Perfume— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer shows enthusiasm but has several language errors and unclear phrases. Try to speak more clearly and avoid repetition. Also, use correct brand names and explain why you like them. Keep your answer concise and natural.

Example: Yes, I definitely like perfume. I usually choose scents that are light and not too strong on the skin. For example, I love Burberry and Calvin Klein perfumes because they have fresh and pleasant fragrances.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct verb forms. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating 'definitely' multiple times.

Example: Yes, I use perfume daily. After showering, I apply it to eliminate any body odour. Moreover, I enjoy wearing perfume because it adds a pleasant fragrance and complements my personal style.

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but has many filler words and unclear sentence structure. Try to speak more fluently and organise your ideas logically. Use linking words to improve coherence and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

Example: Yes, I will buy perfume as a gift. In fact, my brother-in-law's birthday is coming up next month, and since he loves perfumes, I plan to give him one as a present.

Suggestion: Your answer is repetitive and incomplete. Avoid filler words and finish your sentences clearly. Use appropriate expressions to describe cost and give reasons. Also, check brand names for accuracy.

Example: Yes, I think perfumes can be expensive, especially branded ones like Burberry, Calvin Klein, and Bvlgari. These perfumes cost a lot because of their quality and brand reputation.

× Basically I I use perfume which which is not much harder as well as the eye.

✓ Basically, I use perfume which is not too strong and is gentle on the skin.

The phrase 'not much harder as well as the eye' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning seems to be that the perfume is not too strong and is gentle on the skin. Using 'harder' is incorrect here; 'strong' or 'intense' would be appropriate adjectives. Also, 'as well as the eye' is incorrect; it should refer to the skin or be omitted. The sentence needs rephrasing for clarity and correct adjective use.

× Especially I love the Burberry as well as cable clean tomb.

✓ Especially, I love Burberry as well as Calvin Klein Tom Ford.

The sentence contains incorrect brand names and awkward phrasing. 'Cable clean tomb' seems to be a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'Calvin Klein Tom Ford'. Also, 'the Burberry' is incorrect; brand names usually do not take 'the'. Correcting the brand names and removing unnecessary articles improves clarity and correctness.

× After taking a shower I definitely use a perfume so that it remove my bad body order.

✓ After taking a shower, I definitely use perfume so that it removes my bad body odor.

The article 'a' before 'perfume' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Also, 'remove' should be 'removes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. 'Order' is a misspelling of 'odor'. Adding a comma after the introductory phrase improves readability.

× Apart from this I love to wear it so that it fragrance as well as the suits my personal style.

✓ Apart from this, I love to wear it so that it fragrances well and suits my personal style.

The verb 'fragrance' is incorrectly used; the correct verb is 'fragrances'. Also, 'the suits' is incorrect; it should be 'suits' without 'the'. Adding a comma after the introductory phrase improves sentence flow.

× Yes, definitely uh, I will buy perfume as a gift uh, after a month, actually my brother-in-law uh will have a birthday at that time.

✓ Yes, definitely, I will buy perfume as a gift after a month because my brother-in-law will have a birthday then.

The sentence has unnecessary fillers like 'uh' and awkward phrasing. 'At that time' is better replaced with 'then' for clarity. The sentence is corrected for smoother modal verb usage and clarity.

× Uh, I definitely uh gift to I will definitely give to him because he loves a lot of perfume.

✓ I will definitely give it to him because he loves perfume a lot.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unnecessary fillers. 'Gift to I will definitely give to him' is incorrect. The corrected sentence uses proper word order and removes fillers for clarity.

× Yes, of course, I think that perfumes are expensive perfumes, uh, which are branded like, uh, Burberry, Calvin Klein, uh, and, uh, Bellavite.

✓ Yes, of course, I think that branded perfumes like Burberry, Calvin Klein, and Bellavite are expensive.

The phrase 'perfumes are expensive perfumes' is redundant. The sentence is restructured to avoid repetition and improve clarity. Also, fillers like 'uh' are removed.

× So these are type of perfumes are quite, uh, caused and arm and leg, uh, because it's a.

✓ So these types of perfumes are quite expensive and cost an arm and a leg because of their brand value.

The phrase 'caused and arm and leg' is incorrect and unclear. The correct idiom is 'cost an arm and a leg' meaning very expensive. Also, 'these are type' should be 'these types'. The sentence is corrected for idiomatic expression and grammar.