Road— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar; avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail with a linking phrase. Correct singular/plural and word order (e.g. 'there is more traffic' not 'a more full of traffic').

Example: Yes, the roads near my home are quite busy, especially during the morning and evening rush hours. For example, traffic increases a lot on public holidays because the nearby intersection becomes congested.

Suggestion: Use correct adverbs and sentence structure; avoid vague or ungrammatical phrases. Give one clear reason and a specific example linked with a connector. Watch word forms (e.g. 'often', 'pedestrians hurry') and complete sentences.

Example: Yes, people cross the roads in my city quite often, especially at rush hour because traffic is heavy. For example, near the Central Market pedestrians often hurry across between traffic lights to reach shops.

Suggestion: Be precise about who maintains roads and avoid attributing maintenance to 'local people' unless accurate. Use cohesive linking (e.g. 'however') correctly and give one specific contrast with a result. Clarify cause and effect (snowfall causes hazards).

Example: The roads are generally well maintained in summer, so walking is easy. However, in winter heavy snowfall makes sidewalks and roads difficult to use, which often causes icy and congested conditions.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and filler words. State your opinion clearly, then give one specific reason and a possible consequence. Use precise vocabulary (e.g. 'hazardous' instead of 'dangerous to walk') and avoid mixing rainfall with snowfall unless relevant.

Example: Yes, I believe the roads need improvement, particularly for winter maintenance. For example, inadequate snow clearance and poor drainage cause icy, muddy sidewalks that are hazardous for pedestrians.

× For instance, whenever there is a public holiday, uh, there would be a more full of traffic on the roads because of the intersection that is near to my building.

✓ For instance, whenever there is a public holiday, there is more traffic on the roads because of the intersection near my building.

Incorrect use of 'would be' and the phrase 'a more full of traffic' are ungrammatical. Use 'there is' (simple present) to state a general fact and 'more traffic' as the correct noun phrase. Also remove the unnecessary preposition 'to' after 'near'.

× People certainly cross Rd. In my city very oftenly, especially at the rush hours when roads are so congested with the traffic.

✓ People certainly cross roads in my city very often, especially during rush hour when roads are congested with traffic.

Adverb 'very oftenly' is incorrect; correct adverb is 'very often'. 'Rd.' should be 'roads' or 'roads' lowercase. 'At the rush hours' → 'during rush hour'. Also remove the definite article before 'traffic'. Adjust word order for natural English.

× People avoid going to cars and buses and usually walk around.

✓ People avoid taking cars and buses and usually walk instead.

'Avoid going to cars and buses' is incorrect collocation; use 'taking' for public transport/vehicles. Adding 'instead' clarifies contrast. No subject-verb disagreement, but verb choice was wrong.

× For instance, near the Central Market pedestrians grows hurriedly between traffic lights because.

✓ For instance, near the Central Market, pedestrians hurry between traffic lights.

'Pedestrians grows' is ungrammatical: plural subject requires plural verb 'hurry'. 'Hurriedly' as adverb is unnecessary; use verb 'hurry'. The sentence ended with 'because' without a clause, so remove it or complete the clause; here we remove it for clarity.

× In summer, roads are generally well maintained by the local people and the authorities make it quite easy to walk around.

✓ In summer, roads are generally well maintained by the local authorities, which makes it quite easy to walk around.

'Local people and the authorities make it' is awkward and unclear. Use 'local authorities' as the agent of maintenance and a relative clause 'which makes' to link to the result. Maintain present tense for a general truth.

× However, in winters, due to excessive snowfall in Saskatchewan, it's quite hard to walk as a pedestrian as roads are heavily congested.

✓ However, in winter, due to heavy snowfall in Saskatchewan, it is quite hard to walk as roads become heavily congested.

Use 'in winter' (general season) not 'in winters'. 'Excessive' can be replaced by 'heavy' for natural collocation. Use 'become' to describe change; avoid repeating 'as' twice.

× In my perspective, there is a great need for improvement of roads in my city, especially in winters.

✓ From my perspective, there is a great need to improve the roads in my city, especially in winter.

Use 'From my perspective' not 'In my perspective'. 'Need for improvement of roads' is awkward; say 'need to improve the roads'. Use 'in winter' singular for general seasonal reference.

× For instance, in winters due to heavy rainfall or snowfall, uh, it's quite difficult for the pedestrians to walk around and the roads get so filthy that it's quite hard and dangerous to walk.

✓ For instance, in winter, due to heavy rain or snowfall, it is quite difficult for pedestrians to walk around, and the roads become so filthy that walking is hard and dangerous.

Use 'in winter' (singular). 'Heavy rainfall' → 'heavy rain' for natural collocation. 'The pedestrians' should be 'pedestrians' (no article). Use 'become' and noun form 'walking' to avoid repetition. Maintain consistent present tense for general statements.