Fishing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is informative but a bit too technical and complex for a natural conversation. Try to use simpler language and make your response more natural and concise. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I enjoy eating fish because it is healthy and rich in nutrients like iodine and vitamin D. Different ways of cooking fish also make it taste delicious.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve coherence by using linking words to connect your ideas. Also, try to use more natural expressions and avoid minor grammatical errors.

Example: Yes, I've visited the fish market a few times because it has a wide variety of fish to choose from. However, the only downside is that they only accept cash, which can be inconvenient.

Suggestion: Your answer lacks clarity and natural phrasing. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons or examples. Also, avoid awkward expressions and improve sentence structure.

Example: Fishing is not very popular in my country because people usually prefer other leisure activities. For example, few people go fishing with friends or colleagues, as it can be time-consuming and costly.

× Not only can it provide a high nutritional value due to high abundance of iodine and vitamin D, but also many kinds of glutathiones due to different preparation methods.

✓ Not only can it provide high nutritional value due to the high abundance of iodine and vitamin D, but also many kinds of glutathione due to different preparation methods.

The phrase 'a high nutritional value' is incorrect because 'nutritional value' is an uncountable noun and does not require an article 'a'. Also, 'high abundance' should be preceded by 'the' to specify the particular abundance. Additionally, 'glutathiones' is incorrect as 'glutathione' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralised. The correction removes the article before 'nutritional value', adds 'the' before 'high abundance', and changes 'glutathiones' to 'glutathione'.

× I've been to the fish market a few times because it offers a great variety of fishes to choose from.

✓ I've been to the fish market a few times because it offers a great variety of fish to choose from.

The word 'fish' is both singular and plural; 'fishes' is only used when referring to different species. In this context, 'fish' as a plural noun is appropriate. Therefore, 'fishes' should be corrected to 'fish' to reflect the correct plural form.

× However, the payment method is quite restricted because cash is the only method that can be accepted.

✓ However, the payment method is quite restricted because cash is the only method that can be used.

The phrase 'method that can be accepted' is awkward and incorrect. The correct expression is 'method that can be used' because payment methods are 'used' rather than 'accepted' in this context. This correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× It is not popular at all, emphasizing on cost effectiveness.

✓ It is not popular at all, emphasizing cost effectiveness.

The verb 'emphasize' does not require the preposition 'on' after it. The phrase should be 'emphasizing cost effectiveness' without 'on'. Removing 'on' corrects the prepositional error.

× People in my country are rarely to go fishing with their friends or their business partners.

✓ People in my country rarely go fishing with their friends or their business partners.

The adverb 'rarely' should directly modify the verb without 'to'. The phrase 'are rarely to go' is incorrect; it should be 'rarely go'. This correction fixes the adverb placement and verb form for proper grammar.