Talents— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat long and slightly repetitive. Try to be more concise and organise your ideas clearly. Start with one talent, explain it briefly, then mention the other talent with a linking phrase. Avoid vague phrases like 'I like' at the end without completing the thought.

Example: Yes, I am good at cooking, especially making desserts for my family, who often compliment my dishes. Additionally, I have a talent for playing a traditional musical instrument from my country, which I enjoy very much.

Suggestion: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Be sure to answer directly and use past tense consistently. Also, explain the name of the instrument clearly and avoid vague phrases like 'I show my talent'.

Example: I started learning the instrument called the 'center' about eight years ago when I was young. Although I dreamed of playing the piano as a child, it was too expensive for me to learn.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat off-topic and lacks coherence. Focus on how your talent relates to your future work. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid incomplete sentences. Also, be careful with grammar and word choice.

Example: Although I plan to work as a nurse in a foreign country, I believe my musical talent will be useful for relaxation during my free time. Playing music helps me recharge and stay focused, which is important for my demanding job.

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use singular/plural forms correctly and link your ideas smoothly. Be more specific about their talents and classes.

Example: Yes, my siblings are also talented musicians. They are currently attending many music classes, and I believe they have excellent skills in playing various musical instruments.

× The other thing that I like to mention is that I have a talent on playing musical instrument which is a traditional musical instrument in my country and I like.

✓ The other thing that I like to mention is that I have a talent for playing a musical instrument which is a traditional musical instrument in my country and I like it.

The phrase 'talent on playing' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'talent for playing'. Also, 'musical instrument' needs an article 'a' before it. Additionally, the sentence is missing 'it' at the end to complete the thought. Using 'for' after 'talent' is the standard collocation in English.

× If I'm not mistaken, it was 8 years ago. I started to learn it.

✓ If I'm not mistaken, it was 8 years ago that I started to learn it.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks clarity. Adding 'that' connects the two clauses properly, making the sentence grammatically correct and clearer in meaning.

× On that time I show my talent and I have a mastery of playing musical instrument which is called center.

✓ At that time, I showed my talent and I had mastery of playing a musical instrument which is called the 'center'.

The phrase 'On that time' should be 'At that time'. The verbs 'show' and 'have' should be in the past tense 'showed' and 'had' to match the past time reference. Also, 'a musical instrument' needs the article 'a'. The name of the instrument should be in quotes or italicised to indicate it is a specific term.

× Actually, since I have a hectic lifestyle and tight schedule so I prefer to work as a nurse.

✓ Actually, since I have a hectic lifestyle and a tight schedule, I prefer to work as a nurse.

The conjunction 'so' is redundant after 'since' and should be removed. Also, 'tight schedule' needs the article 'a' before it. The sentence flows better without 'so' in this context.

× In the future, I prefer to immigrate in foreign country and work in a hospital.

✓ In the future, I prefer to immigrate to a foreign country and work in a hospital.

The correct preposition after 'immigrate' is 'to', not 'in'. Also, 'foreign country' requires the article 'a' before it.

× I like to play music for my free time and entertainment because it helps me to get relaxed and recharges my battery and I can focus on.

✓ I like to play music in my free time for entertainment because it helps me to relax, recharge my energy, and focus better.

The phrase 'for my free time' is incorrect; 'in my free time' is the correct expression. 'Helps me to get relaxed' should be 'helps me to relax'. 'Recharges my battery' is an informal expression; 'recharge my energy' is clearer. The phrase 'I can focus on' is incomplete and should be rephrased to 'focus better' or similar.

× Yes, my siblings have their talent and they want to pursue playing music and nowadays they attended lots of classes and I believe that they have a stunning skills in playing different musical instruments.

✓ Yes, my siblings have their talents and they want to pursue playing music. Nowadays, they attend lots of classes and I believe that they have stunning skills in playing different musical instruments.

The word 'talent' should be plural 'talents' to agree with 'siblings'. 'Attended' should be present tense 'attend' to match 'nowadays'. 'A stunning skills' is incorrect; 'skills' is plural and should not have 'a' before it.