Perfume— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は自然ですが、"flavour"は香りに対して不適切な単語です。"scent"や"fragrance"を使うと良いでしょう。また、"like when I wake up how I feel I change it"の部分は文法的に不自然なので、より明確に表現しましょう。

Example: Yes, I really like perfumes and wear them almost every day. I usually change the scent depending on how I feel when I wake up.

Suggestion: 文法の誤りがあり、"I only wear once in a day"は"I only wear it once a day"のように修正が必要です。また、"It's almost makes my mind too ready"は不自然なので、"It helps me feel ready"などにすると良いでしょう。

Example: Yes, I use perfume almost every day, but I only wear it once after I take a shower. It helps me feel ready to work or go out.

Suggestion: 表現が不自然で、"share a smells"は誤りです。"share smells"ではなく、"share scents"や"choose scents"が適切です。また、"I don't buy a perfume as I"は文が未完成なので、明確にしましょう。

Example: I usually don't buy perfume as a gift because it's hard to choose a scent that others will like.

Suggestion: "it's cost more"は文法的に誤りで、"it costs more"が正しいです。また、"So it depends which brand do you like?"は質問の形が不自然なので、"So it depends on which brand you like."などに修正しましょう。

Example: Yes, I think perfumes can be expensive, but it really depends on the brand. For example, perfumes in department stores are usually cheaper than those in luxury areas.

× I really like perfumes.

✓ I really like perfume.

'Perfume' is an uncountable noun when referring to the substance in general, so it should be singular here.

× I wear perfumes almost every day.

✓ I wear perfume almost every day.

Same as above, 'perfume' is uncountable and should be singular when talking about usage in general.

× I change the flavour per day, like when I wake up how I feel I change it.

✓ I change the fragrance every day, depending on how I feel when I wake up.

'Per day' is less natural than 'every day'. Also, 'flavour' is not the correct word for scent; 'fragrance' or 'perfume' is better. The sentence structure was unclear and needed rephrasing for clarity.

× Yes, I use perfumes almost everyday but I only wear once in a day when I got a shower.

✓ Yes, I use perfume almost every day but I only wear it once a day after I take a shower.

'Perfume' should be singular as an uncountable noun. 'Everyday' (adjective) should be 'every day' (adverb). 'Got a shower' is incorrect; 'take a shower' is the correct expression. Also, 'wear' needs an object 'it'.

× After that I wear a perfume.

✓ After that, I wear perfume.

'Perfume' is uncountable and does not need an article 'a'.

× It's almost makes my mind too ready to work or go out or whatever.

✓ It almost makes my mind ready to work, go out, or do whatever.

The phrase 'It's almost makes' is incorrect; it should be 'It almost makes'. Also, 'too ready' is awkward; 'ready' suffices. The sentence structure was improved for clarity.

× I don't buy a perfume for a good gift because it's really difficult to share a smells with friends or lovers, whatever, whoever.

✓ I don't buy perfume as a gift because it's really difficult to share smells with friends or lovers, whoever they are.

'A perfume' should be 'perfume' (uncountable). 'A smells' is incorrect; 'smells' is plural and does not take 'a'. 'Whatever, whoever' is unclear; 'whoever they are' is more natural.

× The preference of fragrance is quite difficult to choose, so I don't buy a perfume as I.

✓ Choosing a preferred fragrance is quite difficult, so I don't buy perfume as a gift.

'The preference of fragrance' is awkward; 'choosing a preferred fragrance' is clearer. 'I don't buy a perfume as I' is incomplete and unclear; corrected to 'I don't buy perfume as a gift'.

× Yes I do but it really depends on the brand.

✓ Yes, I do, but it really depends on the brand.

Added commas for clarity; no plural issue here.

× I normally buy a fragrance in like department store but if I go to more like posh area to get a perfume it's cost more.

✓ I normally buy fragrance in department stores, but if I go to a more posh area to get perfume, it costs more.

'In like department store' is incorrect; 'in department stores' is correct. 'More like posh area' should be 'a more posh area'. 'It's cost more' should be 'it costs more'.

× So it depends which brand do you like?

✓ So it depends on which brand you like.

The sentence is a statement, not a question, so the word order should be 'you like' not 'do you like'. Also, 'depends on' requires the preposition 'on'.