cars' should be 'every type of car' because 'every' is followed by singular noun. 'They have' should be past tense 'they had' to match 'at that time'. 'An it could be my' is unclear; 'it could be mine' is correct.

× Good time because it exciting when when I meet new hoist.

✓ It was a good time because it was exciting when I met new hosts.

The sentence lacks proper subject-verb agreement and tense consistency. 'It exciting' should be 'it was exciting'. 'When I meet' should be past tense 'when I met'. 'Hoist' is likely a misspelling of 'hosts'. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity and correct tense.

× No is so heavy caring coys when we go out.

✓ No, it is so heavy carrying coins when we go out.

The sentence misses the subject 'it' before 'is'. 'Caring' should be 'carrying'. 'Coys' should be 'coins'. The verb 'is' requires a subject in third person singular.

× You know the koi made form metal so is heavy even you carry like a bits like.

✓ You know the coins are made from metal, so they are heavy even if you carry just a few pieces.

'Koi' should be 'coins'. 'Made form metal' should be 'made from metal'. 'So is heavy' lacks subject; should be 'so they are heavy'. 'Even you carry like a bits like' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'even if you carry just a few pieces'.

× Just two or three pieces is heavy.

✓ Just two or three pieces are heavy.

The subject 'two or three pieces' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.