Challenges— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to give a clear and direct answer first, then add specific reasons or examples. Avoid filler words like 'you know' and unclear phrases like 'dissolving isn't helping'. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Example: I think math is the most challenging subject at school because it requires a lot of problem-solving skills. For example, understanding complex formulas can be difficult, and sometimes I struggle to apply them correctly.

Suggestion: Provide a clear opinion at the start and explain it with specific reasons. Avoid unclear expressions like '5050' and 'step on your comfort zone'. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Example: Yes, I like to challenge myself because it helps me grow. For instance, stepping out of my comfort zone allows me to learn new skills and gain confidence.

Suggestion: Answer directly and clearly, then support your opinion with specific details. Avoid repetitive phrases and filler words. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: I prefer a balanced life because too many challenges can be exhausting. Therefore, I try to enjoy my life while facing challenges that help me improve.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your methods with specific steps. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'first', 'then', and 'so' to organize your answer.

Example: When I face challenges, I first stay calm to avoid stress. Then, I think carefully about the problem and find the best solution to solve it effectively.

× I know that many people are, you know, struggling with this subject.

✓ I know that many people struggle with this subject.

The original sentence uses the present continuous tense 'are struggling' which is acceptable but less appropriate here. The simple present 'struggle' is better to express a general truth or habitual action, which fits the context better.

× It's, it's really hard and dissolving isn't, you know, helping.

✓ It's really hard and solving it isn't helping.

The word 'dissolving' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'solving'. Also, 'solving it' is the correct phrase to indicate dealing with the problem. The preposition 'isn't helping' is correct, but the verb needed correction.

× Is it helping me?

✓ Is it helping me?

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the context, so no correction is needed.

× I would say 5050, I wanna challenge myself to be able to, you know, for me to go because it's really important that you step up.

✓ I would say fifty-fifty. I want to challenge myself to be able to go because it's really important that you step up.

The phrase '5050' should be written as 'fifty-fifty' to correctly express the idea of equal chances. Also, 'wanna' is informal and should be 'want to' in formal speech. The phrase 'for me to go' is awkward and should be simplified to 'to go'.

× You like to step on your comfort zone so that they'll be able to extend your wings.

✓ You like to step out of your comfort zone so that you'll be able to spread your wings.

The correct preposition is 'out of' when referring to leaving a comfort zone. Also, 'they'll' is incorrect as the subject is 'you'; it should be 'you'll'. The phrase 'extend your wings' is better expressed as 'spread your wings'.

× And I think it's really important to.

✓ And I think it's really important too.

The word 'to' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'too' to express 'also' or 'as well'.

× I think. I needed to, you know, balance because if you know there's so many challenges, it will drain you.

✓ I think I need to, you know, balance because if you know there are so many challenges, it will drain you.

The verb 'needed' is past tense but the context requires present tense 'need'. Also, 'there's' (there is) should be 'there are' because 'challenges' is plural.

× So I think it's important that it's balance.

✓ So I think it's important to have balance.

The phrase 'it's balance' is incorrect; it should be 'to have balance' to express the idea properly.

× You know, you're enjoying your your life and also challenge.

✓ You know, you're enjoying your life and also facing challenges.

The phrase 'and also challenge' is incomplete and incorrect. It should be 'and also facing challenges' to make sense. Also, the repeated word 'your' is a typo.

× It's important that you stay calm, you know how to handle your pressure, that it won't affect you, and you just need to think thoroughly and then solve it that.

✓ It's important that you stay calm, know how to handle your pressure so that it won't affect you, and think thoroughly before solving it.

The original sentence is a run-on and awkward. It needs to be broken down and restructured for clarity. 'You know how to handle your pressure' should be connected properly, and 'solve it that' is incorrect; it should be 'before solving it'.