Talents— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 文法と表現の自然さを向上させるために、'mobility skills'の使い方を見直し、より適切な表現を使いましょう。また、'shoot very strong shoot'は冗長で不自然なので、簡潔で正確な表現に改善してください。

Example: I am good at physical activities like playing soccer, and I can shoot the ball very powerfully.

Suggestion: 'mastered this mobility skills'の文法が誤っているため、正しい単数・複数形の使い分けと自然な表現に直しましょう。また、理由と行動をつなぐ接続詞を使い、文の流れを滑らかにしてください。

Example: I developed this skill when I was a child because I loved being active, so I often played outside.

Suggestion: 否定的な意見を述べる際に、より自然な表現を使いましょう。'future works'は不自然なので単数形にし、'mobility skill'の前に冠詞を加え、文全体の流れを改善してください。

Example: I don't think my talent will be useful for my future job because physical skills are not very important in most office jobs.

Suggestion: 'my sister loving active'は文法的に誤りなので、正しい現在形の動詞を使いましょう。また、理由と結果をつなぐ接続詞を使い、文をより自然にしてください。

Example: Yes, I think my sister has the same talent because she loves being active and even won a Japanese swimming tournament.

× I have a great mobility skills such as learning or playing soccer.

✓ I have great mobility skills such as learning or playing soccer.

'Skills' is plural, so the article 'a' should not be used before it. 'A' is used with singular countable nouns, but 'skills' is plural here, so it should be omitted.

× When I was a child, I mastered this mobility skills because I loved being active, so I often played outside.

✓ When I was a child, I mastered these mobility skills because I loved being active, so I often played outside.

'Skills' is plural, so the demonstrative pronoun should be 'these' instead of 'this' which is singular.

× Maybe I think that my talent cannot be helpful for my future works because mobility skill is not important to work on company.

✓ Maybe I think that my talent cannot be helpful for my future work because mobility skills are not important to work in a company.

'Works' is incorrect here; 'work' is an uncountable noun referring to employment. Also, 'mobility skill' should be plural 'mobility skills' to match the context. Additionally, 'work on company' is incorrect preposition usage; it should be 'work in a company.'

× Maybe I think that my talent cannot be helpful for my future works because mobility skill is not important to work on company.

✓ Maybe I think that my talent cannot be helpful for my future work because mobility skills are not important to work in a company.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect in the phrase 'work on company.' The correct preposition is 'in' when referring to working inside a company.

× Yes, I think my sister has the same talent because my sister loving active too and she could win the Japanese tournament in swimming.

✓ Yes, I think my sister has the same talent because my sister loves being active too and she could win the Japanese tournament in swimming.

The verb 'loving' is incorrect here; it should be 'loves' to agree with the third person singular subject 'my sister.' Also, 'being active' is the correct expression rather than just 'active.'