Coins— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions and filler words, and finish the idea with one supporting reason. Use linking words to make the statement coherent (e.g., “because,” “so,” “therefore”). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: No, I rarely use coins now. I only use them in small shops that do not accept cards, because Japan’s payment system is very advanced and most places accept electronic payments.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence then two specific reasons linked logically. Avoid repeating words and unnecessary hesitations. Use linking words like “first,” “second,” or “because” to structure the answer and provide concrete examples.

Example: No, I don’t find coins convenient. First, handling coins is time-consuming because you have to sort and count them, and second, they can feel unhygienic, especially after touching many surfaces, so I prefer contactless payments.

Suggestion: Respond directly with one clear sentence, then briefly add a specific supporting detail if needed. Avoid repeating negatives and filler words. If mentioning others, give a short example to make it concrete.

Example: No, I didn’t collect coins as a child. Some of my friends collected foreign coins as souvenirs when they travelled, but I never had that hobby.

Suggestion: Start with a direct answer, then provide one or two specific reasons using linking words. Remove repeated words and hesitations. Mention a concrete situation to illustrate your point.

Example: Yes, I usually carry some coins because many small shops and vending machines still only accept cash. For example, I keep a few coins for buses or local shops that don’t take cards.

× You can't use credit card I I use coins when that happens, but that's the only time I need to As you know, Japan's payment system has developed umm advanced and in most places you.

✓ You can't use a credit card, so I use coins when that happens, but that's the only time I need to. As you know, Japan's payment system has developed and is advanced, and in most places you can pay electronically.

Problems: missing article before 'credit card' (Article errors ID 22), run-on sentence and missing verb form 'is advanced' (Third person singular/Present tense issues ID 2 and 6). Suggestion: add 'a' before 'credit card'; split into two sentences with conjunction 'so'; include 'is' before 'advanced' to form a correct predicate; clarify 'you can pay electronically' to complete the idea.

× Uh, picking coins takes time and after handing coins you have to wash your wash your hands which is inconvenient.

✓ Picking up coins takes time, and after handling coins you have to wash your hands, which is inconvenient.

Problems: incorrect verb phrase 'picking coins' should be 'picking up coins' (preposition usage ID 11); 'handing coins' is the wrong verb — 'handling' is correct; duplicated phrase 'wash your' is an error (sentence structure ID 26). Suggestion: use 'pick up' for taking coins from a pocket, use 'handling' for touching coins, remove duplicate words, and add commas for clarity.

× Have you collected coins when you were a kid?

✓ Did you collect coins when you were a kid?

Problem: incorrect mixing of present perfect 'Have you collected' with past time phrase 'when you were a kid' (Past tense issue ID 5). Suggestion: use simple past 'Did you collect' for completed past actions tied to a specific time.

× No, I didn't. No, I haven't. Umm, I know some people like collecting coins from oversea, umm, but I'm I'm not a I'm not a.

✓ No, I didn't. No, I haven't. I know some people like collecting coins from overseas, but I'm not one of them.

Problems: contradictory answers 'No, I didn't. No, I haven't.' (sentence structure/confusion ID 26) and incorrect noun phrase 'from oversea' should be 'from overseas' (preposition/word choice ID 11). The fragmented 'I'm not a I'm not a' lacks a noun; use 'I'm not one of them' or 'I'm not a collector.' Suggestion: choose a consistent tense/answer, use 'overseas', and complete the clause with a clear noun phrase.

× Yes, in my country in in some stores you can't use a credit card and any other electric electric payment.

✓ Yes. In my country, in some stores you can't use a credit card or any other electronic payment method.

Problems: repeated words 'in in' and 'electric electric' (sentence structure ID 26), missing article before 'credit card' (Article errors ID 22), incorrect word 'electric' should be 'electronic' and needs 'payment method' for clarity (word choice/grammar ID 13 and 11). Use 'or' instead of 'and' to indicate alternatives. Suggestion: remove duplicates, add commas, use 'a credit card', use 'electronic payment method', and connect alternatives with 'or'.

× So I have to carry coins in case I I need to do that.

✓ So I have to carry coins in case I need them.

Problems: duplicated 'I I' and awkward ending 'need to do that' (sentence structure errors ID 26). Suggestion: remove duplicate, replace vague 'do that' with 'need them' to refer clearly to coins.