Friends— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct pronoun usage. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific example to support your point. Use linking words (e.g., since, so) to make timeline clear.

Example: Yes. I have one close friend whom I have known since primary school. Over the years we grew closer — for example, she helped me prepare for my high‑school exams — so we now share almost everything and always support each other when we need help.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence, limit to two supporting details, and use linking words to connect ideas. Be specific about types of games or shops to add richness.

Example: I usually play multiplayer video games with my friends. Besides gaming, we often go to nearby shopping malls to try on clothes and buy items for each other, especially at affordable fashion stores.

Suggestion: Start directly and avoid filler phrases. Use linking words (because, so) and be concise. Correct awkward phrasing and finish the sentence clearly. Add one specific detail about lunchtime routine.

Example: We usually meet at school because we study there. For example, we arrange to meet in the cafeteria at lunchtime even when our classes are different, and I always look forward to that short break together.

Suggestion: Avoid unclear idioms ('actual bird') and correct grammar. Give a clear topic sentence and list two or three typical places with linking words. Be specific about activities at each place.

Example: Yes, I enjoy going out with my friends. For instance, we often walk in the park to chat, visit the beach to relax, or explore shopping streets to try different street foods.

Suggestion: Good content and reasons but fix minor repetition and grammar. Start with a concise topic sentence, then give one clear reason with a specific example or comparison.

Example: Friends are extremely important to me because they support me in difficult times. For example, classmates understand school pressure better than my parents, so they can give practical advice when I feel stressed.

Suggestion: Correct the mistaken word choice and avoid fillers. Use a clear topic sentence and give a specific reason and brief example. Replace 'sending her' with correct phrase and remove repeated words.

Example: I prefer one‑to‑one time with a close friend because I value deep conversations. For example, I can talk about personal issues more openly with one friend who shares my interests than with a larger group.

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid fillers. State the main point, use linking words, and include a specific activity you do at home to illustrate how it strengthens friendships.

Example: Yes, I invite friends to my home for special occasions like birthdays. We play board games, cook together, and these shared activities help us relax and strengthen our relationships.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use clearer linking words (formerly/now). Provide one concrete example of a new place where you meet friends now.

Example: Yes. Formerly I met friends only at school in class, but now I meet people in public places. For example, I often make friends at community events and local cafés, which I didn’t do before.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence, correct awkward phrasing and use linking words to list reasons. Give two specific factors (noise, atmosphere) and a concise example.

Example: Some places are better for meetings because noise and atmosphere affect conversation quality. For instance, a noisy fast‑food restaurant is unsuitable for serious talks, whereas a quiet café or meeting room is more appropriate.

× Yes I do. I have a very good friend that I have known her for a very very long time.

✓ Yes, I do. I have a very good friend whom I have known for a very, very long time.

The sentence uses both 'that' and the object pronoun 'her' together, which is redundant. Use 'whom' or 'that' with no extra pronoun. 'Whom' is correct as the object of 'have known'. Also add commas and a second 'very' separated by a comma for natural rhythm.

× I I have known her since primary school and she has been with me all along to high school now and she is extremely caring and we talked almost everything about our lives to each other and we always stand by each other's side when in need.

✓ I have known her since primary school and she has been with me all the way through high school until now. She is extremely caring, and we talk about almost everything in our lives to each other; we always stand by each other's side when in need.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verb forms: 'I I' duplicate, 'all along to high school now' is unnatural, 'we talked' is past tense but context needs present simple or present perfect for ongoing habit. Change 'talked' to 'talk' and rephrase for clarity. Use punctuation to separate clauses.

× ...we talked almost everything about our lives to each other...

✓ ...we talk about almost everything in our lives to each other...

'Almost everything' is fine but verb tense must match ongoing habit: use present simple 'talk' not past 'talked'. Also place 'about' before 'almost everything' for correct word order.

× I usually play video games with my friends because almost all of my friends are very interested in video games and besides that we also will hang out in shopping malls and pick out the best clothes for each other and buy them.

✓ I usually play video games with my friends because almost all of them are very interested in video games. Besides that, we also hang out in shopping malls, pick out the best clothes for each other, and buy them.

'Will hang out' implies future but the question asks about habitual actions; use present simple 'hang out'. Remove redundancy 'my friends' repeated; use 'them'. Add commas for clarity.

× I often meet with my friend in our school because obviously we live, we study in the same school and we also meet in lunchtime because we have different classes that we are not together.

✓ I often meet my friend at our school because we obviously live and study at the same school. We also meet at lunchtime because we have different classes and are not together during lessons.

Use 'meet my friend' (no 'with'), and 'at school' is the correct preposition. 'In lunchtime' should be 'at lunchtime'. Rephrase 'that we are not together' to 'and are not together during lessons' for clarity.

× But we will meet at lunchtime and have lunch together and it's quite pleasant It's like one of the most things I expect in school in the.

✓ We meet at lunchtime and have lunch together; it's quite pleasant. It's one of the things I look forward to most at school.

Original has tense inconsistency ('will meet') and incomplete/awkward phrasing. Use present simple for routines and restructure the final clause to 'look forward to most at school' for natural expression.

× Yes, of course, I'm an actual bird and I do like socializing with my friends.

✓ Yes, of course, I'm a social person and I do like socializing with my friends.

'Actual bird' is likely a misuse or literal translation; replace with 'a social person' which conveys intended meaning. 'An' before consonant sound 'social' should be 'a'.

× No matter it is a park, it is along the beach or some shopping malls or some of or we can try out some street food.

✓ It doesn't matter whether it's a park, along the beach, or a shopping mall; we can even try some street food.

Original uses 'No matter' incorrectly and has fragments ('some of'). Use 'whether' for alternatives and simplify list. 'Along the beach' should be 'by the beach' or 'along the beach'; compress to natural phrasing.

× Friends are extremely important to me not only because they support me when I whenever I am in need, but also they are the peers who can understand me the most.

✓ Friends are extremely important to me not only because they support me whenever I am in need, but also because they are the peers who can understand me best.

Remove duplicated 'I', add 'because' for parallel structure, and use 'best' rather than 'the most' after 'understand me' for natural phrasing.

× Compared to my parents, my peers have similar pressure and conditions we meet so they can understand better.

✓ Compared to my parents, my peers face similar pressures and situations, so they can understand me better.

'Pressure' should be plural 'pressures' and 'conditions we meet' is unclear—use 'situations'. Add 'me' after 'understand' and insert comma before 'so'.

× Honestly, I prefer to spend time with one friend instead of a group of friends because I think friendship is not about, umm, the quality, but it's more about the quality.

✓ Honestly, I prefer to spend time with one friend instead of a group because I think friendship is not about quantity, but about quality.

Original repeats 'quality' and misuses 'the quality'. Use 'quantity' vs 'quality' to show contrast. Remove filler and redundant words.

× If I have a friend that I really, you know, having similarities with, I can spend a lot of time with her instead of sending her with a group of people that don't understand.

✓ If I have a friend with whom I share many similarities, I can spend a lot of time with her instead of putting her in a group of people who don't understand her.

Use correct relative pronoun and verb forms: 'having similarities' should be 'with whom I share similarities'. 'Sending her with a group' is wrong; use 'putting her in a group'. Use 'who' for people and include 'her' after 'understand' for clarity.

× Yes, I would invite friends to my home, especially in special occasions like my birthdays when we can umm, play so much games together and spend a quality time with each other.

✓ Yes, I would invite friends to my home, especially on special occasions like my birthday, when we can play lots of games together and spend quality time with each other.

Use 'on' for occasions ('on my birthday'), singular 'birthday' unless plural intended, 'play so much games' should be 'play lots of games' and 'spend quality time' (no article 'a').

× And it's quite nice to be together in a personal space which will umm enhance the relationship and also keeping people connected.

✓ It's quite nice to be together in a personal space, which enhances the relationship and also keeps people connected.

Use present simple 'enhances' and 'keeps' to describe general effects. 'Keeping' should be 'keeps' to match subject-verb structure.

× I used to meet my friends only in school and it only happened when we are in the same classroom.

✓ I used to meet my friends only at school, and it only happened when we were in the same classroom.

Mix of past and present tenses: 'used to' requires past tense 'were' not 'are'. Use 'at school' preposition.

× But now times change. I have become more extroverted, so I will actually go out into the public space to make friends.

✓ But now times have changed. I have become more extroverted, so I actually go out into public spaces to make friends.

Use present perfect 'have changed' for change over time; 'will actually go out' implies future—use present simple 'go out' to describe current habit. 'Public space' pluralized to 'public spaces' sounds more natural.

× This is because the environments will affect the quality of meeting in a significant way.

✓ This is because the environment affects the quality of a meeting in a significant way.

Use 'environment' singular to refer to setting in general, and 'affects' present simple matches general statement. Use 'a meeting' or 'meetings' for correctness.

× Imagine if you talk some serious business like in a McDonald's like it it.

✓ Imagine trying to discuss serious business in a McDonald's.

Original has redundant words and awkward structure. Use 'trying to discuss serious business' for natural phrasing and remove repeated 'like it it'.

× It doesn't feel serious at all because the loud background music and also the cheap food it will make you disturb.

✓ It doesn't feel serious at all because the loud background music and the cheap food will distract you.

'Make you disturb' is ungrammatical; use 'distract you'. Remove redundant 'also' and reposition verbs: 'will distract you' is correct future effect, or 'distract you' for general statement.