Emails— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is natural, relevant and concise. To improve further, start with a clear topic sentence, avoid minor redundancy ("I don't use e-mail much" and "Not really"), and vary sentence openings. Add one specific example to make it more vivid (e.g., how often or a typical situation).

Example: Not really — I rarely use email. I usually message friends and family on WeChat because it’s faster and more convenient; for example, I text my parents every evening. For school, I submit assignments through a dedicated app or message my class monitor when needed.

Suggestion: Strong, direct response with good reasons. To reach full marks, tighten phrasing for fluency and add a brief specific example (which teacher or what kind of announcement) and use a linking phrase to connect the two uses smoothly.

Example: I usually email when I submit an assignment or a presentation to my teachers because email creates a formal record. For example, I emailed my course tutor last month to submit a project and to announce a change in our study group’s meeting time.

Suggestion: Good clear answer with appropriate contrast. Improve by starting with a stronger topic sentence and adding a brief statistic or concrete comparison (e.g., examples of formal uses) to make the statement more specific. Also avoid repeating "not really" and "rarely" back-to-back.

Example: Not very popular for casual use — most people in China rely on WeChat for daily chats. Email tends to be reserved for formal matters, for instance submitting university paperwork or exchanging CVs and contracts with employers, while younger people prefer instant messaging.

Suggestion: Clear opinion and sound reasons. To improve, correct minor phrasing issues ("share fields" is unclear — likely "share files") and use a linking phrase (e.g., "however") to show nuance. You could add a brief prediction about which contexts will still use email to show balance.

Example: I think email will become less popular because real‑time messaging apps like WeChat let people communicate and share files much faster. However, email will probably remain important for formal communications — for example, official notices from universities or job applications.

× I don't use e-mail much, I usually communicate with friends and family via WeChat because it's more convenient and faster.

✓ I don't use e-mail much; I usually communicate with friends and family via WeChat because it's more convenient and faster.

Two independent clauses joined with a comma create a comma splice. Use a semicolon or separate into two sentences. This is a sentence structure error related to clause joining; corrected by using a semicolon to connect the clauses properly.

× And for school I submit assignments through a dedicated application or send messages to my class monitor.

✓ For school, I submit assignments through a dedicated application or send messages to my class monitor.

Beginning a sentence with 'And' is informal and can create a fragment-like feel; removing 'And' and adding a comma after the introductory phrase improves formality and flow. This fixes sentence structure and punctuation.

× Because e-mail provides a formal record and is widely accepted by the school, I also use e-mail to inform people about important matters, such as changes to meeting times or official announcements.

✓ I also use e-mail to inform people about important matters, such as changes to meeting times or official announcements, because e-mail provides a formal record and is widely accepted by the school.

Starting with 'Because' can produce a sentence fragment if not followed by a main clause; here the sentence was acceptable but placing the 'because' clause at the end improves clarity and flow. This addresses sentence structure and emphasis.

× Not really. Most people in China use WeChat to keep in touch with family and friends. e-mail is mainly used for formal purposes such as submitting assignments or sending professional documents, and younger people rarely use it for everyday communication.

✓ Not really. Most people in China use WeChat to keep in touch with family and friends. E-mail is mainly used for formal purposes such as submitting assignments or sending professional documents, and younger people rarely use it for everyday communication.

Sentence begins a new sentence with a lowercase 'e' in 'e-mail'. Capitalize the first letter of the sentence. This is an orthographic/article-style error affecting sentence correctness.

× I think e-mail will become less popular in the future because real time messaging and collaboration applications like WeChat let people communicate and share fields much more quickly.

✓ I think e-mail will become less popular in the future because real-time messaging and collaboration applications like WeChat let people communicate and share files much more quickly.

The word 'fields' is incorrect here; the intended noun is 'files'. Also 'real-time' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective before a noun. This fixes word choice and compound adjective formation.

× These platforms also integrate video calls and document editing, which makes them more convenient for everyday work.

✓ These platforms also integrate video calls and document editing, which make them more convenient for everyday work.

Subject 'video calls and document editing' is plural, so the relative clause should use plural verb 'make' instead of 'makes'. This is subject-verb agreement issue with verb form.