Perfume— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and detailed. Try to avoid repeating 'in daily life' and add a reason or example to enrich your response.

Example: Yes, I do like perfume. I usually wear it every day because it helps me feel fresh and confident.

Suggestion: Avoid repeating phrases like 'in my daily life' and 'as I said'. Instead, provide more specific details about the types of perfumes you use or why you like them, using linking words to connect your ideas.

Example: Yes, I use perfume daily. For instance, I prefer floral scents in the morning and something more subtle in the evening.

Suggestion: Your answer is good but could be more coherent. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid redundancy. Also, clarify who you would give perfumes to as gifts.

Example: Yes, I would buy perfume as a gift because receiving it makes me happy. Therefore, I like to give perfumes to my parents and friends on special occasions.

Suggestion: Your answer has some repetition and unclear phrases. Try to structure your response clearly with linking words and avoid repeating words. Also, explain why perfumes are good presents despite being expensive.

Example: Yes, I think perfumes can be quite expensive. However, they make excellent presents because many people feel happy to receive such thoughtful gifts.

× I usually wear perfume in daily life.

✓ I usually wear perfume in my daily life.

The phrase 'in daily life' is missing the possessive determiner 'my' to specify whose daily life is being referred to. The correct prepositional phrase is 'in my daily life' to indicate the student's own daily routine.

× I want to give someone such as parents, my parents and my friends as a gift.

✓ I want to give perfume as a gift to someone, such as my parents and my friends.

The original sentence misplaces 'as a gift' and lacks clarity. The preposition 'to' is needed after 'give' to indicate the recipient. Also, 'such as' should introduce examples clearly, and 'my parents' should be specified to avoid ambiguity.

× However it is good idea that as a present.

✓ However, it is a good idea as a present.

The original sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'good idea' and has an unnecessary 'that'. Also, a comma after 'However' improves readability. The corrected sentence is concise and grammatically correct.

× So I think some people feel happy when they when they get within get.

✓ So I think some people feel happy when they get it as a gift.

The original sentence contains repetition ('when they when they') and unclear wording ('within get'). The correction removes repetition and clarifies the meaning by specifying 'get it as a gift'.