Perfume— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, I like perfume") then give one or two specific reasons with correct grammar and appropriate vocabulary. Avoid redundancy and incomplete phrases (e.g., finish brand list). Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I like perfume because it helps me feel more confident and expresses different sides of my personality. For example, I prefer floral scents for daytime and richer, woody fragrances for evenings, and I especially enjoy luxury brands like Chanel for their long-lasting formulas.

Suggestion: Clarify and correct word choice, and organize the answer logically. Start with a direct statement about frequency, then explain reasons briefly with linking words. Replace incorrect words (e.g., "kosher clothes") with suitable terms like "casual clothes". Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Example: Not really — I don't wear perfume every day because I spend most of my time at college. I usually wear casual clothes to class, so I don't worry much about my outfit. However, I do wear perfume on special occasions such as my birthday or parties.

Suggestion: Be more specific and natural when explaining why perfume makes a good gift. Use singular/plural agreement and clearer examples. Use linking words like "because" and give one precise example of a scent and the message it conveys.

Example: Yes, I often buy perfume as a gift because it feels personal and luxurious. For example, a light floral scent can suggest sweetness and youthfulness, while a warm, spicy fragrance might convey sophistication, so I choose scents based on the recipient's personality.

Suggestion: Give a direct opinion then support it with a brief reason and an example. Use correct grammar and smoother phrasing (e.g., "Chanel perfumes cost over CN¥500"). You can mention perceived value to balance the opinion.

Example: Yes, I think many perfumes are expensive, especially designer brands — for instance, Chanel perfumes often cost over CN¥500. However, some people consider them worth the price because of the quality and lasting scent.

× Applying perfume can make me more fragrant and different smells of perfume can experience different personalities.

✓ Applying perfume can make me smell more pleasant, and different scents of perfume can convey different personalities.

The sentence uses incorrect prepositions and verbs: 'make me more fragrant' is understandable but 'smell more pleasant' is more natural; 'different smells of perfume can experience different personalities' is ungrammatical because a smell cannot 'experience' a personality. Use the verb 'convey' to express that a scent communicates personality. Also replace 'smells' with 'scents' for collocation and use parallel structure with 'and'. Suggestions: use 'smell' or 'smell more pleasant' and 'convey different personalities'.

× I extremely like some perfume of luxury brands like Chanel or.

✓ I really like some perfumes from luxury brands like Chanel.

The original has article and word choice issues: 'extremely like' is awkward (use 'really like'), 'some perfume' should be plural 'some perfumes' when referring to types, and 'of luxury brands' is better as 'from luxury brands'. The fragment 'or.' is incomplete and was removed. Suggestion: use 'really like' and pluralize when speaking about items in general.

× Actually I don't often use perfume, most of my time is spent in my college.

✓ Actually I don't often use perfume; most of my time is spent at college.

Preposition error: use 'at college' or 'in college' rather than 'in my college' when describing time spent studying. Also punctuation: two independent clauses should be separated (semicolon or period). Suggestion: use 'at college' and separate clauses.

× I usually wear some kosher clothes to classroom and at that time I don't care more about my outfit, but it sounds special.

✓ I usually wear simple clothes to class, and at that time I don't care much about my outfit, so it doesn't feel special.

Several word choice errors: 'kosher clothes' is incorrect in this context (kosher relates to food); 'to classroom' should be 'to class' or 'to the classroom'; 'don't care more' should be 'don't care much'; 'but it sounds special' is unclear—likely meant 'so it doesn't feel special.' Suggestion: use 'simple clothes', 'to class', and 'don't care much'.

× Occasions like my birthday I will apply.

✓ On occasions like my birthday, I will apply perfume.

Sentence structure and preposition are missing: use 'On occasions like my birthday' to mark time, and specify the object 'apply perfume'. Also add comma after the introductory phrase. Suggestion: include the object after 'apply' and use the correct prepositional phrase.

× Yes, I think it is really a good gift to present to our friends.

✓ Yes, I think it is a really good gift to give to friends.

Pronoun 'our' implies the speaker and listener share the same friends, which may be unintended; 'give to friends' is more natural than 'present to our friends'. Also word order: 'a really good gift' is natural. Suggestion: use 'give to friends' or 'give to my friends' if referring to personal friends.

× Different smells of perfume means different meanings.

✓ Different scents of perfume have different meanings.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice: 'Different smells ... means' is incorrect—'smells' is plural so use 'have'. 'Different meanings' is repetitive; using 'have different meanings' is fine. Use 'scents' instead of 'smells' for natural collocation. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and prefer 'scents'.

× It can express their personalities, such as the flower perfume can let people think you are a sweet girl.

✓ It can express personality; for example, a floral perfume can make people think you are sweet.

Pronoun 'their' is vague when referring back to 'friends' or 'people'; simplify to 'express personality'. 'the flower perfume' is awkward—use 'a floral perfume'. 'let people think you are a sweet girl' is wordy; 'make people think you are sweet' is natural. Suggestion: use 'floral perfume' and concise phrasing.

× Yes, I think it is really expensive, especially some luxury products like the perfume of Chanel is over CN¥500.

✓ Yes, I think they are really expensive, especially luxury products; for example, a Chanel perfume can cost over CN¥500.

Agreement and article issues: 'it is really expensive' should agree with plural 'perfumes' ('they are'). The clause 'like the perfume of Chanel is over CN¥500' is ungrammatical; restructure to 'for example, a Chanel perfume can cost over CN¥500.' Suggestion: match subject number and use natural noun phrases like 'a Chanel perfume'.

× I think it can almost buy a pair of shoes, so it's a little bit expensive.

✓ I think it could almost buy a pair of shoes, so it's a bit expensive.

Modal verb and quantifier phrasing: 'can almost buy' is acceptable but 'could almost buy' better expresses possibility in context. 'a little bit expensive' is wordy; 'a bit expensive' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'could' for hypothetical and simplify modifiers.