Holidays— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and repetition. For example, mention the duration, activities, and what you enjoyed most in a logical order.

Example: Last summer, I went on a 10-day trip to Japan with my friends. We explored various cultural sites and enjoyed traditional Japanese food, which was a highlight of the trip.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations. Try to express your ideas clearly and directly. Use linking words to explain why you like holidays, and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

Example: Yes, I like holidays because they give me time to relax and recharge, which helps me prepare for upcoming challenges.

Suggestion: Focus on clarity and organisation. Begin with a clear statement of your favourite holiday, then describe specific traditions or activities you enjoy, using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid unclear phrases like 'insects burning'.

Example: As a Hong Konger, my favourite public holiday is Chinese New Year because I enjoy traditional activities such as lion dancing, dragon boat races, and tasting various festive foods.

Suggestion: Try to organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use correct vocabulary ('scrolling' instead of 'scoring') and linking words to connect your activities logically.

Example: During holidays, I usually spend time scrolling through social media and hanging out with friends. Additionally, since I enjoy football, I often play matches with them.

Suggestion: Make your answer more concise and clear. Start with a direct response, then explain your reason using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

Example: Yes, I prefer to stay at home during public holidays because the streets are usually crowded, making it difficult to enjoy outdoor activities.

Suggestion: Clarify your answer by using correct vocabulary ('leisurely' instead of 'literary') and structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid hesitations and repetitions.

Example: Personally, I prefer a leisurely holiday because it allows me to relax and do things I usually cannot do during busy workdays.

Suggestion: Express your preference clearly and avoid hesitations. Use appropriate vocabulary ('scrolling' instead of 'scoring') and avoid unclear phrases like 'annoying artists'. Provide reasons logically connected with linking words.

Example: I prefer a peaceful holiday because I enjoy reading books and scrolling through social media. Moreover, I like to avoid crowded places and noisy environments.

× there was a 10 days uh, trip with, with the boys

✓ there was a 10-day trip with the boys

The phrase 'a 10 days trip' is incorrect because 'days' is plural but preceded by 'a' which requires a singular noun or a singular adjective form. The correct form is 'a 10-day trip' where '10-day' acts as a compound adjective describing the trip.

× We experienced different cultures of Japan and maybe the food, umm and the others cultures.

✓ We experienced different cultures of Japan and maybe the food, umm and other cultures.

The phrase 'the others cultures' is incorrect because 'others' is a pronoun and should not be used before a noun. The correct form is 'other cultures' without 'the' and with 'other' as an adjective.

× holiday can have can let me have time to umm to myself up and well prepare for the next challenge

✓ holiday can let me have time to myself and prepare well for the next challenge

The phrase 'can have can let me have' is redundant and incorrect. The modal verb 'can' should be used once with the correct verb 'let' to express ability or permission. Also, 'prepare well' is the correct adverb placement.

× In my opinions, I'm I'm Hong Kongers, I really like the Chinese New Year holiday

✓ In my opinion, I'm a Hong Konger, I really like the Chinese New Year holiday

The phrase 'In my opinions' is incorrect because 'opinion' should be singular here. Also, 'I'm Hong Kongers' is incorrect because 'Hong Kongers' is plural; the singular form 'a Hong Konger' is needed.

× I experienced this at the culture of China that had maybe the insects burning, the lion dancing in the dragon boat

✓ I experienced the culture of China that had maybe the incense burning, the lion dancing, and the dragon boat races

The phrase 'experienced this at the culture' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'experienced the culture'. Also, 'insects burning' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'incense burning'. 'Dragon boat' should be 'dragon boat races' or 'dragon boat festival' for clarity.

× On the during the holidays usually scoring my phones, scoring social medias and maybe go hang out with my friends to play some.

✓ During the holidays, I usually scroll on my phone, check social media, and maybe go hang out with my friends to play some games.

The phrase 'On the during the holidays' is incorrect; 'During the holidays' is correct. 'Scoring my phones' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'scroll on my phone'. 'Social medias' is incorrect; 'social media' is uncountable and singular.

× I do like to spend my time on at home because during the public holidays there's so many people on the street

✓ I do like to spend my time at home because during the public holidays there are so many people on the street

The phrase 'spend my time on at home' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at home'. Also, 'there's so many people' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; it should be 'there are so many people'.

× there's so many people on the street, they're crowded and it's hard to experience different things because due to the the crowded people in the public venue.

✓ there are so many people on the street, it's crowded and it's hard to experience different things because of the crowd in the public venue.

'there's so many people' is incorrect; 'there are so many people' is correct for plural. 'They're crowded' is incorrect because 'they' refers to people and 'crowded' describes places; 'it's crowded' is correct. 'due to the the crowded people' is awkward; 'because of the crowd' is better.

× I pursued personally like a literary holiday because the main purpose of having a holiday of mine in my from my perspective, is to relax

✓ I personally prefer a leisurely holiday because the main purpose of having a holiday, from my perspective, is to relax

'I pursued personally like' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'I personally prefer'. 'literary holiday' is incorrect; the intended word is 'leisurely holiday'. The sentence structure is improved by repositioning phrases for clarity.

× From a pers perspective I do I want to have I prefer have a peaceful holiday because I personally like reading books and scoring social medias.

✓ From my perspective, I want to have, I prefer a peaceful holiday because I personally like reading books and scrolling social media.

'From a pers perspective' is incorrect; it should be 'From my perspective'. 'I do I want to have I prefer have' is redundant and ungrammatical; it should be simplified to 'I want to have, I prefer'. 'scoring social medias' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'scrolling social media'.