Perfume— Part 1 Report

× I like wearing perfume, especially when it has a light or fresh sense.

✓ I like wearing perfume, especially when it has a light or fresh scent.

The word 'sense' is incorrect in this context; the correct noun to describe the smell of perfume is 'scent'. This is a vocabulary choice rather than a grammar error, but it affects clarity.

× I would like to choose a perfume, uh, with a fruity stance or it has a little bit sweet, uh, but I avoid to choose a perfume that has a strong or has a muscle or the wooden notes.

✓ I would like to choose a perfume with a fruity scent or one that is a little bit sweet, but I avoid choosing a perfume that has strong musk or woody notes.

The phrase 'avoid to choose' is incorrect; the verb 'avoid' should be followed by a gerund ('choosing'). Also, 'stance' should be 'scent', and 'muscle' is a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'musk'. Prepositions and verb forms need correction for grammatical accuracy.

× I usually use perfume in my daily life when I go to school or for everyday I usually use the like all the fresh scents but when I go to the party or hang out with my friend I usually use my favorite perfume to boost my confidence or it make me feel that I.

✓ I usually use perfume in my daily life when I go to school or every day I usually use all the fresh scents, but when I go to a party or hang out with my friends, I usually use my favorite perfume to boost my confidence or it makes me feel good.

The phrase 'for everyday' should be 'every day' (two words). 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the context. Also, 'it make me feel that I' is incomplete and should be corrected to 'it makes me feel good' for subject-verb agreement and clarity.

× it make me feel that I.

✓ it makes me feel that I do.

The subject 'it' requires the verb 'makes' in third person singular form. Also, the sentence is incomplete and needs completion for clarity.

× I think I would not buy perfume as a gift because any person has their own personality and has their own favorite sense.

✓ I think I would not buy perfume as a gift because everyone has their own personality and their own favorite scent.

The phrase 'any person' is awkward; 'everyone' is more appropriate. Also, 'favorite sense' should be 'favorite scent'. The modal verb 'would not' is correctly used here to express conditional preference.

× So I think perfume is not is not a good option as a gift and it was so expensive and it not fit our budget.

✓ So I think perfume is not a good option as a gift because it is so expensive and it does not fit our budget.

The sentence has redundancy ('is not is not') and incorrect verb forms ('was' should be 'is' to match present tense, 'it not fit' should be 'it does not fit'). Also, 'because' is needed to connect the clauses properly.

× Yes I think perfume are expensive especially when it come from a high end or the high end brands or the popular ones.

✓ Yes, I think perfumes are expensive especially when they come from high-end or popular brands.

'Perfume' should be plural 'perfumes' to agree with 'are'. 'It come' should be 'they come' to agree with plural subject. 'High end' should be hyphenated as 'high-end'.

× But you can also choose the nice one with earth sense that suit with you or your favorite from the mid band.

✓ But you can also choose a nice one with an earthy scent that suits you or your favorite from the mid-range brand.

'Earth sense' should be 'earthy scent'. 'Suit with you' is incorrect; it should be 'suits you'. 'Mid band' is unclear and should be 'mid-range brand'. Articles 'a' and 'an' are needed before 'nice one' and 'earthy scent' respectively.