Perfume— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to avoid repeating words and focus on constructing clear, concise sentences. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide specific details about your preferences.

Example: Yes, I enjoy wearing perfume because it makes me feel confident and fresh throughout the day. I have a collection of various fragrances, but I especially like those with a vanilla scent because they are warm and comforting.

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but contains some redundancy and minor grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating words and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, specify what you mean by 'different shades' to improve clarity.

Example: Definitely, I use perfume every day as part of my morning routine. After completing my skincare and dressing up, I apply a fragrance. I own several perfumes with different scents suitable for various occasions.

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, be more specific about why perfume is a versatile gift.

Example: It depends on the person's preferences. If I know that someone likes perfume and their taste, I would consider buying it as a gift. Perfume is a versatile present because it suits many occasions and personal styles.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains many repetitions and incomplete thoughts. Focus on structuring your answer with clear sentences and use linking words to explain your points logically. Provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

Example: The price of perfumes varies depending on the brand, quality, and occasion. Some people believe it is worth spending money on a good perfume because it reflects their personality and boosts confidence.

× Of course I enjoy wearing perfume because it makes it makes me feel more confident and fresh throughout the day.

✓ Of course I enjoy wearing perfume because it makes me feel more confident and fresh throughout the day.

The phrase 'it makes it makes me feel' contains a repeated verb phrase. This is a redundancy error. Removing the repeated 'it makes' corrects the sentence and improves clarity.

× And I have a collection of different perfumes and I I do excellent in different fragrances.

✓ And I have a collection of different perfumes and I excel in different fragrances.

The phrase 'I do excellent in different fragrances' is incorrect because 'do excellent' is not a proper verb phrase. The correct verb is 'excel' to express proficiency. Also, the repeated 'I' is an error and should be removed.

× I I, I like the one and the perfume which has vanilla smell of.

✓ I like the perfume which has a vanilla smell.

The phrase 'vanilla smell of' is an incorrect prepositional phrase. The correct form is 'a vanilla smell' without 'of'. Also, the repeated 'I' should be removed for clarity.

× Definitely, I use perfume in in my daily life because when I wake up in the morning and when I get up, it is a part of my morning routine.

✓ Definitely, I use perfume in my daily life because when I wake up in the morning, it is a part of my morning routine.

The phrase 'in in my daily life' contains a repeated preposition 'in'. Also, 'when I get up' is redundant after 'when I wake up'. Removing the repetition and redundancy improves sentence clarity.

× After my skin care, I dressed up and I wear perfume.

✓ After my skin care, I dress up and I wear perfume.

The verb 'dressed' is in past tense, but the sentence describes a habitual action, so present tense 'dress' should be used to maintain tense consistency.

× I have a different shades of perfumes.

✓ I have different shades of perfume.

The phrase 'a different shades' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'shades'. Removing 'a' and using 'perfume' in singular form is correct here.

× It it depends upon the person's choices if a person like perfume.

✓ It depends upon the person's choices if a person likes perfume.

The verb 'like' should be in third person singular form 'likes' to agree with the singular subject 'a person'. Also, the repeated 'It' should be removed.

× If I know the person choices person taste on perfume, I would prefer buy perfume as a gift and as well as perfume is a versatile gift, we can give perfume gift.

✓ If I know the person's choices and taste in perfume, I would prefer to buy perfume as a gift. Also, perfume is a versatile gift; we can give perfume as a gift.

The phrase 'person choices person taste' lacks possessive forms and conjunctions. Correcting to 'person's choices and taste' and adding 'to' before 'buy' fixes the grammar. Also, sentence structure is improved by splitting into two sentences and adding necessary articles.

× It depends upon the brand and quality and it depends upon the personality some it depends upon the occasion so and and depends upon the mood also.

✓ It depends on the brand and quality, the personality, the occasion, and also the mood.

The phrase 'depends upon' is acceptable but 'depends on' is more common and natural. Also, the original sentence is run-on and repetitive. Simplifying and correcting prepositions improves clarity.

× So some of the people think it is a good worth to to spend money on good perfume.

✓ So some people think it is worth spending money on good perfume.

The phrase 'a good worth to to spend money' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'it is worth spending money'. Also, repeated 'to' is an error.