Perfume— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to improve grammatical accuracy and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy. Also, correct phrases like 'live a post impression' to 'leave a positive impression'.

Example: Yes, I really like perfume because I believe it reflects a person's personality and shows that they are well-groomed. Moreover, many people find a pleasant fragrance attractive, so wearing perfume is a great way to leave a positive impression on others. Therefore, I like perfume as it also signifies a decent person.

Suggestion: Focus on completing your sentences and avoid incomplete thoughts. Use correct expressions like 'on a daily basis' and 'weddings' instead of 'marriage'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically.

Example: To be honest, I don't use perfume on a daily basis. However, I wear it on special occasions such as events or weddings because I think it is the best way to make a good impression on others.

Suggestion: Work on sentence structure and clarity. Use correct phrases like 'I would like to give perfume' and avoid repetition. Also, explain why perfume is a meaningful gift with linking words.

Example: Yes, I would like to give perfume as a gift because it is a great way to express emotions towards someone. Moreover, since perfume is used daily, it makes the gift more personal and meaningful.

Suggestion: Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence flow. Use linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas and correct phrases such as 'depends on perfume quality'.

Example: It is difficult to say whether perfumes are expensive because it depends on the perfume's quality. Some perfumes are very expensive due to their brand and fragrance; however, there are many affordable perfumes that people can easily buy.

× I really like perfume because I believe it reflects a person personality and show that they are well groomed.

✓ I really like perfume because I believe it reflects a person's personality and shows that they are well groomed.

The pronoun 'person' needs to be possessive as 'person's' to correctly show ownership of 'personality'. Also, the verb 'show' should be 'shows' to agree with the singular subject 'it' referring to perfume.

× I think wearing perfume is a great way to live a post impression on others.

✓ I think wearing perfume is a great way to leave a positive impression on others.

The phrase 'live a post impression' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'leave a positive impression'. 'Post' should be 'positive' and 'live' should be 'leave' to convey the intended meaning.

× That's why I like perfume and it also a sign of decent person.

✓ That's why I like perfume and it is also a sign of a decent person.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after 'it'. Also, 'decent person' needs an article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.

× I don't use perfume in my daily basis.

✓ I don't use perfume on a daily basis.

The correct preposition to use with 'daily basis' is 'on', not 'in'. Also, 'a' is needed before 'daily basis'.

× I use only on some occasions such as on events or whenever I go to marriage, because I think it is the best way to make good impression on others.

✓ I use it only on some occasions such as events or whenever I go to a marriage, because I think it is the best way to make a good impression on others.

The sentence is missing the object 'it' after 'use'. 'On events' should be 'events' without 'on'. 'Go to marriage' should be 'go to a marriage'. Also, 'make good impression' needs an article 'a' before 'good impression'.

× Well, whenever I.

✓ Well, whenever I do.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb. Adding 'do' completes the sentence and makes it grammatically correct.

× Yes, if I compare to perfume as a gift then I would like to be performed because it is the best way to express emotion towards one person and it is also related with the daily use.

✓ Yes, if I compare perfume as a gift, then I would like to give perfume because it is the best way to express emotion towards one person and it is also related to daily use.

The phrase 'I would like to be performed' is incorrect; it should be 'I would like to give perfume'. 'Compare to perfume' should be 'compare perfume'. 'Related with' should be 'related to'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I think it is the best gift to give someone in life that show emotion.

✓ I think it is the best gift to give someone in life that shows emotion.

The verb 'show' should be 'shows' to agree with the singular subject 'that' referring to 'gift'.

× It is difficult to say perfumes are expensive because it depends on performs quality.

✓ It is difficult to say that perfumes are expensive because it depends on the perfume's quality.

The sentence is missing 'that' after 'say'. 'Performs' is incorrect; it should be 'perfume's' to show possession. These changes make the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× Some of perfumes are very expensive due to their brand and their fragrance.

✓ Some perfumes are very expensive due to their brand and their fragrance.

The phrase 'Some of perfumes' is incorrect; it should be 'Some perfumes' without 'of'.

× But on the other side there are a lot of perfumes are very cheap and people can afford very easily.

✓ But on the other hand, there are a lot of perfumes that are very cheap and people can afford them very easily.

The phrase 'on the other side' should be 'on the other hand'. The sentence has a redundancy with 'are' twice; it should be 'perfumes that are'. Also, 'afford very easily' needs the object 'them' to clarify what can be afforded.