Art— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is enthusiastic but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your response more concise and grammatically correct by avoiding repeated words and awkward phrasing. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I have loved drawing since I was a child. I often spend my free time drawing and painting various pictures, and even as an adult, I still enjoy this hobby very much.

Suggestion: Your answer shows your interest clearly, but avoid informal phrases like 'you know' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect your feelings and reasons logically.

Example: Yes, I really enjoy visiting galleries. When I am surrounded by fantastic masterpieces, I feel excited and fascinated because I appreciate the creativity and skill involved.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant, but some sentences are fragmented and repetitive. Try to combine ideas smoothly using linking words and correct tense usage for better coherence.

Example: Absolutely. As a mother of a nine-year-old girl, I am eager to learn more about art so that I can inspire her creativity and provide strong support for her passion.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect your ideas clearly. Also, be careful with verb forms and article usage.

Example: Yes, I learned drawing when I was a child. My parents encouraged me to express my ideas through painting, which helped me develop patience and a strong passion for art.

× Yes, I'm I'm a drawing lover since I was a child.

✓ Yes, I've been a drawing lover since I was a child.

The sentence incorrectly uses the present simple 'I'm' with a time expression 'since I was a child' which requires the present perfect tense to indicate an action or state continuing from the past to the present. The correct form is 'I've been'. Also, the repetition of 'I'm' is a typographical error.

× I always spend my quality time, enjoy drawing and painting all kinds of pictures and when I grow up I still always fond of enjoy.

✓ I always spend my quality time enjoying drawing and painting all kinds of pictures, and even as I grow up, I am still fond of it.

The verb 'spend' should be followed by the gerund form 'enjoying'. The phrase 'fond of enjoy' is incorrect; 'fond of' should be followed by a noun or gerund, so 'fond of it' or 'fond of drawing' is correct. Also, the sentence structure is awkward and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× When I hang out in a gallery which filled with, you know, fantastic masterpieces, I feel so excited and fascinated about that.

✓ When I hang out in a gallery which is filled with, you know, fantastic masterpieces, I feel so excited and fascinated by that.

The phrase 'which filled with' is missing the auxiliary verb 'is' to form the passive present participle 'is filled'. Also, the preposition 'about' after 'fascinated' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'by'.

× I feel so excited and fascinated about that.

✓ I feel so excited and fascinated by that.

The adjective 'fascinated' is correctly followed by the preposition 'by', not 'about'. Using 'about' is incorrect in this context.

× I was eager. I'm eager to learn more about art.

✓ I am eager to learn more about art.

The sentence 'I was eager' is inconsistent with the present context of wanting to learn more about art. The present tense 'I am eager' is appropriate here. Also, the two sentences can be combined for clarity.

× Since I am a mother of nine year old girl, I was eager.

✓ Since I am a mother of a nine-year-old girl, I am eager.

The phrase 'nine year old girl' needs hyphens to form the compound adjective 'nine-year-old'. Also, the article 'a' is missing before 'nine-year-old girl'. The tense should be present to match the ongoing situation.

× Yes, I learned drawing since I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I have learned drawing since I was a kid.

The phrase 'since I was a kid' requires the present perfect tense to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present. 'I have learned' is correct instead of simple past 'I learned'.

× so I was immersed myself into creating the different kinds of pictures.

✓ so I immersed myself in creating different kinds of pictures.

The verb 'immerse' is transitive and does not require 'was' in passive form here. The correct active form is 'I immersed myself'. Also, the preposition 'into' should be 'in' after 'immersed'.