Computers— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make your answer more coherent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating when you use a computer, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because / so / also). Reduce hesitations like “uh” and avoid vague phrasing such as “joining with computers.”

Example: I mainly use a computer for online classes because the screen is bigger and the platforms work better. Also, I use it to take and organize notes more easily, which helps me review lectures later.

Suggestion: Give a clear time phrase then add one specific detail. Use correct tense and cleaner linking words. Avoid fragmented sentences and unnecessary fillers like “so and.” Provide one concise supporting detail about what you did with the computer.

Example: The first time I used a computer was when I was six, after my father bought one for our family. I mainly learned basic games and simple programs, and later it helped me collaborate with classmates on small projects.

Suggestion: Give a clear, direct topic sentence answering the question and then support it with one specific reason and a brief example. Fix grammatical errors (use conditional tense correctly) and avoid vague phrases like “my world.”

Example: I think my life would be different but manageable if I didn’t have a computer. For example, I would rely more on books and my phone for studying, and I would meet classmates in person instead of using online platforms.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear condition and one specific consequence. Use correct grammar for hypothetical statements (second conditional) and avoid fillers. Keep to one or two sentences maximum and link ideas with “because” or “so.”

Example: It would be difficult for me to use a computer if I hadn’t learned it when I was young, because I might struggle with basic skills and software. Right now, however, I don’t face any major difficulties.

× I would use computers, uh, because of my online classes, uh, which is I couldn't attend in my mobile phone or tablet joining with computers help me make some notes.

✓ I would use a computer because of my online classes, which I couldn't attend on my mobile phone or tablet; joining on a computer helps me take notes.

Errors: incorrect article use ('computers' -> 'a computer' to match singular general use) and preposition/structure problems. Use 'a computer' when referring to using one device in general contexts. Use 'on' for platforms (attend on my phone/tablet). 'Joining on a computer helps me take notes' clarifies subject-verb and uses 'take notes' which is idiomatic. Also removed filler words and corrected sentence structure.

× When I was 6 my father bought us a computer which is also helps me with teamwork.

✓ When I was six, my father bought us a computer, which also helped me with teamwork.

The relative clause has incorrect verb form: 'which is also helps' mixes present and base verb. Use past tense 'helped' to match 'bought' and the time frame (past). Also add comma after the time phrase and before the nonrestrictive relative clause for clarity.

× So and I started playing with computer.

✓ So I started playing with the computer.

Article error and awkward conjunction: use 'the computer' to refer to the previously mentioned device. Remove redundant 'and' after 'So' and ensure tense remains past 'started playing.'

× My world, I don't think there any changes would be because I learned to live without computer and it's OK for me.

✓ In my opinion, I don't think there would be any changes because I learned to live without a computer and it's okay for me.

Word order and 'there be' structure were incorrect: 'I don't think there any changes would be' is ungrammatical. Correct form is 'I don't think there would be any changes.' Also add article 'a computer' and rephrase 'my world' to 'in my opinion' for naturalness. Use 'okay' not 'OK' for consistency.

× Uh, if I didn't learn playing computer in a young age, I think it can be disadvantage for me playing with computer.

✓ If I hadn't learned to use a computer at a young age, I think it would be a disadvantage for me to use a computer.

Incorrect verb pattern: 'learn playing computer' should be 'learned to use a computer' (learn + infinitive). Also use past perfect 'hadn't learned' to match the conditional past context. Change 'can be disadvantage' to 'would be a disadvantage' for correct modal and article. Use 'at a young age' for idiomatic expression.

× Uh, in present day, uh, I don't think there's any.

✓ Nowadays, I don't think there is any problem.

Fragment and awkward phrase: 'in present day' should be 'nowadays' or 'at present.' The original 'I don't think there's any' is a sentence fragment; specify 'any problem' to complete the idea. Use present tense 'is' for current situation.