Emails— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 応答を簡潔で文法的に正しく、流暢にする必要があります。現在の回答は語順や文法の誤り（例："Is I"）、語の重複（"when it when it"）や不自然な表現が目立ちます。改善点は：1) まず直接に主題文で答える（例："Yes, I often send emails."）。2) その後に短く具体的な理由を付け加える（例："mainly for university applications and school or business matters"）。3) 文は2〜3文にまとめ、過去形や進行形の誤用を避ける。語彙はシンプルで文法の正確さを優先してください。

Example: Yes, I often send emails. I mostly use them for university applications and for school or business inquiries, so I have had many opportunities to write formal messages recently.

Suggestion: 回答が曖昧で語法の誤り（"please create around afternoon"）や冗長な表現があります。改善方法：1) 先に明確な時刻帯を提示（例："I usually send emails in the afternoon."）。2) その後に条件を短く説明（例："but sometimes I send them whenever I have a free period at school"）。3) 無駄な繰り返しを避け、接続詞（"but", "because", "so"）を適切に使って論理をつなぐ。

Example: I usually send emails in the afternoon, but it really depends — if I have a free period at school I might send them anytime during the day.

Suggestion: 全体の意味は伝わりますが、口語的なフィラー（"uh"）と繰り返し（"easily, easily"）があり、文をもう少し洗練できます。改善点：1) フィラーを減らして流暢さを高める。2) 理由を1〜2の短いフレーズで具体化（例："instant messaging, convenience, mobile use"）。3) 文を2文以内にまとめ、論理的な接続を明確にする。

Example: Sending emails is becoming less popular in China because instant messaging apps like WeChat are more convenient; people can check messages and reply instantly on their phones.

Suggestion: 考えは明確ですが、文が長くまとまりがなく、フィラーが多く論理の接続が弱いです。改善方法：1) トピックセンテンスで結論を述べる（"I think it will become less popular."）。2) その後に理由を2点程度短く述べる（例："used mainly for formal purposes; informal communication is shifting to social apps"）。3) 文法的に完結した短文を使い、"but"や"even though"の使い方に注意する。

Example: I think emails will become less popular because most people will prefer instant messaging for casual communication, while email will remain for formal purposes like work or university.

× Is I often send emails when it when it comes to the things like school and business.

✓ I often send emails when it comes to things like school and business.

The subject pronoun 'I' should start a declarative sentence with the verb following it (subject + verb). The original begins with 'Is I' which incorrectly uses the auxiliary 'is'. Remove 'Is' to form a correct simple present statement: 'I often send emails...'. Also remove the duplicate phrase 'it' to avoid redundancy.

× Since I'm recently I'm applying to university, I have a lot of chances to send emails for inquiries and.

✓ Recently I am applying to university, so I have had many opportunities to send emails for inquiries.

The adverb 'recently' should not be combined with 'Since' here; use 'Recently' or 'Since' correctly. 'I'm applying' is acceptable present continuous, but 'have a lot of chances' is unnatural; use 'have had many opportunities' or 'have many opportunities'. Also sentence ended abruptly with 'and' so finish the thought. This correction preserves present continuous for ongoing application and uses natural collocation 'opportunities to send emails for inquiries'.

× The time I usually send emails is please create around afternoon but actually it depends because when the time I have free period for my school I can send emails anytime when I'm free.

✓ I usually send emails in the afternoon, but it depends; when I have a free period at school I can send emails whenever I am free.

Original has awkward word order and unnecessary phrases such as 'please create' and repeated time expressions. Use clear time expression 'in the afternoon' and connect clauses with 'but' and a semicolon or comma. Replace 'the time I have free period for my school' with 'when I have a free period at school' and 'anytime when I'm free' with 'whenever I am free' for natural flow.

× Sending emails is getting less popular in China, I assume because, uh, recently those social media apps like, uh, WeChat is more popular because it's more convenient and we can easily, easily check and make a response for it.

✓ Sending emails is becoming less popular in China, I assume, because social media apps like WeChat are more popular; they are more convenient and we can easily check and respond to messages.

'Is getting' is informal; 'is becoming' is better. The subject 'apps' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also 'make a response for it' is incorrect collocation; use 'respond to messages' or 'reply to them'. Clarify pronoun 'it' to 'messages'.

× I think sending emails will get less popular in the future because even though, uh, many people still use emails for their formal settings, like sending business emails, school emails, but uh, then in fact, there's a increasing use of social.

✓ I think sending emails will become less popular in the future because, although many people still use email for formal purposes such as business or school, the use of social media is increasing.

Avoid mixing 'because' with 'even though' and multiple conjunctions; use 'although' or restructure the sentence. 'Emails' as a medium is better referred to as 'email' in general. 'Formal settings' should be 'formal purposes'. 'There's a increasing use of social' is incomplete and ungrammatical; change to 'the use of social media is increasing'.