Perfume— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: 'buffet' thay vì 'perfume', 'helped me more elegant' nên là 'helps me feel more elegant'). Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và chính xác hơn, tránh lỗi sai và dùng từ phù hợp với ngữ cảnh.

Example: Yes, I like perfume because it has a pleasant fragrance that makes me feel elegant and relaxed. It also boosts my confidence when I go out with my friends.

Suggestion: Bạn cần chú ý phát âm và chính tả (ví dụ: 'perform' thay vì 'perfume'). Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn, tránh các câu không hoàn chỉnh như 'and you know'. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tự nhiên hơn.

Example: Yes, I use perfume every day because its pleasant fragrance helps me feel relaxed and comfortable. Moreover, it makes me more confident, so I find it easier to talk with my friends.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng phần đầu câu không phù hợp ('Few minutes a gift?'). Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác.

Example: No, I usually don't buy perfume as a gift because it is quite expensive. Instead, I prefer to buy more affordable presents like teddy bears or cakes, which are cute and practical.

Suggestion: Bạn đã trả lời đúng ý nhưng có lỗi từ vựng ('my friends' thay vì 'perfumes'). Hãy chú ý sử dụng từ chính xác và câu trả lời nên mạch lạc hơn bằng cách dùng liên từ phù hợp.

Example: Yes, I think perfumes can be quite expensive, especially those from well-known luxury brands. The high cost is often due to the quality of ingredients and the brand's reputation. For example, designer perfumes usually cost more.

× Yes, I enjoy buffet since it's fragrant, helped me more elegant and relaxed.

✓ Yes, I enjoy perfume since it's fragrant, helps me feel more elegant and relaxed.

The word 'buffet' is incorrect; it should be 'perfume'. 'Helped' is past tense but the sentence is present tense, so 'helps' is correct. Also, 'helped me more elegant' is incorrect; it should be 'helps me feel more elegant' to express the effect properly.

× Moreover, it provide me the confidence when I'm going out with my friends.

✓ Moreover, it provides me with confidence when I'm going out with my friends.

The subject 'it' is singular, so the verb should be 'provides' not 'provide'. Also, 'provide me the confidence' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'provides me with confidence'.

× Yes, I use perform in my daily life because it's pleasant fragrance helps me relax and comfortable.

✓ Yes, I use perfume in my daily life because its pleasant fragrance helps me relax and feel comfortable.

The word 'perform' is a typo; it should be 'perfume'. 'It's' (it is) should be 'its' (possessive). Also, 'helps me relax and comfortable' is incorrect; it should be 'helps me relax and feel comfortable' to maintain parallel structure.

× Moreover, I feel more confident and you know. Easy to talk with my friend.

✓ Moreover, I feel more confident, and you know, it is easy to talk with my friends.

The sentence is fragmented and lacks a subject in the second part. 'Easy to talk with my friend' is a fragment; it should be connected properly with a subject and verb. Also, 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match context.

× Few minutes a gift? No, I usually don't buy perfume as a gift because it's quite expensive.

✓ Perfume as a gift? No, I usually don't buy perfume as a gift because it's quite expensive.

'Few minutes a gift?' is nonsensical and likely a mishearing or typo. It should be 'Perfume as a gift?' to make sense in context.

× Instead, I prefer to buy more affordable presents like teddy bears or cake, which are cute and practical.

✓ Instead, I prefer to buy more affordable presents like teddy bears or cakes, which are cute and practical.

'Cake' should be plural 'cakes' to match the plural 'teddy bears' and maintain parallel structure.

× Yes, I think my friends can be quite expensive, especially those from well known luxury brands.

✓ Yes, I think perfumes can be quite expensive, especially those from well-known luxury brands.

'My friends' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'perfumes'. Also, 'well known' should be hyphenated as 'well-known' when used as an adjective.

× The high cost is often due to the quality of ingredients and the brands reputation.

✓ The high cost is often due to the quality of ingredients and the brand's reputation.

'Brands reputation' should be 'brand's reputation' to show possession. Also, 'brand' is singular here.

× For example designer perfumes usually cost more.

✓ For example, designer perfumes usually cost more.

A comma is needed after 'For example' to separate the introductory phrase from the main clause.