Emails— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and confident. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), and provide one brief supporting reason. Use linking words to connect ideas and vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., 'prefer' instead of repeating 'use').

Example: No, I don't send emails often. I prefer instant messaging apps like WhatsApp and Instagram because they are quicker and more convenient for staying in touch with friends and family.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer first, then one clear reason. Remove hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., 'in the evening' not 'evening time', 'other work' not 'other works'). Use a linking word like 'because' or 'so' once to connect reason.

Example: I usually send emails in the evening because mornings are reserved for studying and other tasks, so I find evenings more convenient to write and respond to messages.

Suggestion: State your opinion clearly then support it with a specific contrast. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use a precise example (WeChat is widely used in China) and a linking word like 'because' or 'whereas'.

Example: I don't think emails are very popular in China because people prefer instant messaging apps such as WeChat for daily communication, whereas email is used mostly for formal or business purposes.

Suggestion: Make a clear prediction and explain the distinction between personal and professional use. Remove hesitations and tighten language (e.g., 'less popular overall, but will remain important for work'). Use linking phrases like 'however' to contrast ideas.

Example: I think email will become less popular for personal use as instant messaging grows; however, it will remain important in the workplace for formal communication and record-keeping.

× I do not often send emails because I use, uh, I use social media for interacting with people such as Instagram or WhatsApp, which is really important for me to keep in touch with my friends and family.

✓ I do not often send emails because I use social media to interact with people, such as Instagram or WhatsApp, which are really important for me to keep in touch with my friends and family.

Using 'for interacting with' is awkward; the correct form is 'to interact with' to express purpose. Also use plural verb 'are' to agree with plural subject 'Instagram or WhatsApp'. Suggest using 'to interact with' and ensuring subject-verb agreement for clarity.

× Umm, I, when I send emails to others, I usually send emails in evening time, because in morning time it's, it's really essential for me to study and to work other works.

✓ When I send emails to others, I usually send them in the evening because in the morning it is essential for me to study and do other work.

Use definite articles with time expressions: 'in the evening' and 'in the morning'. 'Send emails in evening time' is unnatural. 'To work other works' is incorrect; use 'do other work'. Also replace contractions and fillers for clarity and keep present simple for habitual action.

× So I prefer to sending e-mail, uh, in the evening time.

✓ So I prefer sending emails in the evening.

After 'prefer' when followed by a verb, use the gerund ('sending') or 'to' + infinitive consistently. 'Prefer to sending' is incorrect. Also use plural 'emails' and natural time expression 'in the evening'.

× I think sending emails is not popular in China because Chinese people prefer to use WhatsApp or WeChat applications such as, uh, which is social media application.

✓ I think sending emails is not popular in China because Chinese people prefer to use apps like WeChat rather than email.

Sentence is wordy and contains awkward pronoun/reference ('such as, uh, which is social media application'). 'Applications' and 'app' redundancy. Simplify to 'apps like WeChat' for clear reference. Also compare with email directly.

× I think it's more more instant messaging in message.

✓ I think instant messaging is faster and more common.

Original has repeated word 'more' and wrong structure 'more instant messaging in message.' Use comparative adjectives/adverbs properly: 'faster' or 'more common', and correct noun phrasing 'instant messaging'.

× So people like to use these application to communicate with others.

✓ So people like to use these applications to communicate with others.

Use plural 'applications' to agree with 'these'. Also keep 'to communicate with others' which is correct prepositional phrase; main error was singular/plural mismatch.

× I think the sending e-mail is more, uh, less popular in the future because instant communication is more, is more, uh, popular in the world, But uh, in the work, in the job, uh, the e-mail is really essential to interact with the coworkers or, uh, partnerships.

✓ I think sending emails will be less popular in the future because instant communication is becoming more popular worldwide. However, at work, email is essential for interacting with coworkers or business partners.

Remove unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'sending email' and use plural 'emails'. Use future tense 'will be' for prediction. 'In the work, in the job' is unnatural; use 'at work'. Use 'coworkers' and 'business partners' for correct collocations. Also change 'is more, is more' repetition and improve sentence flow.

× So I think it remains.

✓ So I think it will remain important.

Context is future prediction, so use future 'will remain' and add 'important' to make sentence complete and clear. 'It remains' is present tense and incomplete here.