Dreams— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문장 구조와 표현이 혼란스럽고 의미 전달이 불분명합니다. 우선 간결한 주제 문장으로 시작하고, 이유를 명확하게 뒷받침하세요. 불필요한 반복을 피하고 단어 선택을 자연스럽게 고치세요. 예를 들어 'partisan'과 같은 잘못된 단어를 정확히 고쳐야 합니다. 또한 최대 3~4문장으로 답을 제한하고 연결어(for example, because, so)를 적절히 사용하세요.

Example: Yes, I can. When I was in elementary school I often dreamed about making desserts because I love sweet food. I wanted to create my own cakes and pastries, so I practiced baking at home. Those dreams inspired me to learn basic recipes and techniques.

Suggestion: 이 답변은 의미 전달은 되지만 어휘 선택과 문법적 오류(예: 'Patricia', 'every each weekend')가 있어 자연스럽지 않습니다. 주제 문장 뒤에 구체적인 예시와 결과를 덧붙이고, 시제와 반복을 바로잡으세요. 연결어(so, therefore, because)를 적절히 사용해 흐름을 매끄럽게 만드세요.

Example: Yes, I shared my dream of baking with my family, and my parents let me bake on weekends. As a result, I practiced making cakes and cookies every weekend, which was very enjoyable and helped me improve my skills.

Suggestion: 중복된 이유 제시와 모호한 표현이 많아 설득력이 떨어집니다. 하나의 명확한 입장을 말한 뒤, 구체적이고 논리적인 이유 1~2개를 제시하세요. 연결어를 사용해 이유를 정리하고, 반복을 피하세요.

Example: Yes, I believe some dreams can have special meanings because they often reflect our emotions or concerns. For example, dreaming about failing exams might indicate anxiety about studies, while pleasant dreams can show satisfaction or hope.

Suggestion: 문법 오류와 부정 표현이 중복되어 있어 의미가 불명확합니다. 질문에 직접적으로 답한 뒤 이유를 간결히 설명하세요. 과거 경험과 현재 감정의 차이를 분명히 하고, 필요한 경우 미래 계획을 하나 제시하세요.

Example: Not really. I used to bake desserts a lot, but I found it less enjoyable over time. Therefore, I don't plan to pursue it seriously, although I might still bake occasionally for fun.

× I had a dream of partisan when I was young, like in elementary school, because I like very delicious desserts and I want to make them for my own.

✓ I had a dream of becoming a pastry chef when I was young, around elementary school, because I like delicious desserts and I wanted to make them for myself.

원문은 의미가 불분명하고 어순과 단어 선택이 부정확합니다. 'partisan'은 잘못된 단어이며 'becoming a pastry chef'가 적절합니다. 시제 일관성을 위해 'wanted'로 과거 시제를 사용하고 목적격 표현은 'for myself'로 고쳐야 합니다. Suggestions: use 'become/becoming' with professions, maintain consistent past tense when referring to past desires, and use 'for myself' rather than 'for my own'.

× Yes, I shared my dreams of Patricia with my family and my parents allowed me to make a dessert in every each weekend.

✓ Yes, I shared my dreams of becoming a pastry chef with my family and my parents allowed me to make a dessert every weekend.

원문에서 'Patricia'는 잘못된 고유명사 사용으로 보이며 대명사와 관사 사용이 어색합니다. 'in every each weekend'는 중복 표현이므로 'every weekend'로 고쳐야 합니다. Suggestions: avoid unnecessary words like 'each' with 'every', use correct noun phrase for 'dreams of becoming a ...'.

× So I make desserts in every weekend and it was very fun.

✓ So I made desserts every weekend and it was very fun.

문장 내 시제가 혼합되어 있어 일관성이 없습니다. 과거에 했던 일을 말하므로 'made'로 과거 시제로 통일해야 합니다. 또한 'in every weekend'는 'every weekend'로 수정해야 합니다. Suggestions: keep tense consistent; use 'every weekend' without 'in'.

× Of course dreams have special meaning because it is a dream itself, because dreaming is a lot for everyone and anyone so.

✓ Of course dreams have special meanings because dreaming can be meaningful for everyone.

원문은 중복된 접속사와 어색한 표현('dreaming is a lot for everyone and anyone so')으로 문장 구조가 불안정합니다. 'meaning'을 복수로 하고 간결하게 표현해야 합니다. Suggestions: avoid redundancy, choose concise expression like 'dreaming can be meaningful for everyone'.

× Also, my dreams are very special Meaning.

✓ Also, my dreams are very special to me.

'special Meaning'는 대소문자 및 명사 사용이 잘못되었습니다. 감정을 나타낼 때는 'special to me'처럼 전치사구를 사용합니다. Suggestions: use 'special to me' or 'have special meaning to me'.

× I'm not usually think about that, but no, I'm I don't think so because I made my desserts at the time already and I felt making a dessert is very not that very much fun for me.

✓ I don't usually think about that. No, I don't think so because I already made my desserts at that time and I found making desserts was not very fun for me.

원문은 'I'm not usually think'와 같은 현재 시제 오류, 불필요한 'I'm', 시제 혼합('made'와 현재식 표현)이 있습니다. 'not very fun'의 부정 표현도 어색하므로 'was not very fun'로 수정했습니다. Suggestions: use 'I don't usually think about' for habit, remove extra 'I'm', keep past tense when referring to completed actions, and use 'found ... not very fun' for opinions about past experiences.