Friends— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài dòng và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'played with together' không chính xác. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp.

Example: Yes, I have a close friend whom I met in high school. We have known each other for about four years and we still maintain a strong friendship.

Suggestion: Bạn nên sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ như 'that that'. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng từ vựng phù hợp và chính xác hơn, ví dụ 'team-based video game matches'.

Example: I usually invite my friends to a local cyber cafe where we participate in team-based video game matches. This activity helps us strengthen our bond and is one of my most memorable experiences.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ như 'that one, that one'. Bạn nên dùng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lặp và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn.

Example: My friends and I usually meet at one friend's house, which is very spacious and comfortable. We can do many activities there, and he is one of the most generous people I know.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, câu không hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và tránh những câu không hoàn chỉnh hoặc lặp lại không cần thiết.

Example: Not really. We usually communicate through video calls and spend most of our time online together.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời thiếu sự tích cực và không rõ ràng về quan điểm. Bạn nên thể hiện ý kiến rõ ràng hơn và dùng từ vựng tích cực, tránh dùng từ như 'no special value'.

Example: Friends are very important to me because they provide support and companionship throughout life.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời có lỗi lặp từ và cấu trúc câu chưa rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lặp từ và diễn đạt ý rõ ràng hơn.

Example: I prefer spending time with one close friend because I can share my thoughts and feelings more openly than in a group.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời có ý tốt nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và câu chưa hoàn chỉnh như 'we should spend some good'. Bạn nên dùng câu hoàn chỉnh và chính xác hơn.

Example: Yes, I would definitely invite friends to my home for birthdays or celebrations. Spending time together helps us create wonderful memories.

× Still we have played with together for about four years and and it's still we are still in a great relationship.

✓ Still, we played together for about four years and we are still in a great relationship.

The sentence incorrectly uses the present perfect tense 'have played' with 'still' and 'for about four years' which suggests a completed action in the past. The simple past 'played' is more appropriate here to indicate the action happened in the past. Also, 'played with together' is redundant; 'played together' is correct.

× We usually attend in a team based video Game Match and I have to say that that is definitely one of my most memorable activities in my life.

✓ We usually participate in a team-based video game match and I have to say that that is definitely one of my most memorable activities in my life.

The verb 'attend' is incorrectly used with the preposition 'in'. The correct verb for joining a competition is 'participate in'. Also, 'team based' should be hyphenated as 'team-based' and 'Game Match' should be lowercase as 'game match'.

× Really we can do various kind of activities there.

✓ Really, we can do various kinds of activities there.

The phrase 'various kind' is incorrect because 'various' implies plural, so it should be 'various kinds' to agree in number.

× Usually me and my friends often gather around that one, that one friend's house which is extremely rich and spacious.

✓ Usually, my friends and I often gather at one friend's house which is extremely rich and spacious.

The subject pronoun 'I' should be used instead of 'me' when it is the subject of the sentence. Also, 'gather around' is better replaced with 'gather at' when referring to a location.

× We usually meet each other up through a video calling platform, which is the place where we spend most of the time of our day.

✓ We usually meet each other through a video calling platform, which is the place where we spend most of our day.

The phrasal verb 'meet up' does not require 'each other' and 'meet each other up' is incorrect. Also, 'most of the time of our day' is awkward; 'most of our day' is more natural.

× In addition, we are somewhat chronically online and we all have this. This commenting is the.

✓ In addition, we are somewhat chronically online and we all have this habit of commenting.

The original sentence is incomplete and fragmented. It needs to be restructured to form a complete and coherent sentence.

× Well to me they are just individuals who I met throughout my life.

✓ Well, to me they are just individuals whom I have met throughout my life.

The relative pronoun 'who' should be 'whom' as it is the object of the verb 'met'. Also, present perfect 'have met' is more appropriate to indicate experience up to now.

× They can either be annoying or supportive, but overall they are just the people that I met and I hope no special value.

✓ They can either be annoying or supportive, but overall they are just the people that I have met and I hold no special value for them.

The phrase 'I hope no special value' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'I hold no special value for them' to express the intended meaning. Also, present perfect 'have met' is better here.

× Personally I would just need a close friend to me and that's all I need because because that friend is the one who I can share my thoughts and feelings through feelings and with the whole group is not really that meaningful anymore.

✓ Personally, I would just need a close friend, and that's all I need because that friend is the one with whom I can share my thoughts and feelings, and being with the whole group is not really that meaningful anymore.

The sentence has repeated 'because' and awkward phrasing 'share my thoughts and feelings through feelings'. Also, 'who I can share' should be 'with whom I can share' for correct preposition use. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× Well, sure, whether it is a birthday party or some kind of celebrations, I would be more than happy to spend time with them.

✓ Well, sure, whether it is a birthday party or some kind of celebration, I would be more than happy to spend time with them.

The plural 'celebrations' is less appropriate here; 'celebration' as a singular noun fits better with 'some kind of' which is singular.

× After all, they are my friends and being friends means we should spend some good. We will create some good memories together, right?

✓ After all, they are my friends and being friends means we should spend some good time together. We will create some good memories together, right?

The phrase 'spend some good' is incomplete and needs the noun 'time' to complete the meaning.