Fishing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and avoid redundancy, for example, avoid repeating similar ideas like 'I love eating fish' and 'I would love to eat more fish'. Also, improve sentence structure for better flow and clarity.

Example: Yes, I like eating fish, especially tilapia. Although I don't eat it every day, I enjoy it when I do. I know how to cook tilapia, but I usually buy it already cleaned from the market.

Suggestion: Your answer is good but contains a small repetition ('fresh fresh veg, vegetables'). Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of repeating 'fresh' and 'vegetables', just say 'fresh vegetables'.

Example: Yes, I often visit the fish market near my house on weekends. There, I usually buy fresh vegetables, fish, and meat to last me through the week.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using clearer linking words and avoiding informal phrases like 'just cause'. Also, try to make your sentences more concise and avoid repetition such as 'just cause just because'.

Example: Fishing is not very popular in my country, but some people enjoy it. For example, I often see a few anglers by the riverbanks near my home. Personally, I don't like fishing because it requires a lot of patience.

× I love eating fish, however it's not a food that is part of my daily rotation of meals that I eat.

✓ I love eating fish; however, it's not a food that is part of my daily rotation of meals that I eat.

The word 'however' is a conjunctive adverb and should be preceded by a semicolon and followed by a comma when connecting two independent clauses. Using a comma alone creates a comma splice, which is grammatically incorrect. To improve, use a semicolon before 'however' and a comma after it.

× So some from time to time when I go to the market I buy.

✓ So, from time to time when I go to the market, I buy some.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing commas, making it unclear. The phrase 'some from time to time' is misplaced. Correct word order and punctuation improve clarity: 'So, from time to time when I go to the market, I buy some.'

× Yes, I've been to the fish market that is nearby my house.

✓ Yes, I've been to the fish market that is near my house.

The preposition 'nearby' is an adverb or adjective and should not be used with 'to be' in this context. Instead, 'near' is the correct preposition to indicate proximity to a location. Therefore, 'near my house' is correct.

× Whenever I go, I make sure to stock up on fresh fresh veg, vegetables, fish and some meat that I can enjoy throughout the week.

✓ Whenever I go, I make sure to stock up on fresh vegetables, fish, and some meat that I can enjoy throughout the week.

The word 'fresh' is repeated unnecessarily, and 'veg' is informal and redundant when 'vegetables' is also used. Removing the duplicate 'fresh' and 'veg' improves formality and clarity.

× I wouldn't say it's a popular activity, however I find that some people are interested in fishing.

✓ I wouldn't say it's a popular activity; however, I find that some people are interested in fishing.

Similar to the first correction, 'however' connects two independent clauses and should be preceded by a semicolon and followed by a comma to avoid a comma splice.

× I myself am not particularly fond of fishing just cause just because I know that it takes patience.

✓ I myself am not particularly fond of fishing just because I know that it takes patience.

The phrase 'just cause just because' is redundant and incorrect. The correct conjunction is 'just because' to indicate reason. Removing the extra 'just cause' corrects the sentence.