Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using correct grammar and avoiding repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add specific details. For example, you can say: "Yes, I remember an advertisement about a new drug for breast cancer that was very impactful because breast cancer is a serious issue for many women."

Example: Yes, I remember an advertisement about a new drug for breast cancer that was very impactful because breast cancer is a serious issue for many women.

Suggestion: Improve your answer by using linking words and more specific details. Also, avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, you can say: "Yes, I often see advertisements on public transport. For instance, last week I noticed an ad for a new jewelry shop, which caught my attention because I like jewelry."

Example: Yes, I often see advertisements on public transport. For instance, last week I noticed an ad for a new jewelry shop, which caught my attention because I like jewelry.

Suggestion: Try to speak more fluently and clearly without hesitation. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. For example: "Yes, I like advertisements because they inform me about important products, such as new medicines that can help with illnesses."

Example: Yes, I like advertisements because they inform me about important products, such as new medicines that can help with illnesses.

Suggestion: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure. Start with a clear statement and add specific details. For example: "I prefer advertisements about medical treatments because, as a pharmacist, I am interested in new drugs that can cure serious illnesses."

Example: I prefer advertisements about medical treatments because, as a pharmacist, I am interested in new drugs that can cure serious illnesses.

Suggestion: Make your answer more coherent and avoid repetition. Use linking words and specific examples. For example: "Yes, I often see many advertisements on my phone, especially on apps like Instagram, Facebook, and Snapchat. These ads usually promote new apps that offer various features."

Example: Yes, I often see many advertisements on my phone, especially on apps like Instagram, Facebook, and Snapchat. These ads usually promote new apps that offer various features.

× Yes, as there are an advertisement all over the country where I lived at about new drug was was discovered to treat breast cancer as it was a difficult issue that faced the the woman in this world.

✓ Yes, as there was an advertisement all over the country where I lived about a new drug that was discovered to treat breast cancer, as it was a difficult issue that faced the women in this world.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'are' with the singular noun 'advertisement' (should be 'was'). Also, 'new drug' needs an article 'a'. The phrase 'the the woman' should be plural 'the women' to match the context. These are singular/plural agreement errors and article usage errors.

× Yes, as there are an advertisement all over the country where I lived at about new drug was was discovered to treat breast cancer as it was a difficult issue that faced the the woman in this world.

✓ Yes, as there was an advertisement all over the country where I lived about a new drug that was discovered to treat breast cancer, as it was a difficult issue that faced the women in this world.

The phrase 'at about new drug' is incorrect; it should be 'about a new drug' to correctly use the indefinite article before a singular countable noun.

× Yes I do as there is a lot of advertising in the transportation.

✓ Yes, I do, as there is a lot of advertising in transportation.

The word 'transportation' here is used in a general sense and does not need the definite article 'the'. Using 'the transportation' is incorrect in this context.

× So last week I saw an advertisement about the a new shop that show a collection of jewelry, so it was a good thing for me.

✓ So last week I saw an advertisement about a new shop that shows a collection of jewelry, so it was a good thing for me.

The phrase 'the a new shop' incorrectly uses two articles together; only 'a' is needed. Also, 'show' should be 'shows' to agree with singular subject 'shop'.

× So last week I saw an advertisement about the a new shop that show a collection of jewelry, so it was a good thing for me.

✓ So last week I saw an advertisement about a new shop that shows a collection of jewelry, so it was a good thing for me.

The verb 'show' should be in third person singular form 'shows' to agree with the singular subject 'shop'.

× Yes, I do as advertisements, uh, it uh, maybe, uh, guide you for the thing that, uh, you are important of and it's a good way for the advertise of a new product or new drug that, uh, is discovered for an illness or like that.

✓ Yes, I do, as advertisements maybe guide you to the things that are important to you, and it's a good way to advertise a new product or new drug that is discovered for an illness or similar.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'advertisements, uh, it' mixing plural subject with singular pronoun 'it'. Also, 'guide you for the thing that you are important of' is incorrect; it should be 'guide you to the things that are important to you'. 'Advertise' is used as a noun incorrectly; it should be 'to advertise'. These are pronoun and preposition usage errors.

× Yes, I do as advertisements, uh, it uh, maybe, uh, guide you for the thing that, uh, you are important of and it's a good way for the advertise of a new product or new drug that, uh, is discovered for an illness or like that.

✓ Yes, I do, as advertisements maybe guide you to the things that are important to you, and it's a good way to advertise a new product or new drug that is discovered for an illness or similar.

The prepositions 'for' and 'of' are incorrectly used in 'guide you for the thing that you are important of' and 'the advertise of a new product'. Correct prepositions are 'guide you to the things that are important to you' and 'to advertise a new product'.

× I like advertising, uh, modules of, uh, treatment as I'm a pharmacist.

✓ I like advertising modules of treatment as I'm a pharmacist.

The comma after 'advertising' and 'uh' are unnecessary. The phrase 'modules of treatment' is acceptable but could be clearer as 'treatment modules'. No preposition error here but sentence can be smoother without filler words.

× So, uh, I'm very interested of, uh, the new drugs that, uh, would, uh, recover or treat an serious illness or issues.

✓ So, I'm very interested in the new drugs that would recover or treat serious illnesses or issues.

The phrase 'interested of' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'interested in'. Also, 'an serious illness' should be 'a serious illness' and 'illness or issues' should be plural 'illnesses or issues' for consistency.

× So, uh, I'm very interested of, uh, the new drugs that, uh, would, uh, recover or treat an serious illness or issues.

✓ So, I'm very interested in the new drugs that would recover or treat serious illnesses or issues.

The phrase 'an serious illness or issues' mixes singular and plural incorrectly. It should be 'serious illnesses or issues' to maintain plural consistency.

× Yes, I do as when I when I'm using my phone on some apps like Instagram or Facebook or Snapchat, there's a lot of advertisements about new apps that modify a lot of a lot of.

✓ Yes, I do, as when I'm using my phone on some apps like Instagram, Facebook, or Snapchat, there are a lot of advertisements about new apps that modify many things.

The phrase 'modify a lot of a lot of' is incomplete and unclear. Also, 'there's' (there is) should be 'there are' to agree with plural 'advertisements'. The preposition 'on some apps' is acceptable but could be 'in some apps' for better usage.