Road— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Reduce filler words (uh, um) and avoid unclear phrases like "they hung several times." Use accurate vocabulary like "heavy traffic," "noise pollution," and "air pollution."

Example: Yes, the roads near my home are very busy. For example, there are many private cars and buses during peak hours, which causes heavy traffic and long waits at junctions. As a result, noise and air pollution are common in the area.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, use linking words (for example, however), and give specific details. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Mention conditions (traffic lights, footbridges) and frequency clearly.

Example: Yes, many pedestrians cross the roads in my city. However, they often have to wait for the traffic lights because there is heavy traffic, which makes crossing time-consuming. Some people use footbridges or underpasses when they are available.

Suggestion: Start with a concise assessment of road conditions, then support with specific problems (potholes, narrow lanes, poor maintenance) and a recommendation. Use precise vocabulary (pavement, maintenance, lanes) and avoid vague or repeated phrasing.

Example: The roads in my city are in poor condition overall. For instance, many streets have potholes and the lanes are too narrow for the traffic volume, so congestion is common. The local government should repair the pavement and widen busy roads to improve traffic flow.

Suggestion: Provide a clear opinion statement and then give two specific improvements with reasons and linking words (for example, therefore, because). Remove hesitations and unclear expressions like "wearing and sharing."

Example: Yes, I think the roads need significant improvement. For example, the authorities should add extra lanes on major routes to reduce congestion and carry out regular maintenance to fix potholes. These measures would reduce traffic jams during rush hour and improve safety.

× Yes, there are variety, uh, kinds of vehicles around the road and they, uh, increase, uh, traffic congestion.

✓ Yes, there are a variety of vehicles on the road, and they increase traffic congestion.

The phrase 'there are variety' is incorrect; 'variety' needs an article and 'of' to modify 'vehicles' (countable plural). Also use 'on the road' rather than 'around the road' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use 'a variety of' + plural noun.

× Uh, we have to wait when we want to go to other sides of the streets.

✓ We have to wait when we want to cross to the other side of the street.

The original uses plural 'sides of the streets' awkwardly and 'go to' is less natural than 'cross to'. Maintain present tense but use correct collocations: 'cross to the other side' or 'cross the street'.

× And also the other thing that I like to mention is that they hung several times and they produce noise pollution and air pollution is common around the world.

✓ I would also like to mention that vehicles honk several times, producing noise pollution, and air pollution is common worldwide.

Pronoun 'they' is unclear for 'vehicles'; 'hung' is incorrect word choice—should be 'honk'. Sentence structure improved by using participle 'producing' to link causes. 'Around the world' is better as 'worldwide'.

× Yes, uh, pedestrian, uh, many pedestrian like to cross the roads and they have to wait, uh, for traffic light to get a green, uh, to pass the cross.

✓ Yes, many pedestrians like to cross the roads, and they have to wait for the traffic light to turn green to cross.

Use plural 'pedestrians' for 'many'. 'Traffic light' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Get a green' is unidiomatic; use 'turn green' and 'cross' instead of 'pass the cross'.

× And uh, it's a really time consuming, uh, because there are lots of vehicles on the road and we have to wait for them.

✓ And it's really time-consuming because there are many vehicles on the road and we have to wait.

Use hyphenated adjective 'time-consuming' and 'lots of' can be formalized to 'many'. 'Wait for them' is redundant; 'wait' suffices. Maintain present tense.

× Uh, sometimes people use footbridge and also sometimes use the.

✓ Sometimes people use a footbridge and sometimes do not; other times they cross at street level.

Original sentence is incomplete and missing article 'a' before 'footbridge'. Provide a complete contrasting clause. Suggestion: ensure sentences are complete and include necessary articles.

× To answer your question, I believe that in today's world many vehicles are on the road and most people prefer to use their own cars.

✓ To answer your question, I believe that today many vehicles are on the road and most people prefer to use their own cars.

'In today's world' is acceptable but slightly wordy; 'today' is more concise. Present tense is correct; no grammatical change needed aside from style.

× So the existing pub roads are not really efficient and it's not really umm enough uh So the officials should have lots of effort to add some lanes and also umm maintenance of the existing role.

✓ So the existing public roads are not efficient enough. Officials should make a lot of effort to add lanes and to maintain the existing roads.

'Pub roads' is incorrect; should be 'public roads'. 'Not really ... enough' word order is wrong; 'not efficient enough' is correct. 'Should have lots of effort' is ungrammatical; use 'should make a lot of effort' or 'should prioritize'. 'Role' is a typo for 'road'.

× Yes, definitely. I believe that, uh, the existing roads are near, uh, need to be improved and uh, there are, uh, wearing and sharing of these roads is so important.

✓ Yes, definitely. I believe that the existing roads need to be improved, and addressing wear and tear on these roads is very important.

'Are near, need to be improved' is incorrect order; use 'need to be improved'. 'Wearing and sharing' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'wear and tear'. Clarify noun phrase and keep present tense.

× Governments should add some lanes and uh, also, uh, maintenance of the existing roads is really important, uh, because most people get stuck in traffic jamming rush hours, uh, so.

✓ Governments should add lanes, and maintenance of the existing roads is also very important because most people get stuck in traffic jams during rush hours.

Use plural noun 'traffic jams' and the phrase 'during rush hours'. Remove filler words. 'Traffic jamming' is incorrect; 'traffic jams' is correct. Maintain noun-pronoun agreement and natural collocations.