Perfume— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more natural. For example, use 'make' instead of 'makes' to agree with 'fragrances', and avoid phrases like 'mostly addicted' which sound unnatural. Also, clarify what 'fluorescent perfumes' means or use a more common term. Try to keep your answer concise and avoid unnecessary details.

Example: Yes, definitely. I enjoy wearing fragrances that make me feel confident. Recently, I have been fond of fresh, floral perfumes, especially those from the brand Sara.

Suggestion: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more fluent. For example, say 'throughout the day' instead of 'whole day', and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, try to combine ideas smoothly using linking words.

Example: Yes, definitely. As I mentioned, it helps me feel more confident throughout the day, and because it makes me smell good, I also feel more energetic.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and informative, but you can improve coherence by using linking words and making sentences more concise. Also, avoid repeating 'giving' and 'gift' closely. Try to express your ideas more naturally.

Example: No, I usually avoid giving perfumes as gifts because in India, there is a belief that it might cause conflicts. However, I do buy perfumes for myself.

Suggestion: Your answer has good content but lacks clarity and contains incomplete sentences. Try to organize your ideas logically using linking words, avoid repetition, and complete your thoughts. Also, use more precise vocabulary like 'affordable' instead of 'cost effective' in this context.

Example: No, it depends on the brand. In India, there are many perfumes available at different price ranges. Some brands are expensive, while others offer affordable options. For example, regular brands provide perfumes that are quite budget-friendly.

× I enjoy wearing fragrances that makes me feel confident and nowadays I am mostly addicted to the fluorescent perfumes.

✓ I enjoy wearing fragrances that make me feel confident and nowadays I am mostly addicted to the fluorescent perfumes.

The relative pronoun 'that' refers to the plural noun 'fragrances', so the verb should be 'make' instead of 'makes' to agree in number.

× And its brand is from Sara.

✓ And its brand is Sara.

The phrase 'brand is from Sara' is incorrect because 'from' is unnecessary here. The correct way is to say 'its brand is Sara' to indicate the brand name.

× As I mentioned it helps me to feel more confident whole day and uh, it makes me smell good every time and I feel active.

✓ As I mentioned, it helps me to feel more confident the whole day, and it makes me smell good every time, so I feel active.

The sentence lacks commas and conjunctions for clarity and correct structure. Adding commas and 'so' improves readability and grammatical correctness.

× No, it depends upon the brand you're buying as in India there are different variety of perfumes available of different brands.

✓ No, it depends on the brand you're buying as in India there are different varieties of perfumes available from different brands.

The correct preposition is 'depends on' not 'depends upon'. Also, 'variety' should be plural 'varieties' to match 'different', and 'available of' should be 'available from'.

× Some are expensive and some are quite affordable. For example if we talk about normal perfumes which are from like normal brands, they are quite cost effective but the brands are and other.

✓ Some are expensive and some are quite affordable. For example, if we talk about normal perfumes which are from normal brands, they are quite cost effective, but the brands vary and others are different.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding missing words and correcting plural forms improves clarity and grammatical correctness.