Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (what the ad was for, why it was memorable, and one concrete memory). Use linking words (for example, because, and, also) and avoid unclear phrases like "bread washing." Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Example: A clear answer: “Yes. One childhood advertisement that impressed me was for a fizzy drink called Pot Drink. I remember it because it used a very catchy jingle that everyone sang along to, and the ad showed kids happily sharing the drink, which made it feel cheerful. Because of the tune, I can still hum it now.”

Suggestion: Organize your response: begin with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific example. Reduce filler words (umm, uh) and correct vocabulary (say ‘train’ not ‘trend’). Use linking words like “for example” and be specific about placement and appearance of ads. Keep it concise.

Example: A clear answer: “Yes, I see many ads on public transport. Inside trains there are posters above the seats and stickers on the walls and doors, which are hard to miss. For example, when I rode a train in Kuala Lumpur I saw large Foodpanda adverts with bold colours and logos next to the doors.”

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion sentence then support it with one or two specific reasons and an example. Improve grammar (I don’t really like adverts; they can be annoying) and use linking words (because, for example, when). Avoid repeating words like “actually.”

Example: A clear answer: “I don’t really like advertisements because they often interrupt what I’m watching. For example, when I watch long videos on Facebook, mid-roll ads pop up and break the flow, which ruins my enjoyment.”

Suggestion: State your preference clearly and give a specific reason and example. Replace vague phrases (“board show cars”, “the world with a very simple”) with correct terms (billboards, simple text). Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid fillers.

Example: A clear answer: “I prefer simple, catchy adverts because they communicate the message quickly. For example, in Kuala Lumpur I often see billboards with bold pictures and just a few words, which makes them easy to understand and memorable.”

Suggestion: Answer directly, then give two clear examples (phone and computer). Improve grammar (ads/videos pop up, websites show pop-ups) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like “for example” and “on the other hand.” Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Example: A clear answer: “Yes, I see a lot of ads on both my phone and computer. For example, while browsing Facebook on my phone video ads often play automatically, and on my computer many websites show pop-up ads in the middle of the page, which I find annoying.”

× Yes, I remember when I was a kid, there is a very catchy advertisement that like make a very good impression on me, which is the pot drink.

✓ Yes, I remember when I was a kid, there was a very catchy advertisement that made a very good impression on me, which was for Pot Drink.

The sentence mixes present tense ('is') and past context ('when I was a kid'). Use past tense 'was' and past 'made' to match the time frame. Also change 'which is the pot drink' to 'which was for Pot Drink' to clarify the object of the advertisement and maintain past reference.

× So pot drink is like a carbonated soft drink and then is a very catchy because of the lyrics when he play, the advertisement is not just about showing the drink, but it's also sing a song along with it.

✓ Pot Drink is a carbonated soft drink and it was very catchy because of the lyrics when it played; the advertisement did not just show the drink, but also featured a song.

Third-person singular subjects need appropriate verbs: 'it was' instead of 'is a very catchy' (past context) and 'when it played' not 'when he play'. Also use consistent past tense 'did not just show' and 'featured' to match the recalled memory.

× So it was like a bread washing.

✓ So it was like brainwashing.

The phrase 'bread washing' is a incorrect word choice and makes no sense in context. The intended idiom is 'brainwashing', meaning the advertisement stuck in the mind. Correct the lexical choice to convey intended meaning.

× Yes, actually I see a lot of advertisements on trains, so inside the train, especially umm, just beside the train, there will put some of the logos behind, beside the chair and also on the wall of the train so that it's kind of catchy.

✓ Yes, actually I saw a lot of advertisements on trains; inside the train, especially beside the seats, there were logos behind and beside the seats and also on the walls, which made it quite eye-catching.

The speaker refers to a past experience ('one time when I take a trend in Kuala Lumpur'), so use past tense 'saw' and 'were'. Also correct prepositions and nouns: 'beside the seats' not 'beside the chair', and 'walls' not 'wall'. 'Eye-catching' is a better adjective than 'catchy' in this context.

× For example, I remember that one time when I take a trend in Kuala Lumpur, there is a design about the food Panda, which is a very famous uh foods in.

✓ For example, I remember one time when I took a train in Kuala Lumpur, there was a design for Foodpanda, which is a very famous food delivery service there.

Use past tense 'took' to match the past event. Correct 'trend' to 'train' (spelling) and 'design about the food Panda' to 'design for Foodpanda'. Also complete the sentence by specifying 'food delivery service there' to make it grammatical and clear.

× In my opinion, I don't really favorite advertisement because of the sometimes this can be really annoying.

✓ In my opinion, I don't really like advertisements because sometimes they can be really annoying.

'Favorite' is not a verb here; use 'like'. Remove 'the' before 'sometimes' and use plural 'advertisements' and 'they' to match plural subject. This corrects verb choice and subject-verb agreement.

× For example whenever I watch a videos in Facebook, especially the long videos, sometime the middle they will force the user to see their advertisement which I'm actually not interested in and it will actually ruin my mood of seeing that long video.

✓ For example, whenever I watch videos on Facebook, especially long ones, sometimes in the middle they force users to watch advertisements that I am not interested in, and it ruins my mood while watching the long video.

Use plural 'videos' and preposition 'on Facebook'. Use 'sometimes' and correct word order 'in the middle'. 'Force users to watch advertisements' is clearer and use present tense consistently for habitual action ('they force', 'it ruins'). Replace 'will actually' with simple present for habitual statements.

× Umm, I prefer the advertising that is more catchy and in a more simple way.

✓ I prefer advertisements that are catchier and presented in a simpler way.

Use comparative 'catchier' and 'simpler' for adjectives. Change 'advertising' to 'advertisements' (noun) and use plural 'that are' to agree. 'Presented in a simpler way' is a clearer phrasing.

× So for example, sometime when I'm, uh, shopping around in the Kuala Lumpur city area, I often saw there is a lot of, uh, board show cars like different ads.

✓ For example, sometimes when I'm shopping around Kuala Lumpur city centre, I often see a lot of billboards and bus ads showing different advertisements.

Use 'sometimes' and present tense 'see' for habitual action (or 'saw' if referencing past). Correct 'board show cars' to 'billboards and bus ads' for intended meaning. Use 'city centre' or 'city area' correctly without 'the' if referring generally.

× And then sometime is the design is very catchy, but the world with a very simple, which definitely catch my attention.

✓ And sometimes the design is very catchy, but the wording is very simple, which definitely catches my attention.

Fix pronoun/word choice: 'world' should be 'wording' or 'words'. Use 'sometimes' and subject-verb agreement 'catches'. Ensure clarity by saying 'the wording is very simple'.

× Yes, I usually see advertisement when I'm on my phone or computer.

✓ Yes, I usually see advertisements when I'm on my phone or computer.

Use plural 'advertisements' to be natural. Present tense 'usually see' is appropriate for habitual action.

× So for example, on the phone, the most common example is uh, when I'm browsing the Facebook.

✓ For example, on my phone, the most common case is when I'm browsing Facebook.

Remove the definite article before 'Facebook' and use 'on my phone' instead of 'on the phone' for personal device. 'Case' or 'example' fits better than repeating 'example'.

× So the meet ads video will just suddenly pops up.

✓ The ads' videos will just suddenly pop up.

'Meet ads video' is unclear; probably 'the ad videos' or 'the ads' videos'. Use plural verb form 'pop up' to match plural subject, not 'pops up'. Alternatively, 'an ad video will suddenly pop up' if singular.

× Well, for the computer, whenever I receive some of the website, they will have the advertisement come out in the middle of the of the searching.

✓ On a computer, when I visit some websites, advertisements pop up in the middle of my browsing session.

Use 'visit websites' not 'receive some of the website'. Remove duplicate 'of the of the'. Use 'browsing' instead of 'searching' if referring to viewing pages. Keep present tense for habitual action.