Perfume— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is good but try to avoid redundancy and keep it more natural. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, instead of listing perfume types abruptly, you can say 'I have different types of perfume, such as sweet vanilla and rich chocolate, which I really enjoy.'

Example: Yes, I love perfumes because they make me feel confident. For instance, I have different types, such as sweet vanilla and rich chocolate fragrances, which I enjoy using depending on my mood.

Suggestion: Your answer has some repetition and unclear phrases. Try to be more concise and clear. Also, avoid repeating words and use linking words to explain your reason. For example, say 'I can't go out without wearing perfume because it boosts my confidence; I believe people notice your scent before your appearance.'

Example: Yes, I use perfume every day because it boosts my confidence. I believe that people notice your scent before they see you, so wearing perfume helps me feel good.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear but has some awkward phrasing and an unnecessary word at the end. Try to use linking words and avoid filler words. For example, say 'I would buy perfume as a gift because it shows the person is special to you, and most people appreciate receiving perfume.'

Example: Yes, I would buy perfume as a gift because it shows the person is special to you. Moreover, most people appreciate receiving perfume as it is a thoughtful present.

Suggestion: Your answer is good but avoid using 'although' and 'but' together. Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent. For example, say 'While some perfumes are expensive, many affordable options exist, so everyone can find one within their budget.'

Example: While some perfumes are expensive, many affordable options exist. Therefore, everyone can find a perfume that suits their budget, and I even have some budget-friendly ones in my collection.

× I have different types of perfume ranging from the sweet vanilla to the rich chocolate fragrance.

✓ I have different types of perfumes ranging from the sweet vanilla to the rich chocolate fragrance.

The word 'perfume' should be plural 'perfumes' because it refers to multiple types. Using the plural form matches the context of having various kinds.

× My perfumes are made-up of two bases which are natural essential oil or water base.

✓ My perfumes are made up of two bases which are natural essential oils or water base.

The phrase 'made-up of' is incorrect; it should be 'made up of' without a hyphen. Also, 'natural essential oil' should be plural 'natural essential oils' to agree with 'two bases'.

× I use perfume in my daily life.

✓ I use perfume in my daily life.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× In short I can't go out without wearing it because it builds boost my my confidence.

✓ In short, I can't go out without wearing it because it boosts my confidence.

The sentence has redundant words 'builds boost' and repeated 'my'. The correct verb is 'boosts' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Adding a comma after 'In short' improves clarity.

× Because I believe that you have smelt fence before you are seen.

✓ Because I believe that you have smelled scent before you are seen.

The phrase 'smelt fence' is incorrect; it should be 'smelled scent'. Also, 'smelled' is the correct past participle in this context. The sentence structure is awkward but kept as close as possible to original.

× Yes, I will buy a perfume as a gift for someone.

✓ Yes, I will buy perfume as a gift for someone.

The article 'a' before 'perfume' is unnecessary because 'perfume' is an uncountable noun here. Removing 'a' makes the sentence more natural.

× I believe that gifting that someone a perfume shows how special the person is to you.

✓ I believe that gifting someone a perfume shows how special the person is to you.

The phrase 'that someone' is incorrect; it should be simply 'someone'. The word 'that' is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× So I believe nobody will turn now down a perfume as a gift because it is something everybody looks forward to.

✓ So I believe nobody will turn down a perfume as a gift because it is something everybody looks forward to.

The word 'now' is incorrectly placed and unnecessary. Removing 'now' corrects the sentence.

× Although they are perfumes that are expensive, but they are perfumes too that are very affordable.

✓ Although there are perfumes that are expensive, there are perfumes too that are very affordable.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'Although' and 'but' together, which is redundant. Also, 'they are perfumes' is awkward; 'there are perfumes' is better. The correction removes 'but' and uses 'there are' for clarity.

× Although they are perfumes that are expensive, but they are perfumes too that are very affordable.

✓ Although there are perfumes that are expensive, there are perfumes too that are very affordable.

Using both 'Although' and 'but' together is incorrect. One should be removed to avoid redundancy.

× So everybody should work with their budget.

✓ So everybody should work within their budget.

The preposition 'with' is incorrect here; 'within' is the correct preposition to indicate staying inside a budget limit.

× There are so many budget friendly perfumes that are so, so good.

✓ There are so many budget-friendly perfumes that are very good.

'Budget friendly' should be hyphenated as 'budget-friendly' when used as an adjective. Also, 'so, so good' is informal; 'very good' is more appropriate.